工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating 'I am a student' and filler words like 'uh'.

示例: I am currently a research student. I completed my master's at Jadavpur University and am now working to publish a paper based on my thesis research.

建议: Organize your answer: state your role and workplace, then give one clear detail about your research and one about the workplace. Remove repetitions and hesitations.

示例: I work as a researcher at Jadavpur University, focusing on offshore structures for my thesis. The department provides good facilities and supportive colleagues for my research.

建议: Good content and specifics; reduce fillers and combine related points with linking words to sound more fluent. Use one or two linking phrases to structure your response.

示例: Yes, it is. The lab has plenty of equipment, and my supervisor is very supportive. Moreover, he advises me on both research and career decisions, which makes my experience very positive.

建议: This answer is natural and specific. Improve cohesion by using linking words and avoid short informal starts like 'Yeah'. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love working there. I have many friends and helpful juniors with bright ideas who assist in my research, so the atmosphere is collaborative rather than competitive.

建议: Be more concise and correct phrasing: say 'abroad' or 'an overseas university' and explain one clear reason with a linking word. Reduce hesitations and avoid repetition.

示例: I plan to pursue a PhD at a well-ranked overseas university because there are limited options locally and studying abroad would give me broader research exposure and better career opportunities.

× I am pursuing research.

✓ I am pursuing research.

No change needed; 'pursuing' is correctly used as the present participle after 'am'. Keep current form.

× I have completed my master's degree from Jadavpur University and uh, now I am uh, pursuing research.

✓ I completed my master's degree at Jadavpur University, and now I am pursuing research.

The original mixes present perfect with a clear past event; both forms can be correct but 'completed' simple past is more natural when specifying the finished action and institution. Also use 'at' for institutions rather than 'from'. Suggestion: use simple past 'completed' and preposition 'at'.

× I have uh, done a thesis work and I am uh, trying to publish the paper out of the work that I have done in my thesis.

✓ I did thesis work and I am trying to publish a paper based on the work I did for my thesis.

Use simple past 'did' for completed actions; 'thesis work' is uncountable so omit 'a' and say 'publish a paper based on' rather than 'out of'. Repeating 'that I have done' is wordy; simplify to 'I did for my thesis'.

× A lot of equipments are available there.

✓ A lot of equipment is available there.

'Equipment' is an uncountable noun and should not take the plural form 'equipments'. Use singular uncountable form 'equipment' and singular verb 'is' or say 'There is a lot of equipment'. Suggestion: 'A lot of equipment is available there.'

× My supervisor is very friendly and, uh, helpful too. He gives me advice not only regarding my, uh, scientific work, but also about my life, about my future career, what to do and what not to do.

✓ My supervisor is very friendly and helpful. He gives me advice not only about my scientific work but also about my life and my future career, advising me on what to do and what not to do.

Original is mostly correct but contains repetitive fillers and needs parallel structure: 'not only ... but also' should mirror forms. Improve by making the paired elements parallel and removing extra commas and fillers.

× I work as a researcher uh, at Jadhavpur University.

✓ I work as a researcher at Jadavpur University.

Correct preposition 'at' is used, but university name was misspelled. Fix spelling 'Jadavpur'.

× I am working on my thesis topic, which is mainly uh, deals with which mainly deals with offshore uh structures.

✓ I am working on my thesis topic, which mainly deals with offshore structures.

Remove the extra 'is' and repeated 'which mainly deals'; combine to a single clause. Also 'offshore structures' is correct plural here. Fix redundancy and word order.

× The work environment at this university is really good and.

✓ The work environment at this university is really good.

The sentence ends with 'and' without completing the clause. Remove the trailing conjunction to make a complete sentence. Suggestion: if you intended to add more, finish the sentence (for example, 'and supportive').

× I also have a number of juniors who are very helpful and they have brilliant minds.

✓ I also have several juniors who are very helpful and have brilliant minds.

Use 'several' or 'a number of' is acceptable; avoid redundant pronoun 'they' after relative clause. Make verb agreement with plural 'juniors' and keep concise.

× Instead of competing, there is a very friendly and developing environment.

✓ Instead of competing, people have created a very friendly and supportive environment.

Original misplaced 'instead of competing' connects to 'there is' awkwardly. Clarify the subject (people or colleagues) who are not competing. Also 'developing environment' is unclear; 'supportive' or 'collaborative' is better.

× I am planning to pursue my PhD from an abroad university which has a good world ranking.

✓ I am planning to pursue my PhD at a university abroad that has a good world ranking.

Use 'at' and place 'abroad' after the noun: 'a university abroad' or 'an overseas university'. Also change 'from an abroad university' to 'at a university abroad'. Use 'that' for defining clause.

× I am not uh doing it from my country because uh, there are limited options in my country while uh in abroad I can get uh large exposure which can help me boost my career.

✓ I am not doing it in my country because there are limited options here, while abroad I can gain greater exposure that can help boost my career.

Use 'in my country' not 'from my country'. Replace 'in abroad' with 'abroad'. Use 'gain greater exposure' instead of 'get large exposure' and avoid repetition of 'my country'. Improve flow and word choice.