家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn câu chủ đề trước, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ phù hợp để làm rõ ý. Lưu ý số ít/ số nhiều (traveler → travelers), động từ chia đúng (come → come/come to). Nên tránh lặp ý và rút gọn thành tối đa 5 câu.

示例: I was born and raised in Yejang City. It is a vibrant coastal city that attracts many international visitors. The city is famous for its fresh seafood and beautiful beaches, so many tourists come to try the food and relax by the sea. Overall, it is a lively place with a strong tourism industry.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (International Airport không cần viết hoa toàn bộ, 'Jain service' có vẻ nhầm — kiểm tra từ đúng), chia động từ và cấu trúc câu cho chính xác (It's not only helps → It not only helps / It not only allows me to…). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và thêm ví dụ cụ thể về phương tiện hoặc thời gian tiết kiệm.

示例: I like the good transport links in my hometown. There is an international airport, reliable train services and frequent buses, so I can travel to other cities quickly. For example, a train to the nearby city takes only one hour, which saves me a lot of time.

建议: Cần dùng thì chính xác để diễn tả quá khứ và hiện tại hoàn thành (I lived / I have lived). Sửa tên thành phố ('neutral city' có vẻ sai hoặc cần viết hoa) và dùng câu ngắn, rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi từ vựng (Beside → Besides). Nên đưa mốc thời gian rõ ràng và liên kết tương lai bằng 'plan to' hoặc 'hope to'.

示例: I lived in [Yejang City] for almost 20 years during my childhood and adolescence. However, I have recently moved to Ho Chi Minh City to study at university. I plan to return to my hometown in the future to continue building my career.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No + lý do). Sửa mâu thuẫn trong câu đầu (‘not’ vs ‘great place’), sửa ngữ pháp (few job opportunity → few job opportunities; higher educations → higher education), và từ vựng phù hợp (sturdy environment → study environment). Dùng liên từ để trình bày lý do rõ ràng và kết luận ngắn gọn.

示例: I don't think my hometown is ideal for young people. Although it is popular with tourists, there are few job opportunities and limited options for higher education. As a result, many young people move to larger cities to find better study and career prospects.

× My hometown is also famous for its delicious local cuisine such as seafood and stunning beach.

✓ My hometown is also famous for its delicious local cuisine such as seafood and stunning beaches.

'Beach' should be plural 'beaches' because it refers generally to more than one beach or to the category of coastal attractions; items listed alongside 'seafood' are treated as countable plural nouns when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural for general categories (beaches) or use the article if referring to a specific single beach (the stunning beach).

× So many traveler come here to try food and enjoy seaside.

✓ So many travelers come here to try the food and enjoy the seaside.

'Traveler' should be plural 'travelers' to agree with 'many'. 'Try food' is clearer as 'try the food' and 'enjoy seaside' needs an article 'the' before 'seaside' or use 'the seaside' to refer to the coastal area. Suggestion: make nouns plural when used with 'many' and include articles for specific nouns (the food, the seaside).

× It has many transport options such as an International Airport, Jain service, and bus.

✓ It has many transport options such as an international airport, train service, and buses.

'Jain' is a misspelling of 'train'; 'bus' should be plural 'buses' to match the general list; 'International Airport' should be lowercase unless a proper name. Also 'train service' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: correct spelling and use plural for general items in lists. (Classified as preposition/type 11 per list because it's misused word forms.)

× It's not only help me travel to other cities conveniently but also save a lot of time.

✓ It not only helps me travel to other cities conveniently but also saves a lot of time.

When the subject 'it' is used, verbs need third person singular '-s': 'helps' and 'saves'. Also use the correlative structure 'not only ... but also' with parallel verb forms. Suggestion: add '-s' for third person singular verbs and keep verb forms parallel.

× I live in neutral city for almost 20 years during my childhood and my youth.

✓ I lived in Neutral City for almost 20 years during my childhood and my youth.

The action refers to a past period ('during my childhood and my youth'), so past tense 'lived' is required. Also 'Neutral City' looks like a proper noun and should be capitalized. Suggestion: use past tense for actions completed in the past and capitalize place names.

× However, now I moved to Ho Chi Minh City to study at university.

✓ However, now I have moved to Ho Chi Minh City to study at university.

'Now' with a change of state that has relevance to the present uses present perfect 'have moved' to show recent move. Simple past 'moved' would be acceptable if specifying past time. Use present perfect to connect past action to present situation. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent actions with present relevance ('have moved').

× Beside, I would think I will return to my hometown in the future to continue building my career.

✓ Besides, I think I will return to my hometown in the future to continue building my career.

Use 'Besides' (not 'Beside') as a discourse connective meaning 'in addition'. 'I would think' is awkward here; simply 'I think' is more natural when stating intention. Keep future tense 'will return' for future intention. Suggestion: use 'Besides' and prefer straightforward modal expressions ('I think').

× Umm, I think it's not uh, my hometown is in a great place to for young people because it's mainly known for tourists.

✓ Umm, I think my hometown is not a great place for young people because it is mainly known for tourism.

Original has disfluencies and wrong word order ('is in a great place to for'). 'Known for tourists' is incorrect; something is 'known for tourism' or 'popular with tourists'. Restructure to clear negative assessment and use 'for young people'. Suggestion: remove fillers, correct word order, and use 'known for tourism' or 'popular with tourists'.

× Uh, there are few job opportunity and limited higher educations options, so younger generation often move to bigger city for sturdy environment especially.

✓ There are few job opportunities and limited higher education options, so the younger generation often moves to bigger cities for a better study environment, especially.

'Job opportunity' should be plural 'job opportunities'. 'Higher educations options' should be 'higher education options' (education uncountable). 'Younger generation' needs 'the' and verb agreement: 'the younger generation often moves'. 'Bigger city' should be plural 'bigger cities' and 'sturdy environment' is wrong word choice—use 'better study environment'. Suggestion: make countable nouns plural, use 'the' for generational groups, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose accurate collocations ('higher education', 'study environment').