唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 불필요한 반복을 피하며, 구체적인 이유를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 해야 합니다.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. Sometimes, I even compose my own songs, which makes singing more enjoyable. Additionally, I like to sing to cheer up my friends and make them happy.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 명확한 문장 구조를 사용하고, 구체적인 정보를 포함하여 답변을 완성도 있게 만들어야 합니다.

示例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. Currently, I take weekly singing lessons from a professional singer-songwriter to improve my skills.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 끊어져 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 예시를 포함하여 자연스럽게 답변을 구성해야 합니다.

示例: I usually want to sing for people who are feeling sad or have lost someone they love, like a family member or a partner. I hope my singing can comfort them during difficult times.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 명확한 이유와 구체적인 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 하고, 문장을 자연스럽게 연결해야 합니다.

示例: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, I have participated in campaigns where we sing for survivors of suicide or people suffering from depression to encourage and support them.

× I like a singing because I can sing.

✓ I like singing because I can sing.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the uncountable noun 'singing'. In English, uncountable nouns do not take the indefinite article 'a' or 'an'. Therefore, 'a' should be removed.

× Well, I think an eye sometimes compose my own songs.

✓ Well, I think I sometimes compose my own songs.

The pronoun 'eye' is a homophone error and should be 'I' to correctly refer to oneself. This is a common mistake due to similar pronunciation but different spelling and meaning.

× That's why I like to sing and make things songs.

✓ That's why I like to sing and make songs.

The phrase 'make things songs' is incorrect. The word 'things' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'make songs'.

× Yes, I have. I learn every week for singing nowadays I take singing lesson by from the. Singer-songwriter, Teacher.

✓ Yes, I have. I learn every week; nowadays I take singing lessons from a singer-songwriter teacher.

The sentence has several issues: 'learn' should be in present tense but the sentence structure is awkward; 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' because it refers to repeated classes; 'by from the' is incorrect preposition usage and should be 'from a'; capitalization and punctuation need correction for clarity.

× Because of the basking.

✓ Because of the backing.

The word 'basking' is likely a typo or incorrect word choice. If the intended meaning is related to musical backing, 'backing' is correct. Also, 'because of' is a correct preposition phrase but the noun following it must be correct.

× I usually want to sing for. The people who are really sad or who lose to someone.

✓ I usually want to sing for the people who are really sad or who have lost someone.

The preposition 'lose to someone' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'have lost someone' to indicate someone has died or is no longer present. Also, the period after 'for' is incorrect and should be removed.

× Who they really love.

✓ Whom they really love.

In this relative clause, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun to refer to the person they love. 'Who' is subject pronoun and incorrect here.

× That's why I make campaign for singing with singing for.

✓ That's why I make a campaign for singing with singing for.

The phrase 'make campaign' is missing the article 'a'. Also, the phrase 'with singing for' is incomplete and unclear; it may need rephrasing for clarity but based on instruction only correcting grammar problem types, adding 'a' is necessary.

× The paper Who is survivor from the suicide or who has the poise depressed?

✓ The people who are survivors of suicide or who have severe depression.

'The paper' is incorrect; likely intended 'the people'. 'Who is survivor' should be 'who are survivors' to agree in number. 'From the suicide' should be 'of suicide'. 'Who has the poise depressed' is incorrect; likely intended 'who have severe depression'. Pronouns and noun forms need correction for clarity and grammar.