工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ・主語・動詞の語順や冠詞（a/an/the）を正しく使う練習をしてください。短い文で明確に答え、追加情報は一つか二つに限定しましょう。具体的には“I am a third-year student at Kobe University, studying mechanical engineering.”のように言えれば自然です。・繰り返しや途切れ（uh, I. Study）の削減を意識し、文を連結する際は簡単な接続詞（and, because）を使ってください。

示例: I am a third-year student at Kobe University, studying mechanical engineering. I enjoy practical projects because they help me understand how machines work.

建议: ・質問に直接答える（location or workplace）際は正しい動詞形を使ってください。“I study”や“work”の混同を避け、冠詞の誤用（the Kobe）に注意してください。・短く明確に答え、通学の頻度など具体的な情報を付け加える場合は接続詞でつなぎましょう。

示例: I study at Kobe University, and I commute there every day by train. The campus is about 40 minutes from my home.

建议: ・理由を述べるときは文法を整え、主語と動詞の一致（students make）を確認しましょう。・不自然な語（pro place to walk）を避け、より適切な表現（nice place to study/work）を使ってください。接続詞（because, so）を使って理由を明確に示すと良いです。

示例: Yes, it's a great place to study because there are many motivated and intelligent students, which encourages me to work harder in mechanical engineering.

建议: ・“Would you like”には希望や意向を簡潔に答え、繰り返しや不要なフレーズを避けましょう。・“high level standards studies”は不自然なので“high academic standards”や“better study opportunities”のような表現を使うと明瞭です。理由を一つに絞って具体例を添えてください。

示例: Yes, I would like to work in Tokyo because universities and companies there have higher academic standards and more research opportunities, which would help my career development.

建议: ・将来の計画は具体的かつ簡潔に述べてください。曖昧な表現（medicine stuff）や過度のためらい（uh）を避け、どのような仕事をしたいか明確に示しましょう。・接続詞で目的や方法をつなぎ、具体的な例（medical devices, diagnostic tools）を示すと説得力が増します。

示例: I plan to live and work in Tokyo, developing medical devices that assist doctors in diagnosing and treating patients more easily and accurately.

× I'm student at Cover University.

✓ I'm a student at Cover University.

The noun 'student' is countable and needs an article 'a' when singular; add 'a' to indicate one student. Suggestion: use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns as appropriate.

× I am a third grade now I. Study at the Engineering. Yes, machine engineering.

✓ I am a third-year student now, studying engineering, specifically mechanical engineering.

Original sentences are fragmented and word order is incorrect. Use 'third-year student' to describe academic year and combine clauses into a single coherent sentence. 'Machine engineering' is better expressed as 'mechanical engineering.' Suggestion: use hyphenated 'third-year' and a continuous verb form 'studying' to link ideas.

× I'm study. I study at Colbert University, so I go to the Kobe every day.

✓ I study at Colbert University, so I go to Kobe every day.

'I'm study' is incorrect; use simple present 'I study.' Also 'the Kobe' is wrong because place names usually do not take 'the.' Remove 'the.' Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and omit definite article before most city names.

× so I go to the Kobe every day.

✓ so I go to Kobe every day.

City names normally do not take the preposition 'the.' Use 'go to Kobe' without 'the.' Suggestion: say 'go to [city]'.

× Yes, it's so nice pro place to walk because uh, there are many intelligent students in Kobe University so they makes me stay motivated to study machine engineering.

✓ Yes, it's a very nice place to study because there are many intelligent students at Kobe University who keep me motivated to study mechanical engineering.

Multiple issues: 'so nice pro place to walk' is nonsensical; likely 'a very nice place to study.' Use 'a' before 'very nice place.' 'Kobe University' takes preposition 'at.' 'they makes' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'who keep me motivated.' 'machine engineering' should be 'mechanical engineering.' Suggestion: use correct collocations 'place to study' and match verb to plural subject.

× they makes me stay motivated to study machine engineering.

✓ they make me stay motivated to study mechanical engineering.

Subject 'they' is plural so the verb should be base form 'make' not 'makes.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subjects.

× I, I would like to work in Tokyo because, uh, there is a high level standards studies.

✓ I would like to work in Tokyo because there are high-level academic standards.

'There is' is incorrect for plural 'standards'; use 'there are.' Also 'high level standards studies' is ungrammatical; use 'high-level academic standards.' Suggestion: hyphenate 'high-level' and use 'are' for plural nouns.

× there is a high level standards studies.

✓ there are high-level academic standards.

Use 'there are' for plural 'standards.' Also restructure phrase: 'high-level academic standards.' Suggestion: ensure 'there be' matches plurality.

× So I go to the Tokyo, I study anything, it's high level.

✓ So I would go to Tokyo to study various subjects because the level is high.

Remove definite article before 'Tokyo.' 'Study anything' is vague; use 'study various subjects.' Also adjust tense and modal 'would' to match 'would like.' Suggestion: use 'go to [city]' and clearer phrasing for purpose.

× I, I would like to work in Tokyo because, uh, there is a high level standards studies. So I go to the Tokyo, I study anything, it's high level.

✓ I would like to work in Tokyo because there are high-level academic standards, so I would go to Tokyo to study a variety of subjects at a high level.

Combine fragments and correct articles, plurality, and word choice. Use consistent modal 'would' and clearer purpose clause. Suggestion: make one coherent complex sentence.

× I would like to live in Tokyo and work at Tokyo, so I would like to develop the medicine stuff, uh, which helps, uh, the doctors, uh, it's easy to, uh.

✓ I would like to live and work in Tokyo, and I want to develop medical devices that help doctors use them more easily.

Use 'work in Tokyo' not 'work at Tokyo.' 'Develop the medicine stuff' is informal and vague; use 'develop medical devices' or 'medical technology.' Clarify purpose with relative clause and make sentence grammatical. Suggestion: use 'want to' for clearer intent and choose precise nouns like 'medical devices'.

× work at Tokyo

✓ work in Tokyo

Use 'in' with cities. 'At' is used for specific locations (e.g., at the office). Suggestion: say 'work in [city].'