Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief explanation), then add one or two specific examples. Avoid repetition and run-on sentences. Use linking words (for example, however) to clarify points and keep sentences within 2–3 short sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share from a young age, especially feelings and responsibilities. For example, my mother always asked me to tell her when I felt sad so she could help, and my father taught me to share household chores to learn responsibility.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and specific examples; avoid filler words and repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking phrases (for example, such as) to list items clearly. Show one concrete example of a recent thing you shared.

Ví dụ: I like to share interesting news and funny stories with my friends. For example, yesterday I told them about a surprising science story I read online, and we laughed about a silly viral video I saw an hour earlier.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a topic sentence saying what is not suitable, then give specific examples (e.g., passwords, private thoughts) and a short reason. Avoid hesitations and repetition; use linking words like because or for example.

Ví dụ: Private matters are not suitable to share because they can affect your privacy. For example, I wouldn't share passwords, medical details, or my deepest personal thoughts because they are sensitive and can be misused.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer and be specific: state what you want to share and why. Use one or two supporting details and linking words (for example, because, so) to explain. Keep sentences short and avoid uncertainty phrases like "if I have to say."

Ví dụ: Yes. Recently I have shared my future career plans with close friends because I value their advice. For example, I told a friend about my plan to study for a master's degree and asked for suggestions on preparing financially and academically.

Gợi ý: Give a clear, concise response naming the person and one reason, then add a brief example. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like because and then for sequence.

Ví dụ: I would first share good news with my mother because she supports me unconditionally. For example, when I pass an exam, I call her immediately and then tell other family members afterwards.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give 2–3 clear categories of news you share, with brief specific examples. Use linking words (for example, sometimes, or) and avoid vague phrases and repetition.

Ví dụ: I usually share news about sports, education, and national events. For example, I tell friends about our favorite player's latest match, new scholarship openings at university, or important national announcements.

× Yeah, my parents told me to share everything and not everything but always try to share your emotions if you don't feel right and also if you are feeling not well and also your core values are like responsibilities.

✓ Yes, my parents told me to share things, but not everything; they always told me to try to share my emotions if I do not feel right or if I am not feeling well, and they taught me that core values include responsibility.

The speaker mixes second-person 'your' with first-person context and uses inconsistent pronouns and phrasing. Use first-person 'my' to match 'my parents'. Also correct parallel structure: 'if I do not feel right' and 'if I am not feeling well'. Replace 'core values are like responsibilities' with 'core values include responsibility' for clarity.

× So my parents taught me to share emotion as my when I was.

✓ So my parents taught me to share my emotions when I was a child.

The original sentence is missing words and has incorrect word order ('as my when I was'). Add 'my' before 'emotions' and complete the time phrase 'when I was a child' to make the sentence grammatically complete.

× I'd I'd like to share the interesting things like the news and also the curious thing that I've heard recently and also the funny facts are like the funny things that I recently last last on hour.

✓ I'd like to share interesting things like news, curious things I've heard recently, and funny facts or stories from the last hour.

Redundant repetitions and incorrect tense/word choice ('curious thing', 'recently last last on hour'). Use plural 'things' with 'interesting' and 'news' without article; 'I've heard recently' is present perfect to link recent experiences; 'from the last hour' is correct time phrase.

× I I gossip with my friends and I I love them. I make them laughed and I.

✓ I gossip with my friends and I love them. I make them laugh.

'Make them laughed' uses past tense 'laughed' incorrectly after 'make'; use base form 'laugh'. Remove duplicate words and incomplete ending.

× I think I think some of things like personal, which is very personal and some of there is a very, very personal things which is not considered as like I, I, I prefer to not share this thing like whenever I'm doing inside and I've thinking inside myself and whatever I'm thinking in my mind and also.

✓ I think some things are very personal, and there are some extremely personal matters that I prefer not to share, especially my inner thoughts and what I am thinking.

Original contains wrong pronouns ('some of there') and awkward phrasing ('doing inside', 'I've thinking inside myself'). Use 'some things are very personal' and 'I prefer not to share my inner thoughts' for clarity and correct pronoun/reference.

× If I have to say something about that, what I have anything to share with others, I would say that my future plans because I have my good and calculated future plan.

✓ If I have anything to share with others, I would say my future plans because I have well-considered plans for the future.

The sentence repeats and mixes clauses awkwardly. Use present simple 'have anything' and condense 'good and calculated future plan' to 'well-considered plans for the future' for natural phrasing.

× But if anyone want to know about my plan, I would tell them I'll share them my I'll share my problems and obstacles with them.

✓ But if anyone wants to know about my plans, I will tell them and share my problems and obstacles with them.

Use third-person singular 'wants' to agree with 'anyone'. Avoid mixing conditional 'would' with future 'will' incorrectly. Use 'will' for a real future action. Remove redundant fragments.

× It will be grateful for me.

✓ It would be helpful for me.

'Grateful' describes a person, not a situation. Use 'helpful' or 'beneficial' to describe the effect on the speaker; 'would' matches the conditional context.

× It's absolutely it's my mother because I believe that my mother is the one who loves me unconditionally. And my father.

✓ Absolutely, it would be my mother because I believe she loves me unconditionally, and also my father.

Avoid repeating 'it's' and use 'she' to avoid repetition. Complete the fragment 'And my father' by integrating it into the sentence.

× I, I would, I would strongly, I would say strongly that I would first I'd share the news with my parents, then I'll share the whole world that I have achieved something. So it's.

✓ I would strongly say that I would share the news with my parents first; then I might tell everyone that I have achieved something.

Remove repetitive fillers and correct tense consistency: use 'would' for hypothetical preference and 'might' or 'would' for later action. 'Share the whole world' is unnatural; use 'tell everyone'.

× Well, it depends on the news because the news is often some of spores of our favorite sportsmen.

✓ Well, it depends on the news because the news is often about our favorite sportspeople or athletes.

'Spores' is incorrect word; likely meant 'sports' or 'sportspeople'. Use 'about' as the correct preposition after 'news is often'. Use gender-neutral 'sportspeople' or 'athletes'.

× Sometimes it's in it, it's about our country and also about scholarship in university or like the the common things that we we all know and we also try to know with each other.

✓ Sometimes it is about our country, scholarships at university, or other common things that we all know and share with each other.

Fix repetition and preposition misuse: 'scholarship in university' -> 'scholarships at university'. Simplify 'common things that we all know and we also try to know with each other' to 'other common things that we all know and share' for clarity.