家乡— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сформулируйте предложение прямо и грамматически правильно: назовите место, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения. Избегайте ошибок с временами и артиклями (например, I was born, in Russia). Используйте связки для плавности (for example, although, because).

示例: I was born in a small town in Russia. Although I no longer live there, I still associate it with my childhood because many of my early memories and family traditions come from that place.

建议: Давайте более конкретно: назовите конкретные черты, которые вам нравятся (люди, атмосфера, традиции), и объясните почему. Исправьте согласование и артикль: people who live, it is relatable → it feels familiar. Используйте связку (because, for example) для связности.

示例: I like the friendly people in my hometown because everyone knows each other and supports one another. For example, my neighbours often help my parents and that creates a warm, familiar atmosphere.

建议: Используйте правильные формы времени и чёткую структуру: сначала ответьте прямо (duration), затем уточните изменения в жизни с указанием времени (when I was 16). Добавьте краткое объяснение опыта с связкой (and, because).

示例: I lived there for about 15 years. When I was 16, I moved to Moscow to study, and that was a great experience because I met many new people and learned to be independent.

建议: Ответьте прямо «Yes» или «No», затем объясните причину конкретно: упомяните трудности с работой, развлечениями или образованием. Используйте правильную лексику: young people, jobs (not works), there are few job opportunities. Применяйте связки (however, because, although) корректно.

示例: Not really. Although many young people live there, there are few job opportunities, so it is hard to find stable work. Because of that, many young people move to larger cities for better careers.

× I'm burnt in a cold country.

✓ I was born in a cold country.

The student used 'burnt' (ожёг/сожжён), which is incorrect for describing birth. The correct verb is 'born' with the auxiliary 'was' for passive past: 'I was born'. Use 'was born' to state birthplace in English.

× I born in Russian.

✓ I was born in Russia.

Incorrect sentence structure: 'born' needs the auxiliary 'was' (passive past) and the country name should be in its correct form 'Russia' (not adjective 'Russian'). Use 'I was born in Russia.'

× My hometown is really strange for me because now I'm not living in this town, but I can say my hometown associates with my childhood.

✓ My hometown feels strange to me because I don't live there now, but I can say my hometown is associated with my childhood.

Tense and verb usage: use present simple 'feels' and negative present 'I don't live'. 'Associates with' is incorrect; the passive or adjective form 'is associated with' sounds natural. Also 'strange for me' -> 'strange to me.'

× I just like my hometown, but I like people who lives in this city because this is my relatable and my parents, my grandparents so.

✓ I just like my hometown, and I like the people who live in this city because they are like my relatives, such as my parents and grandparents.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'people who live' (not 'lives'). Word choice: 'relatable' is wrong; use 'relatives'. Sentence structure improved by replacing 'so' with 'such as' and clarifying meaning.

× I have lived there for 15 years, but when I'm 16 I moved to Moscow.

✓ I lived there for 15 years, but when I was 16 I moved to Moscow.

Tense mismatch: use past simple 'I lived' for a finished period and 'when I was 16' (past state). 'I'm 16' is present; replace with 'I was 16'.

× It was really good experience for me.

✓ It was a really good experience for me.

Article error: 'experience' in this sense needs the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'a really good experience.'

× However, a lot of younger people live in my hometown, but still in which place is really bad for living because people can't find works.

✓ Although many young people live in my hometown, it is still a bad place to live because people can't find jobs.

Conjunction misuse: 'However' and 'but' together is redundant; use 'Although' or 'However'. 'A lot of younger people' -> 'many young people'. 'in which place is really bad' is incorrect structure; use 'it is still a bad place to live'. 'find works' should be 'find jobs'.