Friends— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Focus on clarity and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give two specific supporting details linked with connectors (e.g., "because", "so", "however"). Avoid fragments and unclear phrases. Use correct tense and phrasing for habitual actions (e.g., "I usually meet my friends online now").

Ví dụ: I think there is a big difference between now and the past. Now I usually meet my friends online through messaging apps because we live apart, so we can't meet in person often. In the past we met at school or in cafes, which felt more personal. However, online meetings sometimes make our relationship feel less close.

Gợi ý: Improve accuracy and coherence: use correct collocations (e.g., "cafes and restaurants"), refine reasons with clear linking words, and avoid contradictory or awkward phrasing. Give one or two concise examples and link them logically (e.g., "because... therefore...").

Ví dụ: Cafes and restaurants are suitable because they have a relaxed atmosphere and soft background music, so it is easy to talk. In contrast, libraries and some public places are not suitable because people expect quiet, and loud conversations would disturb others. Therefore I prefer meeting friends in cafes or casual restaurants.

Gợi ý: Be concise and grammatically correct: use correct comparison language and tense (e.g., "I preferred" for past). Use linking words to contrast past and present (e.g., "but" or "however") and give specific reasons and one clear result. Avoid fragments.

Ví dụ: I used to prefer spending time with a group because gatherings were lively and fun. However, recently I prefer meeting one or two close friends because we can have deeper conversations and really catch up on personal matters. This helps me understand how they are doing more clearly.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and organization: begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + reason). Use accurate expressions ("I value my privacy") and avoid incomplete sentences. Provide two specific supporting details (e.g., unexpected visits annoy you; you like to prepare the house).

Ví dụ: I usually do not invite friends to my home because I value my privacy and dislike unannounced visits. Also, I prefer to prepare snacks and tidy the house before guests arrive, so unexpected visits make me uncomfortable. If friends want to visit, I ask them to call first.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and vague phrases: state directly how important friends are, give two specific reasons (emotional support, shared activities), and use appropriate intensity phrases (avoid "more than myself" which is unclear). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Friends are very important to me because they provide emotional support and make social activities enjoyable. I rely on them to share ideas and cope with stress, so life would feel lonelier without them. For these reasons, I prioritise keeping close friendships.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and clarify meaning: use correct subject-verb agreement ("I seldom go out"). Remove fragmented sentences and express clear reasons and intentions. Mention frequency, reasons for limited outings, and a clear plan to change behavior.

Ví dụ: I seldom go out with friends because I am busy with work and study and rarely have free time. However, I hope to go out more often because spending time with friends helps me relax and switch off from work. I plan to schedule one outing each month to balance social life and responsibilities.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition: state the place and give two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Fix awkward phrases and keep sentences complete. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "restaurants provide a relaxed atmosphere").

Ví dụ: We usually meet in restaurants because we can eat together and have a relaxed conversation. The atmosphere allows us to talk without rushing, so we can catch up on each other's lives. This makes restaurants my preferred meeting place.

Gợi ý: Clarify activities and reasons: correct grammar and pronoun issues. Provide a clear statement of usual activities and a specific reason for wanting to shop more with friends. Avoid unclear comparisons and fragmented clauses.

Ví dụ: Usually we eat together and catch up during lunch or dinner because it fits our schedules. In the future I want to go shopping more with my female friends because they give helpful advice on choosing clothes, which I find useful compared with shopping with my boyfriend.

Gợi ý: Improve tense and pronoun use: begin with a clear affirmation, then give concise supporting details (how long, shared memories), and finish with current status using proper linking ("however"). Avoid fragments and redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes. I have a friend I have known since kindergarten; we used to play and study together and even teamed up for many activities. However, as we grew up we lost touch because we attended different schools and became busy with work. We now keep in occasional contact but see each other less often.

× I would say that there are significant differences between now and meet friends compared with the pathways.

✓ I would say that there are significant differences between how I meet friends now and how I met them in the past.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and missing parallel elements. Use parallel clauses 'how I meet friends now' and 'how I met them in the past' to make meaning clear and grammatically correct.

× The most changeable now is that I always meet my friend online with chatting and message.

✓ The biggest change now is that I always meet my friends online through chatting and messaging.

Use correct preposition 'through' for means and plural 'friends' to match general reference. Use noun forms 'chatting and messaging' for activities. 'Most changeable' is unnatural; 'biggest change' is appropriate.

× Since we were all separated by the schools, we cannot see each other very frequently, so we often.

✓ Since we all went to different schools, we could not see each other very often, so we often chatted online.

Original sentence is incomplete and uses wrong tense 'were separated by the schools'. Use 'went to different schools' and past tense 'could not' to match context. Add the missing action 'chatted online' to complete sentence.

× Tagged in line.

