记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and unclear pronouns (e.g., “she”). Aim for correct tense and smoother phrasing.

示例: No, I’m not very good at memorising things. For important exams I make detailed notes and create organised summaries, and I often use mnemonic techniques to remember lists. This helps me recall information more reliably during tests.

建议: Give a clear direct answer, then provide a specific example and link it to the method you use. Remove hesitations and repetitions, and use linking words like “for example” or “so” correctly.

示例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I once missed an appointment, so now I always add events to my Google Calendar and set multiple reminders to make sure I don’t forget.

建议: Answer directly and add specific categories with examples. Use linking words like “such as” and maintain consistent tense. Briefly explain why you record these items to show purpose and coherence.

示例: I need to remember many daily things, such as small errands, work deadlines and family birthdays. Because these items are important, I put them in my calendar or a task app so I can prioritise tasks and avoid missing special dates.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence about your main method, then give one or two specific details about how you use tools (e.g., setting alerts, recurring events). Remove filler words and correct grammar (“I put” not “I putting”).

示例: I use digital tools to remember important things. For instance, I add events to my Google Calendar with multiple alerts and set recurring reminders on my iPhone for regular tasks, so I’m less likely to miss deadlines or appointments.

× So I try to keep keep a note of what I should remember and how she would remember it and.

✓ So I tried to keep a note of what I should remember and how I would remember it.

The original sentence has repetition ('keep keep'), inconsistent tense ('try' vs past context), incorrect pronoun ('she' instead of 'I'), and an incomplete ending. Use past tense 'tried' to match context about studying for the university entry exam, replace 'she' with 'I' to refer to the speaker, remove duplicate word, and complete the clause for clarity.

× I tend to forget a lot of things in including important things.

✓ I tend to forget a lot of things, including important ones.

The phrase 'in including' is incorrect and redundant. Use the participial phrase 'including important ones' to add examples. Also replace 'things' with 'ones' to avoid repetition and improve style.

× So what I try to do is. I I take strategy like putting it into my Google Calendar or or a reminder.

✓ So what I try to do is take steps like putting events into my Google Calendar or setting a reminder.

Original has a sentence fragment ('So what I try to do is.'), repeated words ('I I', 'or or'), and awkward phrasing ('take strategy'). Combine into a complete sentence, remove repeated words, and use natural collocations: 'take steps' or 'use a strategy', and 'set a reminder' is the correct verb phrase.

× There are a lot of things that I had to remember in my daily life, ranging from small tasks and errands to anniversaries or birthdays.

✓ There are a lot of things that I have to remember in my daily life, ranging from small tasks and errands to anniversaries and birthdays.

Context asks about current daily needs, so present perfect or simple present is appropriate. 'Had to remember' implies past; use 'have to remember' to indicate ongoing obligation. Also 'anniversaries or birthdays' is better as 'anniversaries and birthdays' when listing.

× I tried to put it in my calendar or a task list so I don't forget it.

✓ I try to put them in my calendar or a task list so I don't forget them.

Mismatch of tense and number: 'I tried' (past) vs 'I don't' (present). Use present 'try' to match habitual action. Replace singular 'it' with plural 'them' to agree with 'a lot of things'.

× I try to remember important things, but I putting it into, uh, Google Calendar or putting it in my iphone's reminder.

✓ I try to remember important things by putting them into Google Calendar or in my iPhone's reminders.

Original mixes structures ('but I putting'), missing verb form; use gerund 'by putting' to show method. Use plural 'them' to match 'important things'. 'iPhone' capitalization and 'reminders' plural is natural. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× That way I don't have to forget what I have to do or remember key events that happen on the on that day or.

✓ That way I don't forget what I have to do or important events that happen on that day.

Original contains double negatives and awkward phrasing ('don't have to forget', 'on the on that day or') and trailing 'or'. Simplify to 'I don't forget' to convey the intended meaning. Remove extra words and complete the sentence for clarity.