工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答を明確で文法的に正しい形に整理し、冗長な繰り返しを避けてください。例えば職場と役職を一文で述べ、その後在職期間や理由を簡潔に補足すると自然です。また文末が途切れているので、理由や感想を完結させてください。具体的には時制（現在完了形）と冠詞の使い方に注意し、発音上のためらいを減らす練習をしてください。

示例: I work as an administrative assistant at the Patent Office. I have worked there for just over two years, and I really enjoy the job because I learn a lot about intellectual property and work with supportive colleagues.

建议: 場所の説明は現在形で簡潔に述べ、不要なためらい語や繰り返しを減らしましょう。形容詞や語順（"hustle and bustle"など）を正しく使い、具体的な利便性の説明を付け加えると説得力が増します。また動詞時制を統一してください。

示例: I work in central Osaka, which is a bustling area. It's very convenient because several subway lines stop nearby, so commuting is easy.

建议: 肯定の理由を一つか二つに絞り、文法（単数・複数、一致）を正しくして自然なつなぎ言葉を使いましょう。"because"の後は完全な文にし、具体例（カフェやレストラン）を短く付け加えると良いです。

示例: Yes, absolutely. My building is connected directly to a subway station, so commuting is very convenient, and there are several cafés and restaurants in the same building where we can have lunch.

建议: 質問には直接答え（Yes/No）を最初に示し、続けて理由を一貫した文で述べてください。語順や語の選択（"recent allocation"は不自然。"recently relocated"など）を改善し、冗長な表現（"work working environment my"）を避けて明瞭に述べてください。

示例: Yes, I do like it. I was recently relocated there, and the new building is modern and convenient, so I find the working environment very pleasant.

建议: 将来の計画がまだ定まっていない場合でも、希望や目標を明確に述べると良い印象になります。曖昧な表現や文法の誤り（"promote"→"be promoted"、"get good salary"→"get a better salary"）を直し、条件節を自然な語順で完結させてください。

示例: To be honest, I don't have firm plans yet, but I would like to be promoted and earn a higher salary. If a suitable position becomes available in the future, I would definitely apply.

× I work at the administrative assistant at Patent Office.

✓ I work as an administrative assistant at the Patent Office.

The role requires the preposition 'as' to indicate job position, and 'the' is needed before 'Patent Office' because it refers to a specific organization. Use 'an' before 'administrative' because it begins with a vowel sound.

× I have been working this role about over 2 years.

✓ I have been working in this role for over two years.

Use 'in this role' to indicate position and the present perfect continuous 'have been working' is correct; 'for' is used with durations, not 'about over'. Spell out small numbers and remove redundant words.

× I really enjoyed this job because.

✓ I really enjoy this job because it is interesting and rewarding.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes past and present. Use present tense 'enjoy' for current job and complete the clause with a reason.

× I, I worked at uh, central Osaka, which is really hustle bustle city.

✓ I work in central Osaka, which is a really bustling city.

The student speaks about current workplace so use present tense 'work' not past 'worked'. Use 'in' for locations and 'bustling' is the correct adjective; include the article 'a'.

× However, it's very convenient because uh, many, uh, subway station connected.

✓ However, it's very convenient because many subway stations are connected.

Use plural 'stations' to match 'many' and form passive with 'are connected'. Avoid filler words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, absolutely, because uh, my buildings connected to a subway station, it's very convenient and some restaurants are cafe in the same building we can enjoy.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because my building is connected to a subway station, it's very convenient, and there are some restaurants and a cafe in the same building that we can enjoy.

Use singular 'building' to match 'my', add 'is' for verb, 'a' before 'cafe', and 'there are' for existence. Use 'that' to introduce the relative clause. Add commas for clarity.

× It's very difficult question for me because I really love a recent allocation because it's very convenient and buildings are quite new, so it's really great to work working environment my.

✓ That's a difficult question for me because I really like my current location; it's very convenient, and the building is quite new, so it's a great working environment for me.

Rewrite to correct word order and articles: 'current location' instead of 'recent allocation', use 'building is' singular, 'working environment' needs 'for me'. Remove repeated 'because' and fix word order.

× To tell you the truth, I don't have any plans.

✓ To tell you the truth, I don't have any concrete plans.

Add 'concrete' to clarify meaning; present tense negative is correct for current lack of plans.

× However, I really want to uh promote and get good salary.

✓ However, I really want to be promoted and to get a better salary.

Use passive 'be promoted' for promotion, and 'a better salary' with article and comparative 'better'. Use infinitive forms 'to be promoted' and 'to get' in parallel.

× More so in the future if I suit a good position I would.

✓ Also, in the future, if I get a good position, I would consider it.

Use 'get' instead of 'suit' for obtaining a position, and complete the conditional with a main clause 'I would consider it'. Add commas for clarity and use 'also' instead of 'more so'.