工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation, produce a clear topic sentence and add one brief supporting detail. Avoid repeating filler words (uh) and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'and' or 'so' to connect ideas naturally.

示例: I'm currently unemployed and looking for a job. I have just completed an executive master's degree, so I hope this qualification will improve my chances of finding work.

建议: Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give concise supporting details. Remove repeated fillers and clarify the career change with a linking phrase like 'however' or 'now'. Be specific about what you finished in IT (e.g., a course or degree).

示例: I'm not working at the moment. I previously worked as an accountant for seven years, but I decided to change careers and recently completed an IT course to prepare for a new role.

建议: Answer directly and support with specific reasons. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'however' to show contrast. Replace vague phrases like 'met the glass ceiling' with a brief explanation of what that meant for you.

示例: Yes, my previous workplace was good because I had supportive colleagues and enjoyed my daily tasks. However, I couldn't progress to higher positions, which is why I decided to look for new opportunities.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details about what made the place pleasant (e.g., facilities, atmosphere). Avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words like 'because' to connect reasons.

示例: Yes, I liked the place where I worked because the office was comfortable and well-equipped with good facilities. The friendly atmosphere also made it an enjoyable environment.

建议: Start with a direct statement of your main plan, then add one or two specific steps and use linking words such as 'first' and 'then'. Correct basic grammar (e.g., 'I am living' or 'I now live') and avoid fillers.

示例: My main plan is to find a job in this country. First, I will improve my local language skills by taking classes, and then I will apply for positions related to my IT qualification.

× Uh, currently I'm unemployed, uh, and uh, I'm trying to find a job.

✓ Uh, currently I'm unemployed, and I'm trying to find a job.

Unnecessary filler 'uh' repeated does not change grammar but removing extra fillers clarifies the present continuous usage 'I'm trying' which correctly describes a current ongoing action. Keep one 'uh' or none for clarity.

× I also just finished, uh, the executive master's in university, uh, and I hope that it will help me to find a job.

✓ I also just finished an executive master's degree at university, and I hope it will help me find a job.

Use of article and noun form: 'the executive master's in university' is incorrect. Use 'an executive master's degree' (article + degree noun) and preposition 'at' for institutions. Also remove unnecessary 'to' before 'find' after 'help' when using 'help someone find'.

× I'm not working right now, but uh, I used to work as an accountant, uh, for seven years, uh, and uh, now I decided to switch my career, uh, to different area.

✓ I'm not working right now, but I used to work as an accountant for seven years, and now I've decided to switch my career to a different area.

Tense consistency: 'now I decided' should be present perfect 'I've decided' to link a recent decision to the present. Also need article 'a different area' and remove fillers. Present perfect is appropriate for recent changes affecting the present.

× I just finished, uh, IT.

✓ I just finished a course in IT.

The fragment 'I just finished IT' is unclear and ungrammatical. Specify what was finished: 'a course in IT' or 'an IT program'. Add article and noun for clarity.

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Was it a good place to work?

Context: Examiner asked about previous workplace. The student refers to past job, so 'Was it a good place to work?' matches past-tense context. This corrects tense to match referent.

× If you're talking about my previous job, yes, I really liked working there.

✓ If you're talking about my previous job, yes, I really liked working there.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses past tense appropriately to describe feelings about a previous job. No change needed.

× I had really good colleagues and I loved my job.

✓ I had really good colleagues, and I loved my job.

Sentence is correct in past tense; only punctuation improved by adding a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× But unfortunately I met the glass ceiling and I couldn't move.

✓ But unfortunately I hit the glass ceiling and couldn't move up.

Use idiomatic verb 'hit the glass ceiling' rather than 'met'. Also add 'up' after 'move' to indicate career progression. Contraction and past tense are appropriate.

× Yeah, I had a nice, uh, office, uh, and uh, uh, I had all facilities there, so it's a really nice place to, to work there and, uh, uh, nice atmosphere.

✓ Yeah, I had a nice office and all the facilities there, so it was a really nice place to work and had a nice atmosphere.

Tense consistency: talking about a previous job, so use past tense 'was' and 'had'. Remove redundant 'there' after 'work'. Use 'the facilities' for specificity. Clean up fillers and repetition.

× Uh, now I living in the other country, uh, and I don't speak the, the language here.

✓ Uh, now I'm living in another country, and I don't speak the language here.

Missing auxiliary verb: 'now I living' should be 'I'm living' (present continuous). Use 'another country' rather than 'the other country' for general reference. Remove duplicate 'the' before 'language'.

× And yes, I I, I have a lot of plans.

✓ And yes, I have a lot of plans.

Repeated 'I' are fillers; remove duplicates. Present simple 'I have' correctly states possession of plans.

× First, I want to find a job.

✓ First, I want to find a job.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'want to find' appropriately expresses a future intention. No change needed.