工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I am a student at Karanga State University.”) Then add one or two specific supporting details about your studies or goals. Use correct grammar for confidence (e.g., “I lack confidence” not “I don't have a confident”) and avoid repetition.

示例: I am a student at Karanga State University. I am studying education with an interest in improving my English because I lack confidence when speaking. I hope to take more English classes and practice with classmates to become more fluent.

建议: Answer directly: say you don't work and explain briefly why. Use simple, accurate grammar: “I am a student, so I don’t work.” Then give a clear reason for wanting to improve English. Avoid unclear phrases like “It comes to my classmates.”

示例: I am a full-time student, so I don't have a job at the moment. I want to improve my English because I want to feel more confident speaking with classmates and in public.

建议: Clarify what “place” refers to. If you mean your university, say so and give one or two reasons. Keep sentences short and logical using linking words like “because” or “so.”

示例: If you mean my university, yes, it is a good place to be because the teachers are helpful and there are resources for learning. However, I am not working there; I am studying full time.

建议: Answer the question clearly. If you don’t currently work, reframe: say where you would like to work in the future and why. Give specific reasons (career opportunities, family connections). Use correct articles and vocabulary: “an auntie” → “an aunt.”

示例: I don't work now, but in the future I would like to work in Dubai because my aunt lives there and there are many job opportunities. I think it would help me earn more and gain international experience.

建议: Give a clear, organized plan: state your goal, then explain what you are doing now and why. Use correct tenses and phrases: “I wanted to be a flight attendant” or “I planned to be,” “I am studying education with a major in English,” and “I lack confidence speaking in public.” End with a positive step (e.g., seeking help).

示例: I originally planned to become a flight attendant, but now I am studying education with a major in English. I still feel nervous speaking in public and want to improve my English, so I am taking courses and practicing to build my confidence.

× I am a student and I am schooling now from Karanga State University and I would like to know how to speak English because I don't know how to handle it and I don't I don't have a confident to tell that one.

✓ I am a student at Karanga State University and I would like to learn how to speak English because I don't know how to use it and I don't have the confidence to speak.

Multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect use of 'schooling now from' (use 'a student at' or 'studying at'), awkward phrase 'handle it' (use 'use it' or 'speak it'), repetition 'I don't I don't', and incorrect noun 'a confident' (should be 'confidence'). Suggestion: simplify into clear clauses, use 'study at' or 'be a student at', use 'learn' or 'speak', and use the noun 'confidence'.

× I don't have work because I have a student and I want to know how to speak English because I love confidence speaking. It comes to my classmates.

✓ I don't have a job because I am a student, and I want to learn to speak English because I love speaking confidently; it helps me communicate with my classmates.

Issues: incorrect word 'work' used as a noun meaning job (use 'a job'), 'I have a student' should be 'I am a student' (pronoun error/structure), 'love confidence speaking' is incorrect adjective/adverb order (use 'speaking confidently'), and 'It comes to my classmates' is unclear (intended meaning likely 'it helps me communicate with my classmates'). Suggestion: correct noun use, maintain subject consistency, and use adverb 'confidently'.

× Maybe, but I can relate it because I am not at work. I am here for school and doing all my best for the school.

✓ Maybe, but I cannot relate because I am not working. I am here for school and I am doing my best for my studies.

Problems: 'relate it' is incorrect phrasal use (should be 'relate' without 'it' or 'cannot relate'), 'not at work' is okay but 'not working' fits better, 'doing all my best for the school' has awkward structure and article use ('all my best' should be 'doing my best' and 'for the school' should be 'for my studies' or 'for the school'). Suggestion: use correct verb forms and clearer noun phrases ('doing my best for my studies').

× I like to work in Dubai because I have a auntie there and I love making money.

✓ I would like to work in Dubai because I have an auntie there and I want to earn money.

Errors: article 'a' before a vowel sound should be 'an auntie'. 'I like to work' is acceptable but 'I would like to work' fits future intention better. 'I love making money' is grammatical but 'want to earn money' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: use correct articles before vowel sounds and choose verbs that match intent ('would like', 'want to earn').

× Before I went to my future plant, I am I am a flight attendant, but now I'm taking a course of education major in English.

✓ Before, I wanted to be a flight attendant, but now I'm taking an education course majoring in English.

Problems: 'Before I went to my future plant' is incorrect and unclear ('plant' is wrong word); 'I am I am a flight attendant' has repetition and wrong tense; 'a course of education major in English' is awkward—use 'an education course majoring in English'. Suggestion: state past intention with 'wanted to be', remove repetition, and use 'majoring in' for academic focus.

× But I don't want to because I am a lack of competence to speak in the public and I don't know how to English.

✓ But I am reluctant because I lack the competence to speak in public, and I don't know English well.

Errors: 'I don't want to because I am a lack of competence' mixes negation and noun phrase incorrectly; correct structure is 'I lack the competence'. 'Speak in the public' should be 'speak in public' (no article). 'I don't know how to English' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't know English well' or 'I don't know how to speak English'. Suggestion: use verb 'lack' with noun 'competence', drop 'the' before 'public', and express ability to speak English clearly.

× I am here to make you help me.

✓ I am here to ask for your help.

'Make you help me' is a wrong construction; it implies forcing someone. The correct phrase is 'ask for your help' or 'ask you to help me'. Suggestion: use polite request structures: 'I am here to ask for your help' or 'Could you please help me?'.