记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce redundancy, and add a brief specific example. Use linking words for clarity. Keep within 3–4 sentences. Avoid phrases like “I think” when you already stated your ability.

示例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I always remember birthdays and important details about close friends because I note them mentally when we meet. As a result, I rarely forget personal information, which helps me maintain strong relationships.

建议: Begin with a concise topic sentence, then give a short sequence of events using linking words (first, then, finally) and add one reflection or consequence. Keep it natural and specific.

示例: Yes, once I forgot my passport at home. I discovered this at the airport when checking in, so I had to cancel the flight and return home. It was stressful, and since then I always double-check my travel documents before leaving.

建议: Provide a topic sentence and expand with brief reasons or routines using linking words. Be slightly more specific about frequency or method to show depth.

示例: I need to remember taking my medication and completing my homework every day. For example, I take my pills every morning before breakfast and usually set aside an hour in the evening to finish assignments. This routine helps me stay healthy and keep up with my studies.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid colloquial fillers (like “like”), and replace vague phrases with specific strategies or explanations. Mention one or two methods even if informal, and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I usually remember important things naturally, but I also use simple strategies to be safe. For instance, I write crucial tasks in my phone’s reminders app and set alerts, and I mentally prioritise anything truly important so I rarely forget it.

× Yes, I am and I specifically memorise the things about people I care so I think I am good at it.

✓ Yes, I am, and I specifically memorise the things about people I care about, so I think I am good at it.

The sentence omits the preposition 'about' after 'care'. The correct phrase is 'care about' meaning to have concern or interest in someone. Add a comma after the first clause for clarity. Suggestion: use 'care about' whenever indicating concern for someone and punctuate clauses with commas.

× Yes, I did once I was in an airport and I noticed that I forgot my passport at home and I had to cancel the flight.

✓ Yes, I did. Once I was at an airport, I noticed that I had forgotten my passport at home and I had to cancel the flight.

Sequence of past events requires past perfect for the earlier action: 'had forgotten' shows the passport was forgotten before the noticing. Use 'at an airport' (more common collocation) and separate sentences or use commas to avoid run-on. Suggestion: use past perfect for an action completed before another past action and split long sentences for clarity.

× I need to remember to take my pills and do my homework.

✓ I need to remember to take my pills and to do my homework.

Parallel infinitives should both include 'to' for clarity in formal English: 'to take' and 'to do'. While native speakers may omit the second 'to', including it improves parallel structure. Suggestion: maintain parallel form when listing actions with infinitives.

× I don't do something specific to remember important things because if something's important then my brain just consumes it and like you really need to work to make me forget it.

✓ I don't do anything specific to remember important things because if something is important, my brain just absorbs it, and you'd really have to work to make me forget it.

'Do something specific' should be 'do anything specific' in negative sentences ('don't'). 'Something's' is informal contraction; expand to 'something is' for clarity. 'Consumes' is a wrong verb choice; 'absorbs' fits better metaphorically. 'Like' is filler and should be removed; use 'you'd' (you would) for conditional meaning. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: in negative contexts use 'anything', choose verbs that fit the meaning, avoid filler words, and use conditional forms correctly.