工作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Javobni qisqaroq va aniq qiling. Dastlab toʻgʻridan-toʻgʻri mavzu gap (topic sentence) ayting: siz ishlaysiz va qaysi kasb egasisiz. Soʻngra kerak boʻlsa qoʻshimcha tafsilotlar — nima uchun bu kasbni sevishingizni bir-ikki aniq sabab bilan ayting. Grammatik xatolar va noaniq iboralarni tuzating (masalan, “proud from my” notoʻgʻri). Gaplar 3–4 ta gapdan oshmasin va bogʻlovchilarni ishlating (because, so, and).

示例: I am a teacher and currently I work at a school. I enjoy teaching because I find it useful and interesting for my students. I especially like helping children improve their English, which makes me proud of my work.

建议: Javobni aniq joy va sabab bilan tuzing. ‘Where’ savoliga avvalo joyni ayting (school name or type), keyin nima uchun mashhur ekanligini qisqacha izohlang. Ingliz tilidagi soʻz tartibini toʻgʻri qiling (I work at…; because…). Noaniq yoki xato soʻzlarni almashtiring (“maids” ehtimol “students” yoki “kids”).

示例: I work at a well-known primary school in the city. Our school is popular because we focus on strong English lessons and practical activities that help students improve quickly.

建议: Javobni qisqa, aniq sabab bilan qoʻllab-quvvatlang. Savolga birinchi gapda toʻliq javob bering (Yes, it is). Soʻng sabablarni keltiring va bogʻlovchilar yordamida izohlashni unutmang. Takroriy iboralarni olib tashlang va grammatikani tuzating (give opportunities to travel; other countries).

示例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the school gives teachers opportunities to travel abroad for training. These trips help me learn new teaching methods and improve my skills.

建议: Savolni hozirgi yoki kelajak nuqtai nazaridan aniqroq qiling. ‘Would you like’ — siz joydan rozi ekansizmi yoki kelajakda yoqishini soʻraydi; aniq “Yes, I like it” bilan boshlang. Jamoa va munosabatlar haqida gapirganda misol keltiring (supportive colleagues, teamwork). Grammatik tuzilmalarni yaxshilang (I have good relationships with colleagues; they are kind).

示例: Yes, I like my workplace because I have good relationships with my colleagues. Everyone cooperates and helps each other, which makes the working environment pleasant.

建议: Kelajak rejalarini aniq va lo‘nda qilib bayon qiling. Boshlangʻich gapda maqsadingizni ayting (I want to become a director). Keyin qisqacha ikkita aniq sabab va qanday choralar koʻrayotganingizni tushuntiring (improving skills, gaining experience). Grammatik aniqlik va bogʻlovchilardan foydalaning (because, so, by doing).

示例: In the future, I would like to become the director of my school because it would help my career and allow me to improve the school’s programs. To reach this goal, I am improving my teaching skills and taking on more responsibilities at work.

× Currently I'm off work at the school and I'm a teacher.

✓ Currently I am working at a school and I am a teacher.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect phrase 'off work at the school'. Use 'working at a school' to indicate current employment and keep verb tense consistent.

× An opinion means it's very useful and very interesting for other people and I love to teach it when I teach it to my children.

✓ In my opinion, it is very useful and interesting for other people, and I love to teach it to my students.

Use 'In my opinion' instead of 'An opinion means'. 'Children' implies young kids; 'students' fits a teacher context. Keep parallel structure and remove repeated 'when I teach it'.

× I keep you comfortable and I am proud from my.

✓ I make my students comfortable and I am proud of my work.

Use 'make ... comfortable' instead of 'keep you comfortable'. 'Proud of' is correct preposition; 'proud from' is incorrect. Clarify 'my' to 'my work'.

× Currently I am work at the school and in my opinion our school is very common and very popular in the city because in our school teach maids and the English very well.

✓ Currently I work at the school, and in my opinion our school is very well known and popular in the city because we teach both housemaids and English very well.

Use 'work' (present simple) rather than 'am work'. 'Very well known' is better than 'very common'. Sentence structure fixed: subject 'we' required before 'teach'. Clarified 'maids' as 'housemaids' and placed 'English' correctly.

× It's a giving good chance to travel some other country and sometimes we have a good chance to travel.

✓ It gives a good opportunity to travel to other countries, and sometimes we have chances to travel.

Use simple present 'gives' instead of 'it's a giving'. 'Opportunity' fits better than 'chance' repeated; use plural 'countries' and include preposition 'to'.

× After three years, I loved my work because my work has a good relationship.

✓ After three years, I loved my job because I had good relationships with my colleagues.

Use past tense 'loved' is okay if referring to past feeling, but 'has' should be 'had' to match past timeframe. 'Job' is more natural; specify 'relationships with my colleagues'.

× And all of my workers work together and all of them very kind to each other.

✓ All of my coworkers work together, and they are all very kind to each other.

Avoid repeating 'work'. Use 'coworkers' and include verb 'are' for 'very kind'. Improve flow and grammatical completeness.

× In the future, I would like to be the director on my workplace because it's a very useful for my career and I try to work very well on the during the day in order to reach it and for the reason I try to improve my teaching skills.

✓ In the future, I would like to be the director at my workplace because it would be very useful for my career, and I try to work hard during the day in order to achieve that, so I try to improve my teaching skills.

Use 'at my workplace' not 'on'. 'Useful for my career' without 'a'. 'Work hard' is natural rather than 'work very well'. Remove 'the' before 'during the day' and use 'achieve that' instead of 'reach it'. Connect ideas clearly with 'so'.