家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove hesitations and repetition, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words if adding details.

示例: My hometown is Zhenyi, a small city in southwest China. It’s best known for its traditional liquor, which attracts many visitors and supports local festivals.

建议: Answer the question directly (what you like) even if negative; avoid repetition and hesitations. Give clear reasons and one specific example or consequence, using linking words like because or therefore.

示例: To be honest, there isn’t much I like about my hometown now because many chemical factories pollute the air and rivers. As a result, people are moving away and local parks and fishing spots have declined.

建议: Use a clear tense and concise timeline: state the period, then add one or two specific memories. Keep sentences short and coherent, with linking words like until, and, or when.

示例: I lived in Zhenyi until I left for university, so I spent my childhood there. For example, I often went to the nearby forest with my father to pick fruit and explore, which are my fondest memories.

建议: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with specific details and a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g., 'few job opportunities') and avoid fragments. Offer a brief comparison or consequence.

示例: No, I don't think it is a good place for young people because the economy is declining and there are few job opportunities. Therefore, most young people move to larger cities, leaving mainly older residents behind.

× My hometown located in southwest of China, then Zhenyi, uh, this city is small, but uh, very famous because, uh, because the traditional alcohol made in here so many people.

✓ My hometown is located in the southwest of China. It is Zhenyi. This city is small but very famous because the traditional alcohol made here attracts many people.

Missing verb 'is' after subject (there be/verb to be issue) and awkward sentence structure. Use 'is located' for place description, add article 'the' before 'southwest', remove unnecessary 'in' after 'made', and split into clear sentences. Use 'attracts many people' to express cause and effect. Grammar problem type ID: 3

× Actually, I don't like my hometown because there are many chemical, chemical factories, uh, they umm, plotting the air and polluting the, uh, rivers So, uh, many people move out of the city now.

✓ Actually, I don't like my hometown because there are many chemical factories; they are polluting the air and rivers. So, many people are moving out of the city now.

Repeated word and incorrect verb forms. 'Chemical factories' is the correct noun phrase. Use present continuous 'are polluting' to describe ongoing action and 'are moving' for current trend. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to join related clauses. Remove filler words. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I've lived there until I went to the college. I spent my childhood in my hometown. In my memory, I always went to the forest with my father.

✓ I lived there until I went to college. I spent my childhood in my hometown. I always went to the forest with my father in my memory.

Incorrect use of present perfect 'I've lived' with a definite past time ('until I went to college') — simple past 'I lived' is appropriate. 'College' does not need 'the'. The rest uses simple past correctly for habitual past actions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× No, I don't think so. The economy of my hometown is going down now. There is rare job opportunity. So many young people go to the big city, move out of my hometown, just some older people in.

✓ No, I don't think so. The economy of my hometown is declining now. There are few job opportunities. So many young people go to the big cities and move out of my hometown; only some older people remain.

'There is rare job opportunity' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' for plural 'job opportunities' and 'few' (not 'rare') to express scarcity. Use 'declining' for economy. Use 'remain' for people staying. Correct subject-verb agreement and pluralization. Grammar problem type ID: 1