家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần chính xác về vị trí địa lý và mạch lạc hơn; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và nói ngắn gọn, tự nhiên (tối đa 3 câu). Nên nói đúng “in the south of Vietnam” thay vì “in the central of Vietnam”, chỉnh thì và cấu trúc (ví dụ: ‘I’m deeply connected to it’ hoặc ‘I feel deeply connected to my hometown’).

示例: I’m from Ho Chi Minh City in the south of Vietnam. It’s the largest city in the country and is famous for its lively atmosphere and fast pace of life. I feel deeply connected to it because my family are from there.

建议: Cần câu trả lời tự nhiên, tránh từ không cần thiết (‘Absolutely’ đứng một mình). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (’there are always things to do’), dùng liên từ để nối ý và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động hoặc địa điểm. Giữ trong 2–3 câu.

示例: What I like most about my hometown is that there are always things to do, such as trying new restaurants or visiting popular shopping malls. More importantly, my family and close friends live there, so it always feels like home.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và diễn đạt cho gọn, tránh lặp từ và lỗi số nhiều/số ít (’a decades’ → ‘a decade’). Dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, trực tiếp trả lời với thông tin chính rồi thêm một câu bổ sung nếu cần. Giữ 1–2 câu rõ ràng.

示例: I have lived there since I was born, and I’m now 16 years old, so I’ve lived there for sixteen years. It’s where I spent my entire childhood and I really love it.

建议: Cần câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý, và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (’past few years’, hoàn chỉnh câu ‘There are more modern buildings…’). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: trường đại học, trung tâm việc làm) để tăng tính thuyết phục.

示例: Yes, I think it’s a good place for young people to study and work. In the past few years the city has grown quickly, with more modern buildings and better transport, which makes it easier to access universities and job opportunities.

× I come from Ho Chi Minh City, which is located in the central of Vietnam.

✓ I come from Ho Chi Minh City, which is located in the center of Vietnam.

Using 'the central of' is incorrect. Use 'the center of' or 'central Vietnam' without 'the'. Suggestion: say 'located in the center of Vietnam' or 'located in central Vietnam'.

× It is the largest city in my country and well known for its lively atmosphere and fast pace of life.

✓ It is the largest city in my country and is well known for its lively atmosphere and fast pace of life.

Missing auxiliary verb 'is' before 'well known' makes the sentence grammatically incomplete. Add 'is' to form the passive adjective phrase 'is well known'. Suggestion: include the verb 'is' when linking subject to adjective phrases.

× That's the place I deeply connected to.

✓ That's the place I am deeply connected to.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' required for the present participle construction 'am connected'. Alternatively, use 'I feel deeply connected to' or 'I am deeply connected to that place'. Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary verb or rephrase with 'feel'.

× What I like most at my hometown is that there's always things to do, whether trying new restaurants, spending time in the mall.

✓ What I like most about my hometown is that there are always things to do, whether trying new restaurants or spending time at the mall.

Use 'about' not 'at' with 'like' in this context. 'There's always things' is wrong: use plural agreement 'there are always things'. Also include 'or' between options and use 'at the mall' not 'in the mall' or both acceptable but 'at' is more natural here. Suggestion: 'like about', 'there are', and connect choices with 'or'.

× More importantly, it is where my family and close friends live, so it feels like home.

✓ More importantly, it is where my family and close friends live, so it feels like home.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed. Explanation: Subject and verb agreement and prepositions are fine. (Included to show verification.)

× I have lived there since I was born and currently I am 16 years old.

✓ I have lived there since I was born, and I am currently 16 years old.

Position of 'currently' is awkward; move it after 'am' or place comma for clarity. Use present perfect 'have lived' correctly with 'since'. Suggestion: place adverb 'currently' after the verb 'am' or set off with commas.

× That that's mean I live there for more than a decades.

✓ That means I have lived there for more than a decade.

Multiple issues: 'That that's mean' is ungrammatical and should be 'That means'. Use present perfect 'have lived' for duration up to now. 'More than a decades' mixes singular/plural; use 'a decade' or 'decades' without 'a'. Suggestion: 'That means I have lived there for more than a decade.'

× That's quite a long time and I love my hometown.

✓ That's quite a long time, and I love my hometown.

Add a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses for correct punctuation and sentence flow. Grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when connecting two independent clauses.

× That's the place I spend all my childhood to live with.

✓ That's the place I spent my entire childhood living.

The original uses an incorrect verb and preposition sequence 'spend ... to live with'. Use past tense 'spent' for completed period and 'living' as gerund, or 'where I lived during my childhood'. Suggestion: 'I spent my childhood living there' or 'where I lived during my childhood'.

× Definitely my hometown, quite a good place for young people to work and study.

✓ Definitely, my hometown is quite a good place for young people to work and study.

Sentence lacks a main verb; insert 'is' and commas for clarity. Ensure subject-verb structure 'my hometown is ...'. Suggestion: always include a verb to form a complete sentence.

× It has developed rapidly over the past few year.

✓ It has developed rapidly over the past few years.

'Year' should be plural 'years' after 'few'. Present perfect 'has developed' correctly expresses change up to now. Suggestion: use 'years' with 'few'.

× More modern buildings and improved transport infrastructure, so it is more convenient for people to access to education and working experience.

✓ There are more modern buildings and improved transport infrastructure, so it is more convenient for people to access education and gain work experience.

The original lacks a main verb in the first clause; add 'There are'. Also, 'access to education' should be 'access education' or 'have access to education' — avoid double 'to'. 'Working experience' is better as 'work experience' and use 'gain' or 'get'. Suggestion: 'There are more modern buildings and improved transport infrastructure, so it is more convenient for people to access education and gain work experience.'