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Gợi ý: 答えは理解できるが、発言に冗長さと文法の誤りが見られます。まず冒頭で直接的な主題文（例：Yes, I often see online advertisements on my phone and computer.）を述べ、その後に具体例を1つ用いて説明してください。不要な繰り返し（"smart phones" と "a computer" を混同する等）や不自然な表現（"which is very annoying for me" の位置）を直しましょう。また接続詞（for example, when...）を使って文をつなぎ、最大5文に収めてください。発音や語順の練習も重要です。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often see online advertisements on both my phone and computer. For example, when I search for English vocabulary, intrusive pop-up ads appear in the middle of the screen, which makes it difficult to read. Because these ads interrupt my learning, I usually close them immediately.

Gợi ý: 回答があいまいで文法・語順の誤りや言いたいことの未完が目立ちます。まず明確な主題文（例：Yes, one advertisement that impressed me was from ISHI Japan.）を述べ、その広告の内容を具体的に1〜2文で説明し、自分がどう感じたかを簡潔に述べてください。語の重ね言いや途中で切れる表現を避け、完結な5文以内にまとめてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was a commercial by ISHI Japan. It showed a dramatic rescue scene that surprised me. I felt shocked because the images were very intense for a child, and it made me more aware of serious issues in society.

Gợi ý: 内容は伝わるが語彙と文法の誤り（"advertised" の誤用、語の重複）と不自然な具体例の提示があるため改善が必要です。始めに簡潔な主題文を置き、その後で具体例を列挙するときは接続詞（for example, such as）を使い、語の重複を避けてください。具体性を高めるためにどんなデザインや色使いが目立つかなどを追加すると良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes, I ride the train almost every day, so I often notice many advertisements inside the carriages and on the platforms. For example, there are medical clinic ads promoting plastic surgery, posters for cram schools, and colorful travel posters that catch my eye. These ads usually use bright colors and bold text, which makes them hard to ignore.

Gợi ý: 意図は分かるが表現が不適切（"feel injured" は不自然）で繰り返しがあるため改善が必要です。まず明確に好みを述べ（Yes/No）、その理由を具体的な例で説明してください。感情を表す適切な表現（annoying, intrusive, irrelevant など）を使い、繰り返しを避けて論理的につなげましょう。

Ví dụ: Generally, I don't like advertisements because many of them are intrusive and show information I don't need. They often pop up unexpectedly and interrupt what I'm doing, which I find very annoying. I usually ignore or close them as soon as possible.

Gợi ý: 良い回答で意見が明確に伝わっています。改善点は語彙の幅を広げ、文のつながりを自然にすることです。たとえば"I enjoy"の代わりに"I'm a fan of"や"I'm interested in"を使い、広告の具体的な特徴（illustrations, characters, colors）を加えるとより説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: I like advertisements for manga and anime because I'm a big fan of those genres. These ads often feature familiar characters and colorful artwork, which instantly grab my attention. When I see them, I usually stop to read more about the latest series or events.

Gợi ý: 答えは正直で良いが文法と表現が不自然です。まず明確な主題文（No, I haven't bought anything yet because of an advertisement.）を述べ、その後に理由や将来の可能性を付け加えてください。接続詞（but, however）を使って文をつなぎ、"advertise" の誤用は避けましょう（advertisements）。

Ví dụ: No, I haven't bought anything because of an advertisement yet. However, advertisements often catch my interest, especially if they feature products related to manga or technology, so I might be tempted to buy something in the future.

× Yes, I often see ads when I use my smart phones or a computer.

✓ Yes, I often see ads when I use my smartphone or a computer.

'Smartphone' should be singular to match 'a computer' and common usage; 'smart phones' separated is less common. Use consistent singular nouns when referring to a device in general.

× For example, when I search for English vocabulary, intrusive ads appear in the middle of the screen and which is very annoying for me.

✓ For example, when I search for English vocabulary, intrusive ads appear in the middle of the screen, which is very annoying for me.

Remove the extra conjunction 'and' before 'which' and replace the clause with a non-finite relative clause starting with 'which'. The phrase 'which is very annoying for me' modifies the whole preceding clause; connect it with a comma.

× Yes, I remembered the advertisement that ISHI Japan broadcasted.

✓ Yes, I remember the advertisement that ISHI Japan broadcast.

The question asks about an advertisement that made an impression when the student was a child; present simple 'I remember' is more natural to express a lasting memory. Also, 'broadcast' is an irregular verb that has the same form in past and present; use 'broadcast' instead of 'broadcasted'.

× It is very it was very shocked shocked to me as a child and from this I realized that there are many people in

✓ It shocked me a lot as a child, and from this I realized that there are many people who ...

The original repeats words and mixes tenses and structures. Use a clear past tense verb 'shocked me' and a relative clause 'people who ...' to complete the sentence. Also avoid repetition.

× Yes, I take the train almost every day, so I often notice many advertised inside the train and on platforms.

✓ Yes, I take the train almost every day, so I often notice many advertisements inside the train and on the platforms.

Use the noun 'advertisements' instead of 'advertised'. Use 'on the platforms' with the definite article 'the' for specific platforms. 'Inside the train' is correct but pair with 'the platforms' for parallelism.

× For example, your African medical medical advertisements, promoting plastic surgery, and also posters for cram school.

✓ For example, there are medical advertisements promoting plastic surgery, and also posters for cram schools.

Remove duplicate 'medical' and avoid 'your African' (unclear). Use 'there are' to introduce examples, pluralize 'cram school' to 'cram schools' for generality.

× In many cases I don't like advertisements because they feel injured and often show me information that I that I don't need.

✓ In many cases I don't like advertisements because they feel intrusive and often show information that I don't need.

'Feel injured' is incorrect to describe ads; use 'intrusive'. Remove duplicate 'that I'. Also 'show me information' is better as 'show information' or 'show me information'—both acceptable; simplified here.

× When I see those ads I cannot help seeing them.

✓ When I see those ads, I cannot help looking at them.

'Cannot help seeing them' is grammatical but for visual attention 'looking at them' is more natural. Add a comma after the subordinate clause. 'Cannot help' is followed by gerund; both 'seeing' and 'looking at' are gerunds, so change for clarity.

× no, not yet, but when I say advertise I usually catch my interest so maybe I will buy something in the future.

✓ No, not yet, but when I see an advertisement that catches my interest, I might buy something in the future.

Capitalize 'No' and restructure the sentence: 'when I see an advertisement that catches my interest' clarifies meaning. Use 'might' for future possibility and avoid 'say advertise' which is unnatural.