工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use standard contractions and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid 'wanna' in formal test — use 'want to'. Also correct tense/word choice: 'I'm a student at a language school because I want to study abroad next year, so I'm preparing now.'

示例: I am a student at a language school because I want to study abroad next year. I am taking intensive English classes twice a week to improve my speaking and listening skills.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar. Don't ask 'Why is that?'. Use a clear topic sentence: 'I don't work at the moment.' Then give one or two specific reasons about future plans. Correct phrases: 'work abroad' and 'international companies'.

示例: I don't work at the moment because I am studying full-time. In the future I would like to work abroad, especially for an international company, because it would broaden my perspective and let me learn about different cultures.

建议: Make the answer relevant to the question and correct word choice: examiner asked about working — clarify if you mean the school or a workplace. Give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid filler sounds like 'MMM'.

示例: Yes, I think it would be a good place to work because it is in central Tokyo. For example, public transportation is excellent, so commuting would be easy and convenient for employees.

建议: Answer should begin with a clear topic sentence and be relevant to 'would you like the place'. Use coherent linking: 'Yes, I would like it because...' Give specific details and correct grammar ('talk with my friends'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I would like that place because it has many facilities. For example, there are plenty of chairs and tables and quiet study areas, so it's easy to meet and practice English with friends.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid informal language. Use correct expressions: 'work abroad' and 'work for an international company'. Give a specific plan or step you are taking. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I haven't decided on a specific job yet, but I would like to work abroad in the future. To prepare, I am improving my English and studying international business so I can work for an international company and learn about different cultures.

× I'm a student at language school because I wanna study abroad next year, so I'm preparing for studying abroad now.

✓ I'm a student at a language school because I want to study abroad next year, so I'm preparing for it now.

Uses informal 'wanna' (replace with 'want to') and missing article before 'language school' ('a language school'). Repeating 'study abroad' is redundant; replace second instance with 'it' for clarity. Suggestion: use formal language in tests and include necessary articles.

× Why is that? As I mentioned, I'm shouldn't so I don't work, but in the future I would like to work in abroad, especially international companies because it helps me broaden my perspective.

✓ Why is that? As I mentioned, I shouldn't work, so I don't have a job now, but in the future I would like to work abroad, especially for international companies because they would help me broaden my perspective.

Original has incorrect contraction 'I'm shouldn't' which combines subject and modal incorrectly; use 'I shouldn't' or better rephrase to 'I don't have a job now'. 'Work in abroad' is wrong; use 'work abroad' (no preposition 'in'). 'International companies' is plural so use 'they would' not 'it helps'. Suggestion: avoid incorrect contractions and check preposition use and subject references.

× MMM yes it is good place to study because it is located in central Tokyo so all of students go to their E3 because public transportation is accessible for every student.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because it is located in central Tokyo, so all of the students can get there easily because public transportation is accessible to everyone.

Missing article before 'good place' ('a good place'). 'All of students' should be 'all of the students' or 'all students'. 'Go to their E3' is unclear and likely incorrect phrase; replaced with 'can get there easily'. 'Accessible for every student' is better as 'accessible to everyone'. Suggestion: include articles, use clear phrasing, and correct prepositions (accessible to).

× Yes, of course there is a wide range of facilities. Like it's cool and easy to speak my friends because there are a lot of chairs and tables. That's why it's really enjoyable for me to study English and chat with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course there is a wide range of facilities. For example, it's comfortable and easy to talk with my friends because there are many chairs and tables. That's why it's really enjoyable for me to study English and chat with them.

Starting a sentence with 'Like' in this context is informal and vague; use 'For example'. 'Speak my friends' is incorrect; use 'talk with my friends' or 'talk to my friends'. 'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many' for formality. Repeating 'my friends' can be replaced with 'them' for cohesion. Suggestion: avoid informal fillers and use correct verbs and pronouns.

× Actually I haven't decided yet properly, but I would like to work in abroad in the future. I wanna work for international companies because it helps broaden my perspective and I can understand different cultures. That's why I work for international company.

✓ Actually, I haven't decided properly yet, but I would like to work abroad in the future. I want to work for international companies because they help broaden my perspective and allow me to understand different cultures. That's why I would like to work for an international company.

'I haven't decided yet properly' is better as 'I haven't decided properly yet' for natural word order. 'Work in abroad' is incorrect — use 'work abroad'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'It helps' should match plural 'companies' so use 'they help' and 'I can understand' better as 'allow me to understand' for formality. Final sentence tense/meaning corrected to 'would like to work for an international company'. Suggestion: fix adverb placement, preposition use, agreement of pronouns with nouns, and avoid informal contractions.