Advertisement— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 発言を過去と現在で混同しないこと、語順と語形（単数・複数、不定冠詞など）を正しく使うこと、そして簡潔で自然な表現を心がけてください。具体的には現在の習慣を述べるときは現在形を使い、重複や繰り返し（"I I"など）を避けてください。また“commoditation”のような誤った語形は正しい語彙（例：products, commodities）に直しましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often see advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer. They usually show products or job listings, and they appear while I'm searching online.

Gợi ý: 過去の記憶を述べるときは過去形を使い、受動態や形容詞の使い方に注意してください（"impressed me"のように表現）。言い換えや理由を付け加える際は論理的に繋げるための接続語（because, so, which）を正しく使い、繰り返しを避けて簡潔に述べましょう。

Ví dụ: I don't remember many ads from my childhood, but one that stood out was a Tokyo Disneyland commercial. It impressed me because it looked so magical and exciting, with colourful scenes and happy music.

Gợi ý: 時制を統一して述べること（現在の習慣なら現在形）。語の繰り返し（"they they"）を直し、因果関係を明確にする接続詞（because, so, which）を使って理由を詳しく述べてください。語彙面では"influence"の使い方に注意し、正しい表現（"influenced"または"encourage"）を選んでください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains, especially for alcohol. I think this is inappropriate for children because such ads can encourage underage drinking and normalise alcohol consumption.

Gợi ý: 文法（時制と語順）を改善し、表現を簡潔にまとめてください。特に原因を述べる際は明確な構造（"I don't like ads because they..."）を使い、動詞や名詞の形（"advertisement disturb my connect"は不自然）を正しい語に置き換えてください。

Ví dụ: I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my browsing and make it hard to focus on the website content.

Gợi ý: 具体的な例や感情を述べるのは良いですが、語順や複数形・冠詞の使い方を整え、冗長な表現（"so happy"と"really I want to"の重複）を避けて自然にまとめましょう。接続語（for example, because）を使うとより論理的になります。

Ví dụ: I prefer advertisements for consumer products, such as cosmetics and food, because they look appealing and often make me want to buy those items.

× Yes, I always see advertisement when I was searching I I always saw the advertisement which related to some commoditation and jobs and so on.

✓ Yes, I always see advertisements when I am searching; I always see advertisements related to commodities, jobs, and so on.

The original sentence uses singular 'advertisement' where plural 'advertisements' is required because the speaker refers to repeated/uncountable occurrences. Also tense consistency: combine present simple 'I always see' with present continuous 'when I am searching'. Use plural countable nouns 'commodities' and correct spelling. Suggestion: use plural for repeated items and keep verb tenses consistent.

× Umm, I'm not clearly remember the advertisement, but maybe the Tokyo Disneyland advertisement is really impressed by impressed me because this advertisement is so, so beautiful and exciting for me.

✓ Umm, I don't clearly remember the advertisement, but maybe the Tokyo Disneyland advertisement impressed me because it was so beautiful and exciting for me.

The verb phrase 'I'm not clearly remember' is incorrect; use simple present negative 'I don't clearly remember' or past 'I didn't clearly remember' depending on context. 'Is really impressed by impressed me' mixes passive and active incorrectly; use active past 'impressed me'. Maintain tense consistency by using past tense 'impressed' and 'was' when referring to a past impression.

× Yeah, in particular, I always saw the alcohol advertisement in the train. Uh, I think it is not good for children because they they influenced by this advertisement and drink for young age.

✓ Yeah, in particular, I often see alcohol advertisements on the train. Uh, I think they are not good for children because children are influenced by these advertisements and may start drinking at a young age.

Original uses past 'always saw' but the context implies habitual present; use present 'often see'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. Preposition 'in the train' is better as 'on the train'. 'They they influenced by' is missing auxiliary and has repetition; use passive 'are influenced by'. 'Drink for young age' is ungrammatical; correct phrasing is 'start drinking at a young age'.

× I don't like advertisement because when I was searching some advertisement disturb my connect concentrating and I can't focus on watching the site. So I don't like advertisement so much.

✓ I don't like advertisements because when I am searching, some advertisements disturb my concentration and I can't focus on viewing the site. So I don't like advertisements very much.

Use plural 'advertisements' for general reference. 'When I was searching' should be present 'when I am searching' for habitual action. 'Some advertisement disturb' lacks subject-verb agreement and plurality; use 'some advertisements disturb'. 'Disturb my connect concentrating' is ungrammatical; correct noun is 'concentration'. 'Watching the site' is better as 'viewing the site'. 'So much' is informal; 'very much' is clearer.

× I like advertisement, something related to merchandise, for example cosmetics and some food and so on. It makes me feel so happy and really I want to shop, I want to buy these things.

✓ I like advertisements related to merchandise, for example cosmetics and food. They make me feel happy and make me want to shop and buy these things.

Use plural 'advertisements' to refer generally. Combine phrases for clarity: 'related to merchandise' modifies 'advertisements'. Use plural verb 'They make' to agree with plural subject. Avoid repetition 'I want to shop, I want to buy'; combine into 'make me want to shop and buy these things' for natural flow.