工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details. Avoid tense errors and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "and" or "so").

示例: I am a student. I have completed a BSc in Agricultural Economics and I plan to continue at the same university to study for my master’s degree, because I want to deepen my knowledge in this field.

建议: Answer directly and avoid repeating negatives. Give a short relevant detail about where you study using correct phrasing and a linking phrase if needed.

示例: I don’t work at the moment because I’m a full-time student. I study at Bangla Agricultural University, where I am enrolled in the Agricultural Economics program.

建议: Clarify the question by focusing on the university as a workplace or study place and avoid filler words. Provide specific reasons and one or two concrete examples of facilities.

示例: Although I don’t work there, my university would be a good place to work because it has a large campus, modern laboratories, and well-equipped libraries, which support both teaching and research.

建议: Respond directly to the implied question about whether you like the university. Use correct grammar (e.g., "teach us well") and give one or two specific positive points rather than general praise.

示例: Yes, I like my university. The faculty are highly qualified and supportive, and the campus atmosphere is friendly and focused on learning, which helps me study effectively.

建议: Give a clear, confident statement of your plans with specific actions and reduce hesitations. Use correct verb forms and link your aims to concrete outcomes.

示例: After completing my master’s in Agricultural Economics, I plan to work in agricultural policy: I want to design and evaluate policies that improve farm productivity and increase rural incomes, contributing to the national economy.

× I am a student currently I have completed my BSc degree and now I want to pursue my master's degree from the same university and my subject was Agricultural Economics.

✓ I am a student. I have completed my BSc degree, and now I want to pursue my master's degree at the same university. My subject was Agricultural Economics.

Run-on sentence and tense/sequence clarity: split into shorter sentences and use present perfect 'have completed' to indicate a past action with present relevance; use 'at' with 'university'; keep 'was' for the subject if referring to the past program.

× No, I don't work anyplace as I am a student. Umm, I don't have any workplace. I study and my university name is Bangla Agricultural University.

✓ No, I don't work anywhere because I am a student. I don't have a workplace. I study at Bangla Agricultural University.

Incorrect word choice and preposition: use 'anywhere' not 'anyplace'; use 'because' for reason; use 'study at' to indicate enrolment; reorder to avoid awkward phrasing.

× Again, I am a student, I don't have any workplace. Umm, yeah. If you want, uh, to ask that my university is good or bad, then I will tell you that, uh yeah, my university is good because, uh, it has a large area, many facilities, other amenities, etc.

✓ Again, I am a student, so I don't have a workplace. If you are asking whether my university is good or bad, I would say it is good because it has a large campus, many facilities, and other amenities.

Avoid filler words and use correct conjunctions: use 'so' to link clauses; 'if you are asking whether' is a clearer construction; use 'would say' for polite opinion; 'campus' fits 'large area'; remove 'etc.' for clarity.

× I don't have any workplace, but I have a university. My university is quite cool. It has many faculty members which are very good because they are well educated and they can taught us very well. And our environment, university environment is also quite good.

✓ I don't have a workplace, but I attend a university. My university is quite good. It has many faculty members who are very capable because they are well educated and they can teach us very well. The university environment is also very positive.

Pronoun and relative clause errors: use 'who' for people not 'which'; 'can teach' (base verb) not 'can taught' (past); replace 'cool' with 'good' or 'positive' for formal tone; avoid repeating 'environment' awkwardly.

× After complete my master's degree in agricultural economics, I want to serve my nation, umm, I want to, uh, create policy and evaluate policy which are good for agriculture and also beneficial and also contribute, uh, to our country's economy.

✓ After completing my master's degree in Agricultural Economics, I want to serve my nation. I want to create and evaluate policies that are good for agriculture and beneficial to our country's economy.

Gerund needed after 'after': use 'completing' not 'complete'. Make sentences concise and use plural 'policies' when speaking generally; use 'that' for defining relative clause; avoid repeated fillers and 'also' redundancy.