唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, use 'I didn't enjoy singing because I lacked vocal skills, and I was more interested in cricket, so I focused on sports instead.'

示例: I don't like singing because I don't have a good voice. When I was a child, I tried to learn, but I was more interested in cricket, so I chose to focus on sports instead.

建议: Provide a clear and grammatically correct response. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your experience. For example, say 'Yes, I tried to learn singing as a child, but due to study pressure and my interest in cricket, I couldn't continue.'

示例: Yes, I tried to learn singing when I was a child, but because of study pressure and my passion for cricket, I couldn't continue learning.

建议: Make your answer clearer and more fluent by organizing your ideas logically and using linking words. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. For example, 'If I could sing, I would sing for my mother because she has always supported me through my ups and downs, and I want to show my love for her.'

示例: If I could sing, I would sing for my mother because she has always supported me through my ups and downs, and I want to show her how much I love her.

建议: Answer more clearly and coherently by using linking words and specific examples. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors. For example, 'Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because people enjoy different hobbies. For instance, some love singing, and it cheers them up, especially older people.'

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because people have different interests. For example, some enjoy singing, and it helps them feel joyful, especially when they are feeling sad.

× No, I don't like singing because I don't have the vocal like that.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I don't have that kind of vocal ability.

The phrase 'I don't have the vocal like that' is incorrect because 'vocal' is a noun or adjective that needs a qualifier. The correct expression is 'that kind of vocal ability' to clearly express the meaning.

× But when I am in the childhood, I try to learn it.

✓ But when I was a child, I tried to learn it.

The phrase 'when I am in the childhood' is incorrect because 'childhood' is a noun and the past tense 'was' should be used to refer to a past time. Also, 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match the past context.

× But I have the more interest in the cricket and I am the sportsman person so I never go for the singing.

✓ But I have more interest in cricket and I am a sportsman, so I never go for singing.

The phrase 'the more interest' is incorrect; 'more interest' without 'the' is correct. Also, 'the cricket' should be 'cricket' without 'the' as it is a sport. 'The sportsman person' is awkward; 'a sportsman' is the correct expression.

× And that's the only reason.

✓ And that's the only reason.

This sentence is correct and fits the present tense context; no correction needed.

× Yes I earlier mentioned like when I am the child I try to learn it but it not possible becaused.

✓ Yes, I mentioned earlier that when I was a child, I tried to learn it but it was not possible because...

The phrase 'when I am the child' should be 'when I was a child' to indicate past time. 'I try' should be 'I tried' for past tense. 'It not possible becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'it was not possible because'.

× I have a lot of pressure of study and I am more interested in cricket, so that's the only thing where I learn.

✓ I have a lot of pressure from studying and I am more interested in cricket, so that's the only thing I learned.

The phrase 'pressure of study' should be 'pressure from studying'. Also, 'where I learn' is incorrect; it should be 'I learned' to indicate past action.

× Thank you.

✓ Thank you.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, if I were like. Up. Learn how to sing I I want to like sing for my mother because she from the beginning she is with them in my ups and down.

✓ Yes, if I were to learn how to sing, I would like to sing for my mother because she has been with me through my ups and downs from the beginning.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'If I were like. Up. Learn how to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'if I were to learn how to sing'. 'She from the beginning she is with them' is incorrect; it should be 'she has been with me from the beginning'. 'Ups and down' should be 'ups and downs'.

× She loves me and I want to show how much I love her.

✓ She loves me and I want to show how much I love her.

This sentence is correct; pronouns are used appropriately.

× So when they get a chance, I sing for my mother.

✓ So when I get a chance, I sing for my mother.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect here; it should be 'I' to match the subject who sings for the mother.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because every and each person have one interest in everything like I have.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because every person has an interest in something, like I do.

'Every and each person have' is incorrect; it should be 'every person has'. 'One interest in everything' is awkward; 'an interest in something' is clearer.

× Good experience in quicker.

✓ I have good experience in cricket.

'Quicker' is incorrect; the intended word is 'cricket'. Also, the phrase should be 'I have good experience in cricket'.

× Some people like love singing and when the old people are said they do what they like.

✓ Some people love singing, and when old people are sad, they do what they like.

'Like love singing' is incorrect; it should be 'love singing'. 'When the old people are said' is incorrect; it should be 'when old people are sad'.

× So I think singing can bring happiness for that people.

✓ So I think singing can bring happiness to those people.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'to' is the correct preposition. Also, 'that people' should be 'those people'.

× And thank you.

✓ And thank you.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.