工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but slightly wordy and has some grammatical awkwardness. Make the response more concise with a direct topic sentence and one brief supporting detail. Correct grammar: use "final year" or "last year of school" and avoid redundant phrases like "right now" twice.

示例: I'm a high school student in my final year. I'm focusing on language courses because I want to become a translator in the future.

建议: You answered the question but started oddly by saying you "can't tell about my studies" which is confusing. Begin with a direct statement: "I don't work, I'm a student," then give concise, specific supporting details. Fix grammar: "I have big plans" -> "I have big plans" or "I have ambitious plans." Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

示例: I don't work; I'm a full-time student. I'm focusing on foreign languages because I plan to become a translator or language tutor after graduation.

建议: Good points but some grammar and word choice issues ("foreign natives teachers" -> "native foreign teachers" or simply "native speakers"; "more based on" -> "focused on"). Be concise and use linking words like "however" appropriately. Give a specific example of what you want more of to make it concrete.

示例: Yes, it's a good place to study languages because many of our teachers are native speakers. However, the courses focus mainly on basic conversation, and I would like more advanced grammar and immersion opportunities, such as language exchange programs.

建议: The answer is personal and natural but slightly exaggerated and awkward in phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Avoid ambiguous phrases like "very complex and bad times"; instead say "difficult periods" and explain briefly why (e.g., exams, workload).

示例: Yes, I really like my school because of the friendly atmosphere and my friends. However, I sometimes struggle during exam periods when the workload becomes stressful.

建议: The idea is clear but phrasing is awkward. Use a direct topic sentence and logical sequence with linking words (first, then). Correct collocations: "try myself as an English tutor" -> "work as an English tutor"; "placed near my home" -> "near my home"; "more popular and serious centers" -> "larger, more reputable centers."

示例: After I finish school, I plan to work as an English tutor at a local center near my home. Later, I hope to gain experience and move to a larger, more reputable language center where I could become a lead teacher.

× Currently I am in my senior year of high school and next year will be the last year from my school studies, so right now I'm a student.

✓ Currently I am in my senior year of high school and next year will be my last year of school studies, so right now I'm a student.

The phrase 'the last year from my school studies' is unidiomatic. Use 'my last year of school studies' to correctly express possession and the noun relationship. This is a present-tense/state description; ensure noun phrases are natural.

× Since I do not work and I am just a student, I can't tell about my studies.

✓ Since I do not work and I am just a student, I can't talk about my work experience.

The original sentence misuses 'tell about my studies' in context (question asked 'Where do you work?'). The correct response should state inability to describe work experience. This is an issue of choosing the correct verb and noun phrase to match the intended meaning ('talk about'/'describe' + 'work experience').

× For instance, right now I'm studying more foreign languages, so it's a subject that I'm more focused on since I have a big plans for my future job as a translator or language tutor.

✓ For instance, right now I'm studying more foreign languages, so it's a subject that I'm more focused on since I have big plans for my future job as a translator or language tutor.

The error is the article 'a' before 'big plans' (plural) which is incorrect. Use no article with plural 'big plans'. Also note 'more foreign languages' and 'more focused on' are acceptable here as comparative emphasis.

× I think my school is quite good place for studying foreign languages because we mostly have a lot of foreign natives teachers.

✓ I think my school is quite a good place for studying foreign languages because we mostly have a lot of native foreign teachers.

Missing article 'a' before 'good place' is incorrect (article error). Also the phrase 'foreign natives teachers' has incorrect word order and form; use 'native foreign teachers' or better 'native speakers who are teachers'. The main correction requested is the article.

× However, our school is more based on a basic conversation and basic studies and I would like to have much more opportunities that I have right now.

✓ However, our school focuses more on basic conversations and basic studies, and I would like to have many more opportunities than I have right now.

Several issues: 'is more based on' is awkward — use 'focuses more on' (verb form). 'a basic conversation' should be plural or uncountable as 'basic conversations'. 'much more opportunities' is incorrect: use 'many more opportunities' for countable noun 'opportunities'. Also comparative structure should be 'than I have right now'.

× Yes, I quite do love my school because it is always filled with joy and happiness, especially because of my friends.

✓ Yes, I really do love my school because it is always filled with joy and happiness, especially because of my friends.

'Quite do love' is nonstandard collocation. Use 'really do love' or 'quite love' but not both. This is a pronoun/word choice issue affecting natural adverb use; 'really' fits here.

× Nevertheless, there may be some very complex and bad times for me that I very struggle with.

✓ Nevertheless, there may be some very difficult times that I struggle with a lot.

The phrase 'complex and bad times' is odd; 'difficult times' is natural. 'That I very struggle with' is ungrammatical: use 'that I struggle with a lot' or 'that I find very difficult'. This fixes sentence structure and adverb placement.

× I suppose that after finishing my last year in school, I would really like to try myself as an English tutor in my local center which is placed near my home.

✓ I suppose that after finishing my last year in school, I would really like to try working as an English tutor at my local centre, which is located near my home.

'Try myself as an English tutor' is unidiomatic; use 'try working as' or 'try being'. 'Placed near my home' is awkward; use 'located near my home'. This is a modal/verb phrase usage and collocation issue.

× So after that I would really like to go to another more popular and serious centers as a head teacher.

✓ So after that I would really like to go to other, more popular and more prestigious centres as a head teacher.

Preposition 'to another ... centers' is inconsistent (singular 'another' with plural 'centers'). Use 'other centres' or 'another, more popular centre'. Also 'serious' is not the best adjective here; 'more prestigious' or 'more established' fits better. Fixed plurality and preposition/word choice errors.