Part 1
Giám khảo
Where do you go to relax recently?
Thí sinh
So currently I'm in my school bag so I relax most in my house which is very nice.
Giám khảo
Who do you usually relax with?
Thí sinh
I'm prefer spending time on myself because I found out to focus on my my own thought it will be like the most thing to be relaxed.
Giám khảo
Do you think listening to music is relaxing?
Thí sinh
Yes, in most of the town when I'm want to reduce my stress I just opening some relaxing music, but if the thing was too heavy I will just just just face it with my own thought.
Giám khảo
What do you do to relax?
Thí sinh
Like I said before that uh the most simple way that I choose will be listening to music but sometime it just did a fanfic novel under my phone or maybe play tiktok. By this way I found out my stress are easily gone.
Where do you go to relax recently?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Be direct and clear. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two concise details. Avoid unrelated phrases (e.g. “in my school bag”) and keep sentences natural. Use linking words only if you add details.
Ví dụ: I usually relax at home. It’s comfortable and quiet there, so I can read or listen to music without interruptions.
Who do you usually relax with?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Use a clear topic sentence and a concise reason. Correct basic grammar (e.g. "I prefer") and avoid repetition. Add one specific example to support the reason, and use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.
Ví dụ: I usually relax by myself because I find it easier to think and unwind alone. For example, I often sit in my room and read for an hour to clear my mind.
Do you think listening to music is relaxing?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give a specific condition and one example. Correct verb forms (e.g. "I open" → "I play") and avoid fillers/repetition. Use a linking word like "but" appropriately to contrast ideas.
Ví dụ: Yes, I find music relaxing because it calms me and helps me forget small worries. However, if I have a serious problem I prefer to think it through and find a solution.
What do you do to relax?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence listing one or two main activities, then add brief specific details. Use correct tense and words (e.g. "read fanfiction on my phone"), avoid fillers like "uh", and keep to 2–4 sentences max. Use linking words such as "or" and "also."
Ví dụ: I usually relax by listening to music or reading fanfiction on my phone. Sometimes I also watch short videos on TikTok; these activities help me forget stress and unwind quickly.
× So currently I'm in my school bag so I relax most in my house which is very nice.
✓ Currently I'm at school, so I relax mostly at my house, which is very nice.
The original sentence has incorrect phrase 'in my school bag' and awkward structure with repeated 'so'. 'In my school bag' is illogical; context requires 'at school'. 'Relax most in my house' needs adverb placement and preposition: 'relax mostly at my house'. Combine clauses with commas for clarity. Suggestion: place adverbs close to verbs and use correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:26
× I'm prefer spending time on myself because I found out to focus on my my own thought it will be like the most thing to be relaxed.
✓ I prefer spending time by myself because I found that focusing on my own thoughts helps me relax the most.
Errors: 'I'm prefer' mixes present progressive with simple present; use 'I prefer'. 'spending time on myself' is unnatural; use 'by myself'. 'found out to focus on' is incorrect verb pattern; use 'found that focusing on'. 'my my' is duplication and 'thought' should be plural 'thoughts'. Reorder clause for clarity. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and natural prepositional phrases. Grammar problem type ID:12
× Yes, in most of the town when I'm want to reduce my stress I just opening some relaxing music, but if the thing was too heavy I will just just just face it with my own thought.
✓ Yes, in most situations when I want to reduce my stress I just play some relaxing music, but if the problem is too serious I will face it with my own thoughts.
Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'when I'm want' should be 'when I want' (do not use 'am' with want). 'I just opening' should be 'I just play' or 'I just open' but 'play music' is natural. 'the thing was too heavy' mixes past tense and vague noun; use 'the problem is too serious'. 'I will just just just face it with my own thought' reduce repetition and use plural 'thoughts'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habitual actions and use natural collocations like 'play music' and 'face it'. Grammar problem type ID:6
× Like I said before that uh the most simple way that I choose will be listening to music but sometime it just did a fanfic novel under my phone or maybe play tiktok.
✓ Like I said before, the simplest way I choose is listening to music, but sometimes I just read a fanfic on my phone or maybe watch TikTok.
Errors: 'the most simple' should be 'the simplest'. 'that I choose will be listening' mixes structures; use 'I choose is listening'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'it just did a fanfic novel under my phone' is ungrammatical; use 'I just read a fanfic on my phone'. 'play tiktok' should be 'watch TikTok'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, adverb spelling, and appropriate verbs for actions with devices. Grammar problem type ID:6
× By this way I found out my stress are easily gone.
✓ This way I found that my stress easily goes away.
Original has subject-verb agreement error: 'my stress are' should be singular 'stress is' or rephrase to 'stress goes away'. 'found out' is unnecessary; use 'found that'. 'easily gone' is a past participle without auxiliary; use 'goes away' for present habitual result. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and use correct verb forms for habitual statements. Grammar problem type ID:27