工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は意図が明確ですが、文法ミス（build → building）、冗長表現（同じことを繰り返す）があるため、より自然で簡潔な言い回しに直しましょう。具体的には：1) 主題文をはっきりさせる（I’m not working） 2) 理由を短く繋げる（because / so） 3) 動詞の形を整える。接続詞を使って文の流れを滑らかにする練習をしてください。

示例: I’m not working at the moment because I’m preparing to study abroad, so I’m focusing on improving my English and developing my academic skills.

建议: 内容は伝わりますが、文法と語彙の細かい誤り（at high school → at a high school、student → students、language skill → language skills）があります。過去の職務について話すときは、時制を一貫させ、複数形と冠詞に注意してください。さらに、Supporting detailを一つか二つの具体例に絞るとより効果的です。

示例: I’m not working right now. Until this March, I worked as an English teacher at a high school. It was rewarding because I could see my students improve their language skills, especially in speaking and writing.

建议: 回答は簡潔ですが混在した時制（was → are）と終わりの冗長なフレーズ（that's why）が目立ちます。理由を示す際は時制を一致させ、不要なフレーズを省いて理由を具体化（例：supportive in what way）すると自然になります。

示例: Yes, it was a good place to work because my colleagues and managers were friendly and very supportive, helping me develop new teaching methods.

建议: 意味は伝わりますが不自然な言い回し（I'd like the place where I worked は現在の好みと過去の職場が混在）、不要な文字（A.）や断片的な文があります。質問は仮定形に対する現在の感想なので、'I liked'や'I would like to work there again'など時制と意図を明確にしてください。また、詳細（なぜ平和なのか、庭について具体的に）を一つ加えると良いです。

示例: I liked the place where I worked because the atmosphere was very peaceful and there was a quiet garden nearby where students and staff could relax.

建议: 意図は明確ですが不自然な語順と語法（'are that I will'は冗長、'Teaching is fulfilling so'は語順の誤り）が見られます。未来計画を述べるときは簡潔な主題文（I plan to... / I will...）を使い、その理由を1〜2文で補足してください。

示例: I plan to continue teaching after I study abroad because I want to improve my teaching skills. I find teaching very fulfilling and hope to bring new methods to my classroom.

× At the moment I'm not working because I am preparing to study abroad.

✓ At the moment I'm not working because I am preparing to study abroad.

The sentence is correct; present continuous is used to describe current ongoing action and planned future study abroad. No change needed.

× So now I am focusing on improving my English and build academic skills, although I'm not employed right now.

✓ So now I am focusing on improving my English and building academic skills, although I'm not employed right now.

動詞の後に動名詞(-ing)を並べる場合、並列要素は同じ形を維持する必要があります。'improving' に合わせて 'building' の形にする必要があります。改善方法: 並列する動詞は両方とも -ing 形にすること。

× At the moment I'm not working. Until this March I worked as an English teacher at high school.

✓ At the moment I'm not working. Until this March I worked as an English teacher at a high school.

英語では 'high school' の前に不定冠詞 'a' が必要です（単数可算名詞）。改善方法: 可算名詞の単数形には適切な冠詞を付けること。

× My job was rewarding because I could see my student improve their language skill.

✓ My job was rewarding because I could see my students improve their language skills.

主語 'my student' が単数だと動詞や代名詞の一致が不自然です。複数の生徒を指すなら 'students' とし、それに対応して 'skills' の複数形を使います。改善方法: 数に応じて名詞と動詞・代名詞の数を一致させること。

× It was a good place to work because my colleagues and the bosses are friendly and supportive, that's why.

✓ It was a good place to work because my colleagues and the bosses were friendly and supportive.

文頭は過去形 'was' なので続く節も過去形 'were' を用いて時制を一致させるべきです。'that's why' は冗長で口語的なので削除しました。改善方法: 同一文内で時制を一致させること。

× I'd like the place where I worked because the atmosphere is very peaceful.

✓ I liked the place where I worked because the atmosphere was very peaceful.

質問は過去の職場についてなので過去形 'liked' と 'was' を使って時制を一致させるべきです。'I'd like' は現在の好みを表すので誤解を招きます。改善方法: 文脈（過去の職場）に合わせて過去形を使うこと。

× A. There is a place near the beautiful garden.

✓ There was a place near the beautiful garden.

話者は過去の職場について話しているため 'there is' を過去形 'there was' にする必要があります。改善方法: 文脈に合った 'there be' の時制を使うこと。

× My future work plans are that I will continue teaching.

✓ My future work plans are that I will continue teaching.

この文は文法的に正しいです。'will continue' は将来の計画を表す適切な助動詞です。No change needed.

× I decided to study abroad to improve my teaching skills.

✓ I decided to study abroad to improve my teaching skills.

文は正しい。過去の決定を表す 'decided' と目的を示す不定詞 'to improve' の組み合わせは適切です。No change needed.

× Teaching is fulfilling so.

✓ Teaching is fulfilling.

語順が不自然な 'so' は不要です。短く明確に 'Teaching is fulfilling.' とすることで意味が伝わります。改善方法: 不要な副詞や接続詞を削除し、文を簡潔にすること。