唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ: 'straight' -> 'stress') và thời gian động từ. Câu nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên (tối đa 3-4 câu), sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như 'relieve stress', 'lift my mood'. Loại bỏ tiếng ậm ừ (umm).

示例: Yes, I love singing because it helps relieve stress and lifts my mood. It also improves my vocal control and makes me feel more relaxed when I'm upset.

建议: Sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng, dùng thì chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Nêu rõ hoạt động bạn làm (karaoke, singing with friends) và kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh từ thừa như 'the the'.

示例: To be honest, I haven't had any professional singing lessons. I usually sing along to karaoke videos or sing with friends at music venues to relax and reduce stress.

建议: Chú ý ngữ pháp (chia động từ: 'support' -> 'supported'/'have always supported'), số danh từ (a small gathering), và hoàn thiện ý cuối cùng ('and more' không rõ nghĩa). Nên trình bày rõ lí do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể bằng 2-3 câu. Dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'for example'.

示例: I like to sing for my family and close friends because they have always supported and encouraged me. For example, I often perform at small family gatherings and birthday parties, which makes me feel comfortable and happy.

建议: Cải thiện tính chính xác và rõ ràng: tránh từ không phù hợp ('comprehend themselves' không tự nhiên). Thay bằng 'express themselves' hoặc 'discover their tastes'. Tránh lỗi từ ('bloblems' -> 'problems') và cấu trúc dư thừa. Sử dụng 2 câu ngắn, rõ ràng với liên từ như 'because' và 'for example'.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because songs often match their emotions and help them express themselves. Singing allows people to forget their problems for a while and feel more positive.

建议: Chú ý ngữ pháp ('it depends'), số nhiều/ít ('my friend' -> 'my friend’s' or 'one of my friends'), và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng. Tránh dùng 'whoever every single' lỗi ý. Hãy nêu rõ điều kiện bạn thích/không thích nghe và dùng liên từ như 'but' để đối chiếu.

示例: It depends. I enjoy listening to some people, especially a friend whose voice I find beautiful and whose musical taste matches mine. But if a singer sounds strained or is having an off day, I'm less inclined to listen.

建议: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản 'I haven't taken singing classes because I need to focus on core subjects like math and English for exams.' Tránh câu bị cắt ngang, loại bỏ 'uh' và lỗi từ ('as a consider' -> 'into consideration').

示例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes. I chose to focus on core subjects like math and English because I needed to prepare for important exams, so I didn't have time for music lessons.

× I am a big fan of singing because I think that singing can improve my vocal and reduce straight, make me feel relaxed and umm, improve my mood whenever I was upset.

✓ I am a big fan of singing because I think that singing can improve my vocals and reduce stress, make me feel relaxed, and improve my mood whenever I am upset.

Sử dụng tính từ/ trạng từ không đúng và lỗi từ vựng: 'vocal' nên dùng số nhiều 'vocals' hoặc 'vocal ability'; 'straight' is incorrect word, should be 'stress'. Also tense consistency: 'whenever I was upset' should be present 'I am upset' because statement is general. Punctuation and conjunctions improved for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Well, to be honest, although like singing, I haven't ever learned how to sing professionally.

✓ Well, to be honest, although I like singing, I have never learned how to sing professionally.

Thời hiện tại không đúng và thiếu đại từ: 'although like singing' thiếu chủ ngữ 'I'. 'haven't ever learned' is grammatically acceptable but 'have never learned' is more natural. Use present perfect for experience up to now. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I just uh, what the the lyrics in a karaoke video or go to a music box to sing with my friends and reduce stress.

✓ I just, uh, read the lyrics in a karaoke video or go to a music box to sing with my friends to reduce stress.

Cấu trúc câu bị lỗi: thiếu động từ chính ('read'). Repetition 'the the' removed. Clarify purpose with 'to reduce stress'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Well, I want to sing for my family and my close friends because they have always support me and encourage me whenever I need.

✓ Well, I want to sing for my family and my close friends because they have always supported me and encouraged me whenever I needed help.

Đại từ và thì động từ không đúng: 'support' and 'encourage' should be in past participle form 'supported' and 'encouraged' after 'have'. Also 'whenever I need' is vague; 'whenever I needed help' clarifies and matches present perfect context. Grammar problem type ID:12

× They always lend their hand to help me.

✓ They always lend a hand to help me.

Số ít/ nhiều không chính xác: idiom is 'lend a hand' not 'lend their hand'. Use 'a hand' for assistance. Grammar problem type ID:1

× For example, I often sing at a small gatherings and birthday parties at home and singing for them makes me feel comfortable and more.

✓ For example, I often sing at small gatherings and birthday parties at home, and singing for them makes me feel comfortable and more confident.

Lỗi mạo từ: 'a small gatherings' mixes singular article with plural noun; should be 'small gatherings'. Sentence ends incomplete 'more' — added 'more confident' to complete meaning. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yes, obviously singing can bring happiness to people because every song that they sing that related through to their mood and improve their mood very much.

✓ Yes, obviously singing can bring happiness to people because every song they sing is related to their mood and can greatly improve it.

Tính từ/ trạng từ dùng sai và cấu trúc thừa: 'that related through to' is incorrect; use 'is related to'. 'improve their mood very much' is awkward; 'can greatly improve it' is better and concise. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Whenever they sing, they can comprehend themselves, comprehend their taste and. Forget the blobblems or issues around them quickly.

✓ Whenever they sing, they can understand themselves and their tastes, and forget the problems or issues around them quickly.

Cấu trúc câu bị gãy: 'comprehend their taste and.' is incomplete; 'comprehend' is formal, 'understand' is more natural. Typo 'blobblems' -> 'problems'. Reordered for fluency. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I think it is depend, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my friend because her voice is very beautiful and her musical taste suit me well.

✓ I think it depends. I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my friend, because her voice is very beautiful and her musical taste suits me well.

Modal/verb agreement and structure: 'it is depend' incorrect; use 'it depends'. Subject-verb agreement 'taste suit' -> 'taste suits'. Added punctuation for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Whoever every single sounds strained it or has a bad vocal day, I feel a bit concerned and less inclined to listen.

✓ Whenever a singer's voice sounds strained or they have a bad vocal day, I feel a bit concerned and less inclined to listen.

Đại từ dùng sai: 'Whoever every single sounds' is incorrect. Use 'Whenever a singer's voice sounds strained' or 'Whenever someone sounds strained'. Replace 'it' with 'they' for singular generic reference. Clarified subject. Grammar problem type ID:12

× To be honest, I haven't ever taken a singing class because I don't take music as a consider to my exam.

✓ To be honest, I have never taken a singing class because I don't consider music important for my exams.

Thì hiện tại hoàn thành 'haven't ever taken' -> 'have never taken' preferred. Phrase 'don't take music as a consider to my exam' is ungrammatical; use 'don't consider music important for my exams'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× My future exam I want to appreciate and take a deep attention to the main subject at school such as math or English rather than. Participate in, uh, a singing class.

✓ For my future exams, I want to focus my attention on the main subjects at school, such as math or English, rather than participate in a singing class.

Giới từ và cấu trúc sai: 'take a deep attention to' should be 'focus my attention on'. 'My future exam' -> 'For my future exams'. Removed unnecessary commas and filler words; placed 'rather than participate in a singing class' correctly. Grammar problem type ID:11