Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答えは直接的ですが、文法や語順の誤りが多く、意味が取りにくい箇所があります。まず時制と主語・動詞の一致を修正してください（“Yes, they did”など）。話を明確にするために、簡潔な主題文の後で一つか二つの具体例を加え、接続詞（for example, when…）を使って論理的に繋げましょう。発音や語彙も簡単で良いので、正確さを優先してください。

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they always encouraged me to give part of my snack to friends, and they explained why sharing is important for relationships.

Gợi ý: 回答は具体的で良いですが、表現の誤り（a photo, the tulip?）、語句の選択（“sheer memory”は不自然）があります。主題文で直接答え、その後に理由や具体例を一つ述べ、適切な語彙（memory, keepsake, souvenir）や接続詞（for example, so）を用いてください。

Ví dụ: I like to share photos with my friends and family. For example, when I visit a place with beautiful flowers like a tulip garden, I take pictures and send them so they can enjoy the memory too.

Gợi ý: 意見は伝わりますが、不自然な語彙やフレーズ（“money is not sweet”, “showing the money”）があります。シンプルで明確な理由を述べ、その理由を支える具体例を加えてください。また文法（uncountable noun, articles）を正しく使いましょう。

Ví dụ: I think money is not suitable for sharing in many situations. For example, lending or sharing money between friends can cause misunderstandings or arguments if it is not clearly agreed upon.

Gợi ý: 内容は良いですが、文法や流暢さに問題があります（“I shares”, 不自然な接続、“A Kyoto”など）。まず短い主題文で事実を述べ、続けて日時や相手、理由を一つ明確に述べましょう。不要なフレーズ（“Listen to me”）は避けてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, recently I shared photos from our school trip with my family and friends. Last week I visited Kyoto with a college friend, and I sent the pictures because it was a special trip.

Gợi ý: 誰に伝えたいかは分かりますが、文法（冠詞、時制、人称代名詞）と語順の誤りが多いです。まず明確な主題文で答え、その後に理由や背景（how long you have known them, example of past sharing）を一つ述べ、接続詞でつなぎましょう。

Ví dụ: I would first tell my best friend from college. We have shared many memories since university, so I always want to share good news with him first.

Gợi ý: 意図は理解できますが、文章が途切れていたり語彙選択が不適切です（“boat by a souvenir for here”は意味不明）。まず直接答え、具体性を出すために旅行のどんな部分（photos, stories, souvenirs）を共有するかを述べ、一つの例を示してください。

Ví dụ: I usually share my vacation memories with friends, especially photos and stories from trips. For example, when I go to a tulip festival I take pictures and bring back small souvenirs to show them.

× Yes I do, from where as a child I teach my parents the importance of share.

✓ Yes I did. As a child I was taught by my parents the importance of sharing.

The sentence uses incorrect tense and voice. The action refers to childhood (past), so use past tense 'did' and passive 'was taught'. 'Importance of share' is incorrect; use the gerund 'sharing'. Suggestion: use past tense and gerund for habits taught in childhood.

× So take for instance when I eat something I have to share with my friend.

✓ For instance, when I eat something I have to share it with my friends.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'share with my friend' is acceptable but inconsistent with general habit—use plural 'friends' or singular consistently. Also add object 'it'. Suggestion: include the object and ensure singular/plural consistency.

× I prefer to share the photo with my friend and family.

✓ I prefer to share photos with my friends and family.

Use plural 'photos' for general habit and plural 'friends' for consistency. Article 'the' makes it sound specific; remove it to express general preference.

× If I go to Tulip, I usually take a photo and I send this photo to my friends and parents.

✓ If I go to Tulip, I usually take photos and send them to my friends and parents.

Use plural 'photos' for habitual actions and remove redundant subject 'I' in second clause for natural flow. Use 'them' to refer back to 'photos'.

× It is a sheer memory with my friend.

✓ It is a cherished memory with my friend.

'Sheer' is the wrong adjective meaning 'complete' or 'pure'; use 'cherished' or 'precious' to express emotional value. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match intended meaning.

× The money is not sweet for sharing with others because sharing money sometimes may cause to serious trouble.

✓ Money is not good to share with others because sharing money can sometimes cause serious trouble.

Do not use 'the' with uncountable general noun 'money'. 'Not sweet' is unnatural; use 'not good to share'. Remove 'to' after 'cause'. Use 'can' instead of 'may' for general possibility.

× So in my opinion showing the money is a not good way.

✓ So in my opinion, showing money is not a good idea.

Word order and article use: 'a not good way' is incorrect. Use 'not a good idea' or 'not a good way' with correct article placement. Remove 'the' before 'money' for general statement.

× Listen to me, I shares the photo of our school trip with my family and friends.

✓ Listen to me: I shared the photos of our school trip with my family and friends.

'Shares' is wrong form; first person past 'I shared' is appropriate for a completed action. Use plural 'photos' if multiple. Also punctuation: use colon or pause.

× One week ago, I visited A Kyoto with my college friend.

✓ One week ago, I visited Kyoto with my college friend.

Use past tense 'visited' is correct; remove unnecessary article 'A' before proper noun 'Kyoto'. Suggestion: do not use articles before most place names.

× It was a very grateful time.

✓ It was a very memorable time.

'Grateful' describes a person, not a time. Use 'memorable' or 'pleasant' to describe the experience. Keep past tense 'was'.

× So back to my hometown, I share.

✓ So when I returned to my hometown, I shared them.

Tense and pronoun: 'back to my hometown, I share' is awkward and mixes tenses. Use past 'returned' and 'shared' to match previous past events; include object 'them' to refer to photos.

× Yeah, it's a my friend.

✓ Yeah, it's my friend.

Remove extra article 'a' before possessive 'my'. Possessive pronouns do not take an article.

× I have a best friend when I was a college student and also I shared a lot of memory with he.

✓ I had a best friend when I was a college student and I also shared a lot of memories with him.

Use past tense 'had' for a past time. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to many events. Use object pronoun 'him' not 'he'.

× So if I go to a good news, I would like to keep in touch him.

✓ So if I get good news, I would like to keep in touch with him.

'Go to a good news' is incorrect; use 'get' or 'receive' good news. 'Keep in touch him' requires preposition 'with'. Use conditional structure 'would like to keep in touch with him'.

× I usually share my. Vacation memory with my friend, especially traveling.

✓ I usually share my vacation memories with my friends, especially about my travels.

Incorrect punctuation 'my.' splits the sentence. Use plural 'memories' for multiple events, plural 'friends' for general sharing, and 'about my travels' to clarify the topic.

× I usually boat by a souvenir for here when I go to Tulip.

✓ I usually buy a souvenir for people here when I go to Tulip.

'Boat by' is incorrect; likely intended 'buy'. Word order and prepositions corrected: 'buy a souvenir for people here' or 'buy souvenirs here'. Ensure verb choice matches meaning.