工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ngắn gọn, cụ thể hơn và sửa ngữ pháp: tách các ý thành câu ngắn, dùng mạo từ đúng, sửa số ít/số nhiều và động từ chia đúng. Nên nói rõ bạn là sinh viên, chuyên ngành, nơi làm việc (ví dụ phòng thí nghiệm ở trường) và mục tiêu nghiên cứu/publication. Tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài; dùng liên từ đơn giản (and, because, so) để liên kết ý. Ví dụ cần sửa: “I am a student at the University of Technology and Education. My major is Business Systems and Internet Engineering. I work in my university lab where I research wireless communications under a supervising professor who helps me publish papers.”

示例: I am a student at the University of Technology and Education. My major is Business Systems and Internet Engineering, and I work in my university lab. I research wireless communications, and my professor supervises my projects and helps me publish papers.

建议: Nêu rõ nơi làm việc bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp và bổ sung 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (lĩnh vực nghiên cứu, nhiệm vụ hàng ngày). Sửa ngữ pháp: dùng giới từ đúng (“in my university lab” không phải “on my lab”), số ít/số nhiều và động từ. Tránh dùng các câu nhảy chủ đề. Ví dụ cần sửa: “I work in my university lab, where I research information and communication technology for wireless systems.”

示例: I work in my university laboratory at the University of Technology and Education. I am involved in research on wireless information and communication technology, mainly focusing on designing network architectures for 5G and 6G.

建议: Cần rõ ràng, chia ý thành câu ngắn: trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) kèm lý do cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và mơ hồ (“follow to be”, “closer with more”). Nên nêu lợi thế cụ thể của nơi làm việc: tài nguyên, đồng nghiệp, cơ hội học cao hơn. Dùng liên từ để liên kết lý do (because, so, therefore).

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the labs are well-equipped and I can collaborate with experienced professors and PhD students. Therefore, it supports my goal of continuing to graduate study.

建议: Tránh lộn xộn; nói trực tiếp rằng bạn thích nơi làm việc và nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể (thiết bị, cơ sở vật chất, phù hợp với chuyên ngành). Sửa ngữ pháp (well-equipped, facilities, my university), rút gọn câu, dùng từ chính xác thay vì tiếng nói lắp. Nếu nhắc đến AI hoặc kiến trúc, nêu rõ mục đích sử dụng thiết bị.

示例: Yes, I really like my workplace. The labs are well-equipped and the facilities are high quality, which helps me develop AI-based architectures for my research.

建议: Trình bày rõ kế hoạch tương lai: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (“After I graduate, I plan to…”), sau đó nêu lý do và hoạt động hiện tại hỗ trợ mục tiêu (nghiên cứu về 5G/6G, thiết kế kiến trúc). Sửa ngữ pháp (Master’s or PhD, focus on doing research, in the university, motivated → modern/innovative), tránh câu lặp. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về kế hoạch (nghiên cứu, nộp đơn, làm việc).

示例: After I graduate, I plan to pursue a Master's degree and eventually a PhD. I am focusing on research in wireless communications, especially 5G and 6G, and I hope to design innovative network architectures while applying for postgraduate programs.

× 'Now I am a student at the University of Technology and Education, so my major is in business system and Internet acting.'

✓ 'Now I am a student at the University of Technology and Education, and my major is Business Systems and Internet Engineering.'

'The original sentence has article and noun-form errors. Use the conjunction and for clarity. Capitalize major names and use plural/singular forms appropriately: "Business Systems" (or "Business System") and "Internet Engineering" (a standard phrase). Use no article before major names. Suggestion: learn common major names and when to use articles.'

× 'I really love my school and my universities because the environment is quite very high classes with the modern and my professor is very well because he\'s instructs me a lot to building my project on research and publish.'

✓ 'I really love my school and my university because the environment is high-quality and modern, and my professor is very good because he instructs me a lot in building my research project and publishing.'

'Several issues: "universities" should be singular "university" when referring to one institution; "quite very" is redundant—use "quite" or "very"; "high classes with the modern" is ungrammatical—use "high-quality and modern"; "my professor is very well" uses an adverb incorrectly—use adjective "very good"; "he\'s instructs" has auxiliary+inflected verb—use "he instructs"; use correct prepositions: "in building my research project and publishing". Suggest practicing adjective vs adverb use and common collocations.'

× 'Actually yes, if I follow to be a professor or follow follow with the academic research path and this is the best way for me to closer with more More professional and PhD students are also the master and I want to study after I graduate and it is suitable for me to do something.'

✓ 'Actually yes. If I follow the path to become a professor and pursue academic research, it is the best way for me to get closer to more professional people and PhD students. I also want to continue studying after I graduate, and this environment is suitable for me.'

'The original is a run-on with unclear structure and incorrect verb forms: use separate sentences and correct infinitive phrase "to become a professor" instead of "follow to be a professor"; remove repeated words and unclear fragments; replace "closer with" by "get closer to" and clarify "professional people"; split into logical sentences. Suggest practicing sentence splitting and using infinitive constructions.'

× 'Actually, yes, now I really love the place I I work in the universities.'

✓ 'Actually, yes, I really love the place where I work at the university.'

'Use singular "university" if you refer to one and use "where I work" or "at the university". Remove duplicate "I". Preposition "at" or omission is acceptable: "work at the university". Suggest focusing on correct preposition and singular/plural consistency.'

× 'They see the labs with the well equipment and high quality facility In this I follow the major as well the AI.'

✓ 'They have well-equipped labs and high-quality facilities. In these labs I follow the AI major.'

'"see the labs" is awkward; better "have well-equipped labs". "the well equipment" should be "well-equipped" and "high quality facility" should be plural "high-quality facilities". Use plural agreement and hyphenated adjective forms. "the AI" should be "the AI major" or simply "AI". Suggest learning adjective + noun collocations and plural agreement.'

× 'So this is very suitable for me to have the equipment to the uh desired architecture and run with a Gu.'

✓ 'So this is very suitable for me to have the equipment to build the desired architecture and run it.'

'Use the verb "build" rather than an unclear noun phrase "to the uh desired architecture"; use gerund/infinitive correctly: "to have the equipment to build". Remove unclear "Gu". Suggest using precise verbs and correct verb + infinitive patterns.'

× 'After I graduate, I want to study Master or PhD. If I ask, I can.'

✓ 'After I graduate, I want to study for a Master's or a PhD. If I apply, I can get in.'

'Use "study for a Master's or a PhD" and include articles. "If I ask, I can" is unclear—use "If I apply, I can get in" or "If I am accepted, I can continue." Suggest learning common collocations for degrees and conditional phrasing.'

× 'So this is the reason why I focus on to do a research at my left in the university and follow my interest research about the communication and wireless topic about the 5G and 6G.'

✓ 'That is why I focus on doing research at my lab in the university and follow my research interests in communications and wireless topics such as 5G and 6G.'

'Errors include "focus on to do" (should be "focus on doing"), "my left" likely means "my lab", and word order issues. Use "research interests in communications and wireless topics such as 5G and 6G." Suggest practicing verb patterns after prepositions (focus on + -ing) and correct vocabulary (lab).'