Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答有明确主旨，但语法、用词和逻辑衔接较弱，句子冗长且存在时态和搭配错误（如“when I was kindergarten”, “become a very general person”）。建议：1) 开头用一句简短直接的主题句；2) 用一两句具体细节支持并用连接词（e.g. because, so）衔接；3) 注意时态和搭配（“when I was in kindergarten”, “became more sociable”）。

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents taught me to share snacks and toys when I was in kindergarten because they believed sharing shows kindness. As a result, I made many friends and became more sociable.

Gợi ý: 内容有意思但表达不准确，存在语法和词汇错误（如“share ... to my friends”, “flower fermenting”）。细节可以更具体且句子更简洁。建议：1) 用正确动词搭配（share something with someone）；2) 描述细节用准确词汇（e.g. dough rising, aroma）；3) 控制在两到三句内，并用连接词自然过渡。

Ví dụ: I often share my homemade cookies with friends because I enjoy baking. I like watching the dough rise in the oven and seeing their happy reactions when I bring a jar of butter cookies to my birthday party.

Gợi ý: 回答清晰且内容合适，但有少量语法与词汇错误（如“hygiene reason”, “most of the person”, “totally being cleaned”）。建议：1) 用更自然表达（for hygiene reasons, most people）；2) 丰富支持细节并用连接词（for example, because）。

Ví dụ: I wouldn’t share personal items for hygiene reasons, such as toothbrushes, towels or underwear. For example, sharing a used towel can spread germs, so most people prefer to keep intimate items to themselves unless they are thoroughly cleaned.

Gợi ý: 回答主题明确但表达混乱且句子重复，语法错误多（时态一致性、主谓一致、词序）。建议：1) 用一到两句简洁描述产品特性；2) 避免重复，用具体例子说明（long-lasting, humidity-resistant）；3) 注意时态和搭配（apply it, makes your skin look）。

Ví dụ: Recently I shared my favorite foundation, a Chanel blend, with a friend. It applies smoothly, makes skin look flawless, and lasts well in Guangzhou’s humid weather.

Gợi ý: 观点明确但表达啰嗦并有用词错误（如“confronted me a lot”）。建议：1) 开头一句直接回答并给出理由；2) 用具体例子说明父母如何支持，但要用正确动词（encouraged, comforted）；3) 控制句子数量并用连接词。

Ví dụ: I would tell my parents first because they are very supportive. For instance, when I struggled with an important exam, they encouraged me constantly, which really boosted my confidence.

Gợi ý: 回答含义明确但语法与连贯性差（如句子结构混乱，“confronted me” 用词不当）。建议：1) 简洁说明会分享快乐和难过的事；2) 用合适词汇描述朋友的帮助（comforted, came over to help）；3) 提供一两个简短具体例子并用连接词。

Ví dụ: I share both happy and sad news with my friends because they are supportive. For example, after a breakup I called my close friend and she came over to comfort me, which helped a lot.

× Well, yes, my parents always taught me to share my snacks and toys with my friends when I was kindergarten because they said it was a very good way to show your love and friendliness, which will help me to make lots of friends.

✓ Well, yes, my parents always taught me to share my snacks and toys with my friends when I was in kindergarten because they said it was a very good way to show your love and friendliness, which helped me to make lots of friends.

句中缺少介词短语“in kindergarten”，且句子开头的时间是过去，后半句“which will help me”与过去时矛盾，应使用过去时“helped”。建议：表示过去经历时，主句和从句应保持时态一致。

× And finally I did.

✓ And finally I did.

该句为简单过去的强调句，语法正确，无需修改。

× I really made a lot of friends and become a very general person.

✓ I really made a lot of friends and became a very ordinary person.

原句中动词时态不一致（made 是过去时，become 应为过去时 became）；此外，'general person' 用法不当，应为 'ordinary person' 或其他更合适的形容词。建议保持并列动词时态一致并选择正确形容词。

× Well, I really like to share some sweet homemade cookies to my friends because I'm really good at baking and I find it very enjoyable to see the flower fermenting in the oven.

✓ Well, I really like to share some sweet homemade cookies with my friends because I'm really good at baking and I find it very enjoyable to see the dough rising in the oven.

share 后应接介词 with 而不是 to；'flower fermenting' 是拼写和词义错误，应为 dough rising（面团发酵/膨胀）。建议注意常用动词搭配和专业词汇拼写。

× And I still remember that once I made my favorite butter cookie and I put them in the decorated jar brought them to my birthday.