✓ We chatted online.

'Tagged in line' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended meaning is 'chatted online' or 'tagged each other online'. Use 'We chatted online' for clarity.

× However, that kind of connection makes us more unfamiliar.

✓ However, that kind of connection makes us feel more distant from each other.

'Unfamiliar' is the wrong adjective for relationships; 'distant' or 'less close' is appropriate. Also include 'feel' to express perception.

× Places like Cafe or some restaurant are better for meeting because the atmosphere there is very open and also they are playing music in that environment which helps enforce your chatting more concentrated.

✓ Places like cafes or some restaurants are better for meeting because the atmosphere is open and they play music, which helps make conversations more focused.

Use plural forms 'cafes' and 'restaurants' for general statements. Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'atmosphere' and use 'play music' rather than 'are playing music'. 'Enforce your chatting more concentrated' is ungrammatical; use 'helps make conversations more focused.'

× However, some places like the public space or the library are not allowed.

✓ However, some places like public spaces or libraries are not suitable for loud conversations.

'Are not allowed' is vague and uses wrong structure. Use 'are not suitable for loud conversations' to convey meaning. Also use plurals for general statements.

× It's to chat so loud and it could be disturbed by others when you are chatting or having a conversation in the public area.

✓ It is not appropriate to chat so loudly because you could disturb others when talking in public areas.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and modal misuse. Use 'not appropriate to chat so loudly' and explain consequence 'you could disturb others'.

× So choosing the right place is very important.

✓ So choosing the right place is very important.

Sentence is correct; no change needed except confirm context. It states the conclusion clearly.

× In the past I prefer to spend time with a group of friends because the atmosphere can be more hyper and also there will be many fun when gathering together.

✓ In the past I preferred to spend time with a group of friends because the atmosphere could be livelier and there was more fun when we gathered together.

Use past tense 'preferred' to match 'In the past'. 'Hyper' is inappropriate for atmosphere; use 'livelier'. 'There will be many fun' is incorrect; use 'there was more fun' or 'it was more fun'.

× However, recently I like 2 great friends 1 by 1 because greeting only one friends at once makes us more concentrated in our conversation.

✓ However, recently I prefer spending time with two close friends one-on-one because seeing only one friend at a time makes us more focused in our conversation.

Use present tense 'prefer' for current habits. Write numbers in words 'two'. '1 by 1' should be 'one-on-one'. Correct 'only one friends' to 'one friend'. Use 'focused' rather than 'concentrated'.

× And can deeply get to know what others are doing recently and also talks about the feeling.

✓ We can get to know what the other person has been doing recently and also talk about our feelings.

Original sentence lacks subject and has wrong verb forms. Use 'we can' and present perfect 'has been doing' for recent actions; use 'talk' (base form) after 'and'.

× Not really since I am very value my own privacy, I seldom let friends to come to my home because it is my own area and sometimes my friend just appear at my house in the southern and without notice me first.

✓ Not really, since I greatly value my privacy; I seldom let friends come to my home because it is my private space, and sometimes friends just appear at my house in the south without notifying me first.

Remove 'am' before 'very value' and use 'greatly value' or 'value my privacy'. 'Let friends to come' should be 'let friends come' (no to). 'Appear ... in the southern' is incorrect; use 'appear at my house in the south'. Use 'notify' or 'inform' and correct verb form 'without notifying me first'.

× And it always makes me very annoyed because.

✓ And it always makes me very annoyed because it disrupts my plans and invades my privacy.

Original sentence is incomplete. Provide a reason to complete the thought; here 'it disrupts my plans and invades my privacy' suits context.

× I would like to prepare for some snacks and also clean up my house first when she is coming.

✓ I would like to prepare some snacks and clean up my house first when she comes.

Do not use 'prepare for some snacks'; use 'prepare some snacks'. Use 'when she comes' (present simple for arranged future) rather than 'when she is coming'.

× I would say that I value friends a lot since I am a person who likes to have a group activity.

✓ I would say that I value friends a lot since I am a person who likes group activities.

'Have a group activity' is unnatural; use plural 'group activities' and remove 'a'.

× Friends are always my previous choice to spend time with.

✓ Friends have always been my preferred choice to spend time with.

Use present perfect 'have always been' to indicate general preference up to now. 'Previous choice' is wrong; use 'preferred choice'.

× I cannot imagine my life without friends because being around with them makes me feel more.

✓ I cannot imagine my life without friends because being around them makes me feel better.

'Being around with them' is incorrect; use 'being around them'. 'Makes me feel more' is incomplete; 'feel better' fits intent.

× It and also I can share my thought with them.

✓ Also, I can share my thoughts with them.

Remove stray 'It and' and use plural 'thoughts'. Place 'also' at start for flow.

× So I would say that friends are very important to me, even more than myself.

