记忆— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Are you good at memorising things?
考生
No, we have a really poor memory and I can't remember certain things such as math, uh, equations, math formulas, but I'm trying my best to have full attention to memorize something by heart. I think it's hard, but I'm trying.
考官
Have you ever forgotten something important?
考生
Yeah, multiple times. I mean, uh, forgetting things like in insurmountable problem that I can't easily avoid it. You know, I often forget things such as wallet, my keys, and yeah, even something is really, really significant too.
考官
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
考生
I think it's to do the chores that my mom asked me to and to do my homework and even remember to. Yeah, I remember some appointments like the dentist appointments. The doctor appointments make a lot of plans I need to remember. I have them in a note already.
考官
How do you remember important things?
考生
My technique to remember important things is to use a note. Uh, I mainly use sticky notes and some a notebook that is cute and have an appealing appearance. Uh, I tend to drawn to be drawn in something aesthetic so I think it's helped me better in real.
评估
总分
Part 1
Are you good at memorising things?
分数: 58.0建议: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid self-contradictory pronouns (use I not we), reduce filler words, and add one specific strategy and brief result. Keep to under five sentences and use linking words when adding details.
示例: I’m not very good at memorising things. For example, I struggle to remember math formulas, so I use spaced repetition to review them daily. Because of this routine, I now recall key equations more easily and feel more confident during exams.
Have you ever forgotten something important?
分数: 55.0建议: Start with a clear statement, avoid vague or exaggerated words (e.g. 'insurmountable problem'), remove fillers, and provide a specific example and brief consequence. Use a linking word to connect the example and the result.
示例: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For instance, once I left my wallet at a café, which meant I couldn’t pay for my bus and had to call a friend for help. Since then, I check my bag before leaving home to avoid the same problem.
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
分数: 62.0建议: Give a clear topic sentence listing main items, then add one specific detail about how you organise them. Avoid repetition and fragmented sentences; use linking words (for example, because/so) to connect ideas.
示例: In daily life I need to remember chores my mother gives me, my homework, and appointments like the dentist. To keep organised, I write all tasks and appointment times in a notes app, so I get reminders and don’t miss anything.
How do you remember important things?
分数: 65.0建议: Start with a concise topic sentence about your main method, then give specific examples and explain why it helps. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g. 'I am drawn to aesthetic items'). Keep it coherent with linking words (for example, because/so), and limit to three sentences.
示例: I remember important things by writing them down. For example, I use sticky notes for urgent tasks and a cute notebook for longer-term plans because attractive stationery motivates me to check my notes regularly. As a result, I rarely forget important appointments.
语法
× No, we have a really poor memory and I can't remember certain things such as math, uh, equations, math formulas, but I'm trying my best to have full attention to memorize something by heart.
✓ No, I have a poor memory and I can't remember certain things such as math equations and formulas, but I'm trying my best to concentrate and memorize things by heart.
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