✓ And I still remember that once I made my favorite butter cookies, put them in a decorated jar, and brought them to my birthday party.

句子中时态和结构混乱，'cookie' 应为复数 cookies 与前文一致；需要添加连词并使用一致的过去时态，'brought them to my birthday' 应补全为 'brought them to my birthday party'。建议将并列动作用逗号或连词连接并保持时态一致。

× Well I think it's better not to share some personal items such as toothbrush, your towel, your clothes that you have already worn for a long time or underwear because of the hygiene reason.

✓ Well, I think it's better not to share personal items such as a toothbrush, your towel, clothes that you have already worn for a long time, or underwear because of hygiene reasons.

名词前缺不定冠词 'a toothbrush'；'some personal items' 与列举项重复且逗号使用需调整；'the hygiene reason' 用法不当，应为复数习惯表达 'hygiene reasons'。建议注意冠词及固定搭配。

× And also I think most of the person like to keep intimate things to themselves unless those items are totally being cleaned.

✓ And also I think most people like to keep intimate things to themselves unless those items are completely cleaned.

'most of the person' 主谓不一致，应为 'most people'；'totally being cleaned' 语态和词序错误，应改为 'completely cleaned'（被完全清洗）或 'have been completely cleaned' 以符合上下文。建议使用正确的集合名词并用合适的形容词/被动结构。

× Well, I have to mention my favorite makeup product. It is a foundation and it is the Chanel blend.

✓ Well, I have to mention my favorite makeup product. It is a foundation and it is the Chanel Blend.

此处主要是大写品牌名和产品名以符合惯例；若要更自然可改为 'a Chanel foundation'。建议品牌名首字母大写并用更自然的名词短语。

× I bought it recently and it was it is so smooth when you squeeze it and applied it on your face, it make you look so gorgeous and it was so.

✓ I bought it recently and it is so smooth when you squeeze it and apply it on your face; it makes you look so gorgeous.

句中时态混用（bought recent 用现在时描述产品特性应用现在时 'is'），'applied' 應改为原形 'apply' 与 when 从句搭配，主语单数 'it' 对应动词需 'makes'。建议保持时态一致，注意主谓一致。

× It is so suitable to the weather in Guangzhou and it is resilient to the water.

✓ It is very suitable for the weather in Guangzhou and it is water-resistant.

'suitable to' 常用搭配为 'suitable for'；'resilient to the water' 表达笨拙，应使用 'water-resistant' 或 'resistant to water'。建议学习常见形容词搭配。

× Well, I would definitely share good news with my parents because they are so kind and supportive and they always support and encourage me when I face stress or difficulties.

✓ Well, I would definitely share good news with my parents because they are so kind and supportive; they always support and encourage me when I face stress or difficulties.

原句语法基本正确，仅建议用分号或句号分开重复含义的从句以提高流畅度。

× For example, recently I was struggling with the ALS exam and my parents kept saying that we believe you can do it and it really confronted me a lot.

✓ For example, recently I was struggling with the ALS exam and my parents kept saying, 'We believe you can do it,' which really helped me a lot.

原句中 'we believe you can do it' 引语需用引号并保持人称一致，'confronted me a lot' 用词错误，应为 'helped me a lot'（帮助）。建议注意搭配和人称一致性。

× Well Aisha, both happy and sad news with my friends because they are so supportive and kind and they always encourage me when I face stress or difficulties.

✓ Well, I share both happy and sad news with my friends, because they are so supportive and kind and always encourage me when I face stress or difficulties.

原句缺少谓语 'share'；应完整表达 'I share both...'。建议确保主语后有动词以构成完整句子。

× For example, I broke up with my ex or boyfriend, I called my close friend, she immediately came over and confronted me which really helped me a lot.

✓ For example, when I broke up with my ex-boyfriend, I called my close friend; she immediately came over and comforted me, which really helped me a lot.

原句不连贯且词汇用错：'ex or boyfriend' 应为 'ex-boyfriend'；'confronted me' 用词错误，应为 'comforted me'（安慰）。建议使用合适连接词并选择正确动词表达情感反应。