记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct answer to the question first, then support it with 1–2 concise, coherent details. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Improve sentence structure and linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Keep answers under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I’m quite good at remembering things because I often take photographs to help me recall events. For example, I take photos of my family and friends when we meet, which helps me remember special moments and strengthens our relationships.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give a chronological, specific account. Use correct verb forms and clearer nouns (e.g., "wallet" or "bag"), and avoid irrelevant remarks. Use linking words for sequence (e.g., "First", "Then", "Finally").

示例: Yes, I once lost my wallet while travelling in Beijing last year. First we went for a walk and I left my wallet on a bench; later I realised it was missing, so we returned to look for it but could not find it.

建议: Answer directly ("I need to remember...") and give specific examples of daily items or tasks. Use clearer phrasing for routines and study tasks, and correct grammar (e.g., "I need to remember to start studying" or "I need to remember vocabulary"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I need to remember my daily study schedule and important tasks. For example, I remind myself to study vocabulary every day and to prepare for upcoming tests so I can improve my scores.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing your main method, then give a concise reason and an example. Use natural phrasing (e.g., "I make lists because I tend to forget") and reduce repetition. Use one linking word like "because" or "so".

示例: I usually make lists to remember important things because I tend to forget tasks. For instance, I write a daily checklist of things to do—assignments, study topics, and errands—and tick them off when completed.

× Sure, when I was a child I have interest in photography.

✓ Sure, when I was a child I had an interest in photography.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was a child' with present simple 'have'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame and include the article 'an' before 'interest'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events in childhood and include appropriate articles.

× You know, it is a good way to record some memory things.

✓ You know, it is a good way to record some memories.

'Memory things' is unidiomatic and 'some memories' is the natural plural noun. Also 'some' is fine with plural countable nouns but omit 'things'. Suggestion: use 'memories' to refer to recollections.

× I usually take some pictures about my family and always with my friends to record a happiness moment I ever had.

✓ I usually take pictures of my family and my friends to record happy moments I've had.

Use 'take pictures of' not 'about'. 'Always with my friends' should be integrated: 'and my friends'. 'A happiness moment' is incorrect: use 'happy moments' and the present perfect 'I've had' suits past experiences continuing to present. Suggestion: use proper verb-preposition collocations and correct adjective form 'happy'.

× I think it is good way to build our relationship.

✓ I think it is a good way to build our relationships.

Missing article: 'a good way'. 'Relationship' in this context is more naturally plural 'relationships' when referring to bonds with several people, or singular 'our relationship' if referring to one relationship; adjust to intended meaning. Suggestion: include the article 'a' and choose singular/plural consistently.

× Sure. Last year when I travel in Beijing, you know, it is a famous city in China.

✓ Sure. Last year when I traveled to Beijing, you know, it is a famous city in China.

Time marker 'Last year' requires past tense 'traveled' not present 'travel'. Use 'to Beijing' (movement) rather than 'in Beijing' for the action of traveling there. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past events and correct preposition for movement.

× I lose my money in my bag and I just miss out in the bed bench.

✓ I lost my money from my bag and I must have left it on the bench.

Use past simple 'lost' for a completed past action. 'Lose' is present. 'Miss out in the bed bench' is ungrammatical; 'left it on the bench' expresses the idea. 'From my bag' is a clearer preposition than 'in my bag' when money was taken out or fell out. Suggestion: use past simple and idiomatic expressions like 'left it on the bench'.

× You know, we just take for a walk.

✓ You know, we were just taking a walk.

Describing what was happening at that past time requires past continuous 'were taking' rather than present simple 'take'. Suggestion: use past continuous to indicate ongoing past action.

× But when I remember the things, we go to the beach again, but the bag is missed.

✓ But when I remembered, we went back to the bench, but the bag was gone.

Tense consistency: use past simple 'remembered' and 'went back'. 'Beach' is likely incorrect context; original mentioned 'bench'. 'Bag is missed' is incorrect passive; use 'was gone' or 'was missing'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use idiomatic phrases for missing items.

× On weekdays because I'm a student I need to remember some start study thing and I will listen to my daily routine.

✓ On weekdays, because I'm a student, I need to remember when to start studying and follow my daily routine.

Sentence is ungrammatical and unclear: 'start study thing' should be 'when to start studying'. 'I will listen to my daily routine' is incorrect; 'follow my daily routine' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: clarify the intended idea and use infinitive or gerund correctly ('start studying').

× It's maybe some about remember some vocabularies in my daily life or just do some exam to improve my scores.

✓ It may be about remembering vocabulary in my daily life or taking exams to improve my scores.

'Maybe' should be 'may be' in this structure. 'Remember' should be gerund 'remembering'. 'Vocabularies' is uncountable: use 'vocabulary'. 'Do some exam' should be 'take exams'. Suggestion: use correct modal phrasing, gerunds after 'about', and correct noun forms.

× Always I will make some lists to remember something because I'm a forgettable and easy to forget something.

✓ I always make lists to remember things because I'm forgetful and easily forget things.

Adverb placement: 'always' normally goes before the main verb: 'I always make'. 'I'm a forgettable' is wrong; use adjective 'forgetful'. 'Easy to forget something' should be 'easily forget things' adverb form. Suggestion: place adverbs before main verbs and use correct adjective/adverb forms.

× So I need to write down to remind myself do these things.

✓ So I need to write things down to remind myself to do them.

Word order and verb forms: 'write down' should follow the object ('write things down') or be 'write down' with object after. 'Remind myself do' needs 'to' before infinitive: 'remind myself to do'. Use 'them' to refer back to 'things'. Suggestion: correct word order and include 'to' before verbs after 'remind'.

× It is a good way to remind and remember things and I will do it in the future.

✓ It is a good way to remind myself and remember things, and I will keep doing it in the future.

The sentence is mostly correct but awkward: specify 'remind myself' and use 'keep doing it' to indicate continuing the habit. 'Will do it in the future' is acceptable but 'keep doing it' is more natural. Suggestion: clarify the subject and use natural phrasing for ongoing future actions.