✓ So I would say that friends are very important to me, even more than I am to myself.

The comparison 'even more than myself' is awkward; better rephrase: 'even more than I value myself' or 'even more than I am to myself'. Alternatively, 'even more than my own interests' could be used. The correction preserves comparative intent.

× I seldom goes out with my friends since I'm very busy with my work and study and I really have a free time for going out with a date such as shopping and going to restaurant.

✓ I seldom go out with my friends since I'm very busy with work and study and I rarely have free time for outings such as shopping or going to a restaurant.

Use 'go' not 'goes' after 'I'. 'A free time' is incorrect; use 'free time' or 'rarely have free time'. Use 'outings' and 'a restaurant' for clarity.

× However, I would like to try to go out with my friend more frequently in the future because going out.

✓ However, I would like to try to go out with my friends more frequently in the future because going out

Original sentence is incomplete. A suggested complete sentence: 'However, I would like to try to go out with my friends more frequently in the future because going out helps me relax.'

× Ms. Spending time with them is a really relaxing way for me and it can makes me off the work mode and becomes more and.

✓ Spending time with them is really relaxing for me and it can take me out of work mode and help me become more sociable.

Remove stray 'Ms.' and correct verb forms: 'can make me' not 'can makes me'. 'Off the work mode' -> 'take me out of work mode'. Complete idea with 'help me become more sociable' or similar.

× I often meet my friend in the restaurant since we can chat and also have the lunch or dinner together at the same time.

✓ I often meet my friends in restaurants since we can chat and have lunch or dinner together at the same time.

Use plural 'friends' and 'restaurants' for general habits. Use 'have lunch or dinner' not 'have the lunch or dinner'.

× Also having conversation when eating is also very relaxing and chilling because we can eat at the slow pace and also talk about how we are doing recently and also.

✓ Also, having conversations while eating is very relaxing because we can eat at a slow pace and talk about how we have been doing recently.

Use 'conversations' plural and 'while eating'. 'Chilling' is informal; 'relaxing' suffices. 'At the slow pace' -> 'at a slow pace'. Use present perfect 'have been doing' for recent activities. Remove trailing 'and also'.

× God to each other and the most important is the restaurants. Atmosphere is really good for an conversation and we can concentrate in it.

✓ We also give advice to each other, and most importantly, the restaurant atmosphere is really good for conversation and helps us concentrate.

Original fragment 'God to each other' is unclear; likely 'give advice to each other'. Fix sentence fragments and article use: 'a conversation' -> 'conversation'. Use 'helps us concentrate' for clarity.

× I usually eat and talk with my friends since having a date during the lunch and dinner time is the most efficient way.

✓ I usually eat and talk with my friends since meeting during lunch or dinner is the most efficient way.

Use 'meeting during lunch or dinner' instead of 'having a date during the lunch and dinner time'. Avoid 'a date' which implies romantic context.

× However, I would like to go out shopping with my friend more frequently in the future because shopping with my friend, especially girl.

✓ However, I would like to go shopping with my friends more frequently in the future because shopping with friends, especially girls,

Sentence is incomplete. A complete version: '... especially girls, gives me good advice when choosing clothes.' Use plural and complete thought.

× Me some advice of choosing the right proper custom rather than shopping with my boyfriend.

✓ they give me advice on choosing the right outfit rather than shopping with my boyfriend.

Original fragment lacks subject and correct structure. Use 'they give me advice on choosing the right outfit'. 'Custom' is wrong word; use 'outfit' or 'clothes'.

× They usually have a more precise view.

✓ They usually have a more precise view.

Sentence is acceptable; minor change could be 'They usually have a clearer sense of style.' but original is grammatically fine.

× Yes, I have a friend that I have known him since in the kindergarten and we were the best friend at that time because we spent most of the time together to play and also study and there are many activities in the kindergarten and we usually teams up to breakthrough many obstacle at that time.

✓ Yes, I have a friend whom I have known since kindergarten, and we were best friends at that time because we spent most of our time playing and studying. There were many activities in kindergarten and we usually teamed up to overcome many obstacles.

Use 'whom' or 'who' as object correctly and remove extra 'him'. 'Since in the kindergarten' -> 'since kindergarten'. Use plural 'friends' and correct verb forms: 'team ed up' and 'overcome obstacles'. Past tense 'were' and 'spent' for past context.

× However, as we grew up, we. It became seldom contact to each other because we are separated from schools and works and we become both very busy.

✓ However, as we grew up, we rarely kept in contact with each other because we separated into different schools and workplaces and both became very busy.

'We. It became seldom contact' is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use 'we rarely kept in contact' or 'we seldom kept in touch'. 'Separated from schools and works' -> 'went to different schools and workplaces'. Use past tense for completed past events.