Relax— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and use correct tense and word choices. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct common errors (e.g., tense, article use, word choice) and avoid redundant phrases. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly.

Ví dụ: Recently I often go to the University of Toronto to relax after class because the campus is quiet and has many outdoor study spots. For example, today I planned to use the library, but it was closed for construction, so I stayed outside under a tree and studied quietly.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence naming the person, then add one or two specific reasons using coherent linking words. Avoid repetitions, filler words, and incomplete sentences. Explain briefly how that person helps you relax with concrete examples.

Ví dụ: I usually relax with my mother. She helps me feel calm because she listens patiently when I talk about school or my relationship, and she always gives practical advice and comforting food that makes me feel better.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give a clear example with correct vocabulary. Use linking words like “for example” and avoid misused words (e.g., “crisis” is incorrect here). Be specific about the type of music and effects on you.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think listening to music can be very relaxing. For example, when I have a stressful day studying, I listen to instrumental or acoustic music because it lowers my heart rate and helps me concentrate and feel calmer.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence describing your main relaxation activity, then support with details: frequency, who you go with, and why it helps. Fix grammar (use prepositions, articles) and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. Use linking words like “because” and “after”.

Ví dụ: To relax, I usually go to a sauna with my mom when I am in Korea because it helps me unwind after a long week. After school we often chat in the sauna and then eat fried chicken together, which makes me feel relaxed and supported.

× After class I went to Toronto University today.

✓ After class I went to the University of Toronto today.

The sentence uses past tense 'went' with 'today' which is acceptable because the action occurred earlier today; however the proper name is 'University of Toronto'. Use past tense consistently for a completed action. Suggestion: keep 'went' and correct the institution name.

× The reason I go there is because I wanted to study on at a cold mood.

✓ The reason I went there was that I wanted to study in a quiet mood.

Mixed tenses and incorrect preposition/word choice: 'go' (present) conflicts with 'wanted' (past). Also 'study on at a cold mood' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'study in a quiet mood' or 'study in a calm mood'. Correct by matching past tense and using correct preposition 'in' for 'mood'.

× However, the library was closest because of the construction site and so I just stay at outside and study.

✓ However, the library was closed because of the construction site, so I just stayed outside and studied.

Multiple errors: 'closest' is wrong word for 'closed' (adjective choice). Tense inconsistency: 'was' past then 'stay' present; should be past 'stayed'. Preposition 'at outside' is incorrect; use 'outside'. Verb tense for studying should match past 'studied'.

× I, I can say that the person who give me the relax is my mom 100% because I, I rewrite my mom.

✓ I can say that the person who gives me relaxation is my mom 100% because I rely on my mom.

Subject-verb agreement: 'who give' should be 'who gives' because 'who' refers to singular 'person'. 'Give me the relax' is unnatural; use 'gives me relaxation' or 'helps me relax'. 'Rewrite my mom' is incorrect word choice; likely 'rely on my mom' fits context.

× Umm, the reason is because, uh, I saw her. I have seen her uh, for my whole life and ** *** is.

✓ The reason is that I have seen her my whole life and she is very important to me.

Awkward phrasing and filler words; 'reason is because' is redundant—use 'reason is that'. 'I saw her' should be present perfect 'I have seen her' to indicate experience over life. The fragment '** *** is' is unclear; replaced with a meaningful completion.

× Yes, sometimes listening to music is helpful to relax our mind.

✓ Yes, sometimes listening to music is helpful for relaxing our minds.

'Helpful to relax our mind' is understandable but more natural is 'helpful for relaxing our minds' or 'helps relax our minds'. Also plural 'minds' matches 'our'.

× Umm, for instance, sometimes if we uh, struggle with one day because of our study, we're working through and listening Music is the crisis, our stress, and it is helpful.

✓ For instance, if we have a difficult day because of our studies, listening to music helps relieve our stress and is helpful.

Multiple issues: tense and phrasing ('struggle with one day' -> 'have a difficult day'), verb forms ('we're working through' is unclear), word choices ('listening Music is the crisis' is incorrect). Rewritten to be clear and grammatically correct: present simple to state general truth, correct noun forms and collocations ('relieve stress').

× I prefer to the sauna with my mom when I stay in Korea.

✓ I prefer going to the sauna with my mom when I stay in Korea.

'Prefer to the sauna' is incorrect structure. Use 'prefer going to' or 'like to go to'. Also 'when I stay in Korea' is acceptable; 'stay' indicates temporary residence—can also say 'when I'm in Korea'.

× I got a lot of stress because of my school and R relationship with my boyfriend though.

✓ I get a lot of stress because of my school and my relationship with my boyfriend.

Tense: use present simple 'get' to describe habitual stress. 'R relationship' appears to be a typo; use 'my relationship'. Preposition 'because of' is okay, but structure improved by removing 'though' or placing it appropriately.

× Uh after my school I usually go to the sauna and talk with my mom uh during eating chicken.

✓ After school I usually go to the sauna and talk with my mom while eating chicken.

'After my school' is unnatural—use 'after school'. 'During eating chicken' is incorrect; use 'while eating chicken' or 'while we eat chicken'. Tense 'usually go' is present habitual which matches context; keep present simple.