工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct small grammar/use natural phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details. Correct tense and collocation: say “I’m a student” and “I’ve just finished four years of secondary school and will now study at high school.”

示例: I’m a student. I’ve just finished four years of secondary school and will now study at Malenji High School for three years.

建议: Answer directly then add concise location detail. Use natural linking and correct phrasing: say “I don’t work at the moment” and avoid mixing future tense with current facts. Keep sentences short (max 3–4).

示例: I don’t work at the moment. I will study at Malenji High School in District 6 of Hojuman City, the largest city in Vietnam.

建议: Don’t refuse the question—adapt it to your situation: say you don’t work but can comment on your school. Use correct articles and grammar ("an academic and friendly environment") and avoid redundancy ("very excellent" -> "excellent"). Provide one specific reason or example.

示例: I don’t work, but I can talk about my school. It’s an excellent place to study because it has an academic and friendly environment, with teachers who offer extra help after class.

建议: Answer directly about preference, then give one or two clear reasons. Remove hesitations ("I can, I can try it"), use smoother phrasing and linking ("because" or "as"). Give a concrete example of help you receive.

示例: I don’t work, but I really like my school. The teachers and classmates are friendly and often help me with studying and presentations, for example by reviewing my drafts before I present.

建议: State your plan clearly and avoid vague phrasing. Use precise vocabulary ("mechanical systems of planes" or "aircraft systems") and link reason with “because” succinctly. Mention a specific step you will take to reach that goal.

示例: I would like to become an aerospace engineer because I enjoy math, physics and studying aircraft mechanical systems. To prepare, I plan to study engineering at university and join related clubs or internships.

× I'm now a student.

✓ I am currently a student.

Use of contraction 'I'm now' is acceptable but 'now' with contraction is informal; 'currently' is more appropriate for clarity in this context and matches present continuous aspect indicating current status. Suggest using 'I am currently a student.' for formality and clarity.

× I've just finished my four years at secondary school and I am now going to have three years at high school.

✓ I have just finished four years of secondary school and I am now going to attend high school for three years.

Use 'have just finished' (present perfect) is fine but 'my four years at secondary school' is wordy; replace with 'four years of secondary school'. 'Going to have three years at high school' is incorrect collocation: use 'attend high school for three years' to indicate duration. Maintain tense consistency.

× I'm going to study at a high school called Malenji in District 6 of Hojuman City, which is the biggest city in Vietnam.

✓ I am going to study at a high school called Malenji in District 6 of Hojuman City, which is the biggest city in Vietnam.

Sentence is mostly correct; change contraction for formality. Prepositions are correct. Keep 'in District 6 of Hojuman City' as is. Suggest using 'I am' instead of 'I'm' for clear spoken test responses.

× Well, I cannot answer your question, but if you wonder if my school is good, it's very excellent for studying because it's academic and friendly environment.

✓ Well, I cannot answer your question about work, but if you are asking whether my school is good, it is excellent for studying because it has an academic and friendly environment.

Original has mixed topics and redundancy: 'I cannot answer your question' needs object ('about work'). 'if you wonder if' is awkward; replace with 'if you are asking whether'. 'very excellent' is redundant; use 'excellent'. 'it's academic and friendly environment' is missing an article and a verb: use 'it has an academic and friendly environment.' This corrects sentence structure and article use.

× I'm not working, I'm just a student. I can, I can try it. Uh, my school is a very good place and I really love it because the teachers, the classmates are very friendly and they always help me in studying and presentation.

✓ I'm not working; I'm just a student. I can try. My school is a very good place and I really love it because the teachers and classmates are very friendly and they always help me with studying and presentations.

Run-on and disfluent phrasing: remove repeated 'I can, I can try it' to 'I can try.' Use 'teachers and classmates' without extra comma. 'help me in studying and presentation' is incorrect collocation: use 'help me with studying and presentations' (plural) and include article/ preposition 'with'. This fixes pronoun/reference and collocation issues.

× Well, if I have opportunities, I would like to be an aerospace engineer in the future because I love learning about the mechanical system of plant and I really like to do math and physics.

✓ Well, if I have the opportunity, I would like to be an aerospace engineer in the future because I love learning about mechanical systems of planes and I really like studying math and physics.

Use 'the opportunity' or 'opportunities' consistency: 'if I have the opportunity' is more natural. 'Would like' is correct modal use for polite future desire. 'mechanical system of plant' is incorrect noun choice—likely meant 'mechanical systems of planes' or 'aircraft'. Also 'like to do math and physics' is better as 'like studying math and physics.' This clarifies meaning and corrects collocation and vocabulary.