唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day at school. When I sing, I can express my emotions and feel more at ease.

建议: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc.

示例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I don't plan to become a professional singer. However, if I get the chance in the future, I would like to learn singing properly.

建议: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi để truyền đạt ý tốt hơn.

示例: I want to sing for my mom and other family members because I love them very much. Singing is a way for me to show my feelings and love to them.

建议: Bạn cần cải thiện cấu trúc câu và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để kết nối ý.

示例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because there are many cheerful songs available online. Listening or singing these songs helps people relax after a hard day at work.

× Yes, I really like singing because singing help me relax my mind a lot after the hard working school alpha studying.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because singing helps me relax my mind a lot after the hard working school alpha studying.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to singular and plural forms.

× after the hard working school alpha studying.

✓ after the hard work and studying at school.

The phrase 'hard working school alpha studying' is incorrect and unclear. 'Hard working' is an adjective describing a person, not a noun. The correct phrase should be 'hard work and studying at school' to clearly express the intended meaning.

× So when I'm singing I can express my mood and my doings.

✓ So when I'm singing, I can express my mood and my actions.

The word 'doings' is informal and awkward here. 'Actions' is a more appropriate noun to describe what the speaker is doing. Also, a comma is needed after 'singing' for clarity.

× Actually, no, because I don't have a plan to become a singer, so I don't be forced to learn to how to sing as a profession, as a professional better.

✓ Actually, no, because I don't have a plan to become a singer, so I am not forced to learn how to sing professionally.

The phrase 'I don't be forced' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I am not forced'. Also, 'to learn to how to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'learn how to sing'. 'As a professional better' is unclear and should be 'professionally'.

× If you have a change in the future, I will learn how to sing in their professional.

✓ If I have a chance in the future, I will learn how to sing professionally.

'You have a change' should be 'I have a chance'. 'In their professional' is incorrect; it should be 'professionally'. The sentence needs to reflect the speaker's intention.

× I want to sing for my mom and death is in my family because I really love them.

✓ I want to sing for my mom and the deceased in my family because I really love them.

The phrase 'death is in my family' is incorrect. It should be 'the deceased in my family' to refer to family members who have passed away. This corrects the singular/plural and noun usage.

× For them, I would the Singh family song for them.

✓ For them, I would sing family songs.

The phrase 'I would the Singh family song for them' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be 'I would sing family songs' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Oh yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because the if there are a lot of songs on the Internet is included including happy sounds so when people something they can feel more relaxed after hard working day.

✓ Oh yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because there are a lot of songs on the Internet, including happy sounds, so when people listen to something, they can feel more relaxed after a hard working day.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'the if there are' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'. 'Is included including' is redundant; only 'including' is needed. 'When people something' is incomplete; it should be 'when people listen to something'. Also, 'hard working day' should be 'a hard working day'.