记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one specific reason and one brief example. Reduce fillers (uh, umm) and avoid repeating the same idea. Use one linking phrase to connect reason and example (for example, because, so).

示例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. I need to write reminders on my phone because I tend to forget tasks otherwise, so I always make a list before I start my day.

建议: Clarify the event and consequence. Give a brief, coherent story with correct time references and avoid unclear words like 'cheated' if you mean 'treated' or 'compensated'. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) and one or two specific details to make the anecdote believable.

示例: Yes. For example, two months ago my friends invited me to join an event, but I accidentally forgot the date. As a result, I apologised and later treated them to a meal to make up for missing it.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence followed by a concise list of the most important items. Use linking words (such as, for example, and) and avoid fillers. Be specific about one or two tasks to add depth (e.g., 'preparing ingredients for dinner' or 'finishing a PowerPoint slide').

示例: I need to remember several daily tasks, such as getting up early and arriving at school on time. For example, I always plan and prepare cooking ingredients the night before and finish my presentation slides a day early.

建议: Good structure and clear methods. Improve by combining ideas into one or two polished sentences, adding a linking phrase and a brief specific example of how you use these methods (e.g., calendar app, recurring alarms). Remove fillers.

示例: I usually write important tasks on my phone or a notebook and set alarms to remind me. For example, I add deadlines to my calendar app and set a recurring alarm the evening before an assignment is due.

× No, because, uh, if I should remember something to do, uh, I must uh, write them on the paper or on my phone.

✓ No, because if I need to remember something to do, I must write it on paper or on my phone.

The original uses 'should' and 'must' awkwardly. 'Should' is not appropriate for expressing necessity here; 'need to' or 'have to' is correct (Grammar Problem Type 4). Also 'them' refers to 'something' (singular), so use 'it' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Remove unnecessary filler words and articles: 'on the paper' should be 'on paper'. Suggestion: use 'if I need to remember something' and 'write it on paper or on my phone.'

× Uh, if I don't do that, I umm, I will forget it probably.

✓ If I don't do that, I will probably forget it.

The sentence places the adverb 'probably' after the object, which is awkward; move 'probably' before the verb phrase (Grammar Problem Type 20). The future tense 'will forget' is acceptable. Also reduce filler and duplicate subject. Suggestion: 'If I don't do that, I will probably forget it.'

× Yes, for example, two months ago my friends invited me to attend an activity, but last month I totally forgot.

✓ Yes. For example, two months ago my friends invited me to an event, but I totally forgot last month.

Verb tense is acceptable but word order and article choice can be improved. 'Attend an activity' is unnatural; 'an event' is better. Also place 'last month' at end for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 6). Suggestion: 'two months ago my friends invited me to an event, but I totally forgot last month.'

× Umm, finally I cheated my friend to have a meal.

✓ In the end I lied to my friend about having a meal.

'Cheated my friend to have a meal' is incorrect and unclear. If the speaker means they lied or tricked their friend, use 'lied to my friend' or 'tricked my friend' (Grammar Problem Type 26). Provide clearer verb choice and natural phrasing: 'In the end I lied to my friend about having a meal.'

× Well, there are so many things such as getting up early, uh, going to school on time, preparing some cooking ingredients, and uh, doing some school tasks like presentation and PPT.

✓ Well, there are so many things, such as getting up early, going to school on time, preparing cooking ingredients, and doing school tasks like presentations and PowerPoint slides.

Use plural 'presentations' and expand 'PPT' to 'PowerPoint slides' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 13). Remove unnecessary 'some' before 'cooking ingredients.' Maintain parallel structure in the list (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: keep items parallel (gerund forms) and use plural nouns when appropriate.

× I prefer to write them down on the paper or on my phone.

✓ I prefer to write them down on paper or on my phone.

Article 'the' before 'paper' is unnecessary; use 'on paper' (Grammar Problem Type 17). The sentence otherwise is fine. Also ensure 'them' correctly refers to plural 'things.' Suggestion: 'I prefer to write them down on paper or on my phone.'

× And second, set an alarm to remind me, uh, to do these things on time.

✓ Second, I set an alarm to remind me to do these things on time.

Imperative form 'set an alarm' without subject is inconsistent with first-person narrative; use 'I set' to match tense and subject (Grammar Problem Type 4 and 26). Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'Second, I set an alarm to remind me to do these things on time.'