工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng và phù hợp, nhưng cần ngắn gọn hơn và tránh lặp ý để tự nhiên hơn. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: môn học chính và mục tiêu học tập). Tránh dùng quá nhiều cụm từ giải thích dài trong phần Part 1.

示例: I’m a final-year high school student studying mainly science subjects. I’m concentrating on maths and physics because I plan to study computer science at university.

建议: Câu trả lời trực tiếp và chứa thông tin cụ thể, nhưng cần gắn kết câu bằng liên từ và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn. Có thể nêu thêm một chi tiết nhanh về môi trường đường đi để phong phú nội dung.

示例: I study at a school about a 15-minute walk from my home, but I usually ride my bike because the route is quiet and it’s quicker. The roads are safe and lined with trees, which makes the ride pleasant.

建议: Trả lời tốt với cấu trúc rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể. Có thể liên kết các ý mượt mà hơn bằng liên từ và giảm nhẹ số từ để đáp ứng giới hạn câu. Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về hoạt động cụ thể sẽ làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

示例: Yes, it’s a great place to study. The campus is green and quiet, and teachers and classmates are very supportive. For instance, group projects are well organized, which makes collaboration easy.

建议: Ý chính rõ ràng và có ví dụ, nhưng câu hơi dài và có lỗi nhỏ (thừa từ 'and'). Nên dùng liên từ hợp lý, tránh lặp từ và cân nhắc thay ví dụ bằng một chi tiết liên quan đến trải nghiệm học tập để phù hợp Part 1.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy studying there. I get on well with classmates and teachers, and the support staff are helpful — for example, they often point me to the right classroom when I’m late, which saves time.

建议: Nội dung hữu ích nhưng câu không hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp/thiếu từ. Cần sửa lỗi, hoàn thành ý cuối và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: mục tiêu, lý do ngắn gọn, và kế hoạch cụ thể. Tránh từ thừa như 'on computer' và hoàn thiện nghề nghiệp bạn hướng tới.

示例: I plan to graduate this year and study computer science at university because I enjoy programming. After graduating, I hope to work as an IT engineer or software developer, ideally in a company that builds web applications.

× I study at a school just a 15 minutes walk from my house.

✓ I study at a school just a 15-minute walk from my house.

Use a hyphenated compound adjective before a noun: '15-minute walk' modifies 'walk' as a single adjective phrase. Also use singular 'minute' in such compounds. Suggestion: use hyphenation for number+unit when used adjectivally.

× I usually ride my bike there because the route is quiet and it is faster than walking.

✓ I usually ride my bike there because the route is quiet and it is faster than walking.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included only to show this sentence meets the list and requires no change.)

× My school has a green campus and peaceful surroundings which make it pleasant to study there.

✓ My school has a green campus and peaceful surroundings, which make it pleasant to study there.

Add a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause 'which make it pleasant to study there.' This is punctuation rather than grammar type from the list but improves clarity. Suggestion: place a comma before 'which' when adding extra information.

× Also, my teachers and classmates are very supportive and the curriculum is well organized so I feel comfortable studying and collaborating with others.

✓ Also, my teachers and classmates are very supportive, and the curriculum is well organized, so I feel comfortable studying and collaborating with others.

Add commas to separate independent clauses joined by conjunctions 'and' and 'so'. This improves readability; ensure punctuation separates clauses.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you study?

Question context: examiner asked about place of work but student is a student. Use 'study' instead of 'work' to match context. Suggestion: make sure verbs match the role (work vs study).

× For example, they often assist me with finding rooms or and carrying supplies, which makes my day much easier.

✓ For example, they often assist me with finding rooms and carrying supplies, which makes my day much easier.

Remove the extra 'or' before 'and'; parallel gerund phrases should be joined correctly. Use 'finding rooms and carrying supplies' as coordinated -ing verbs. Suggestion: ensure coordination uses only one conjunction and maintains parallel structure.

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future plans for work?

Both forms are acceptable; no strong grammatical error. Suggested rephrasing to sound more natural: 'What are your future plans for work?' Ensure question targets plans clearly.

× I plan to graduate this year and attend my preferred university to major in computer science.

✓ I plan to graduate this year and attend my preferred university to major in computer science.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. Keep tense consistent: present continuous 'plan' for future intentions followed by infinitives 'to graduate' and 'to attend.'

× I chose this route because I enjoy designing programs on computer and after graduating I hope to work as an IT engineer or.

✓ I chose this route because I enjoy designing programs on the computer, and after graduating I hope to work as an IT engineer.

Add article 'the' before 'computer' (or better: 'on computers' or 'designing computer programs'). Remove trailing 'or' which leaves the sentence incomplete. Also add comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'designing computer programs' or 'designing programs on the computer' and finish the career options without an orphaned 'or'.}]}verlening_missing_json_schema_fixed