Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は簡潔に始められていますが、文法の誤りや意味の取りにくさがあり、内容もやや曖昧です。具体的には「Our families, Lulu was.」は不明瞭で、時制や語順のミス（"we need to share the information that we've done at school"）があります。改善点：1) 明確なトピック文を作る（例: "Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child."）。2) 支持理由を1〜2文で論理的に続け、接続語（because, so, for example）を使う。3) 文法（時制・冠詞・代名詞）に注意する。練習例：過去の習慣を表す正しい表現を使う。

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. They encouraged me to tell family about my day at school because sharing helped us understand each other and stay close. For example, I would tell them about my friendship problems or what I learned in class.

Gợi ý: 意味は伝わりますが、冗長な表現と文法の誤り（"to having"、"is makes"）が目立ちます。また"lifestyle"と"hobbies"の使い分けが曖昧です。改善点：1) トピックセンテンスで直接答える（"I like to share my hobbies."）。2) 理由を接続詞で繋げ、具体例を一つ加える。3) 冗長な語を避け、文を簡潔に保つ。

Ví dụ: I like to share my hobbies with friends because talking about things I enjoy makes me relaxed and excited. For example, I often tell them about the books I read or the music I listen to, which leads to good conversations.

Gợi ý: 意図は分かりますが、文法が不自然で語彙の選択も改善できます（"dislike to share about"→"don't like to share"、"turn my score"や時制の混乱）。改善点：1) 明確なトピック文（"I don't like to share my exam results."）。2) 理由を簡潔に述べる（"because I often get lower scores"）。3) 余計な語を避け、流れを良くする。

Ví dụ: I don't like to share my exam results because I often get lower scores than my friends, and it makes me feel embarrassed. So I usually keep those results private.

Gợi ý: 伝えたい出来事はあるが、時制や表現が混在しています（"Yesterday from last week I'm on holidays"は不明瞭）。改善点：1) 時制を整える（過去の出来事なら過去形）。2) トピック文で直接答え、詳細は接続詞で補う。3) より自然な語彙（"holiday plans"、"went out together"）を使う。

Ví dụ: Yes. Last week I was on holiday, so I shared my holiday plans with a friend and we arranged to meet in the city. As a result, we met up and enjoyed a day out together.

Gợi ý: 気持ちは伝わりますが、文法や語順が不自然で意味が取りにくい箇所が多いです（"she never say no or she never fear I'm balanced about my little or my lives"）。改善点：1) 短く明確に答える（"I would tell my mother first."）。2) 理由は具体的で簡潔に（"she supports me and understands me"）。3) 不要なフレーズを避ける。

Ví dụ: I would tell my mother first because she always supports me and understands my feelings. She is the person I trust most when I have good news.

Gợi ý: 主旨は明確ですが、語彙の選択（"little teen"や"lifestyles"）と文法に改善の余地があります。改善点：1) トピック文で直接答え（"I share news about my weekly activities."）。2) 具体例を挙げ、接続語で理由を示す。3) 自然な表現（"what I did at the weekend", "it helps us relax"）を使う。

Ví dụ: I usually share news about my weekly activities with friends, like what I did on the weekend or interesting things that happened. This gives us topics to talk about and helps us relax and enjoy our conversations.

× Yes, they did. Our families, Lulu was. We need to share the information that we've done at school on that day because it's very important to know our school lifestyles and our relationship with teacher and friends.

✓ Yes, they did. My family, especially my sister Lulu, did. We need to share the things we did at school that day because it's important to know about our school life and our relationships with teachers and friends.

The original has unclear structure and incorrect references. 'Our families, Lulu was' is ungrammatical; replace with 'My family, especially my sister Lulu, did' for clarity. 'Share the information that we've done at school on that day' should be 'share the things we did at school that day' to use correct noun phrase and past reference. Use plural 'teachers' and 'friends' and singular 'school life'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use clear subjects and past tense for completed actions.

× I like to share with my friend about my hobbies because to having a good friend to talk about my favorite thing is makes me very relaxed and excited.

✓ I like to share my hobbies with my friends because having a good friend to talk about my favorite things makes me very relaxed and excited.

Errors include incorrect use of 'to having' (should be gerund 'having') and extra 'to' before 'talk', and 'is makes' (redundant). Also use plural 'friends' and 'favorite things'. Suggestion: use gerund after prepositions and avoid redundant auxiliaries: 'having a friend... makes me...'.

× So the most important thing is to share my lifestyle with my friends.

✓ So the most important thing is sharing my lifestyle with my friends.

Both forms are possible, but 'sharing' sounds more natural here. Use gerund to express general action. Suggestion: prefer 'sharing' after 'is' for habitual actions.

× I dislike to share about my exam result because I basically get a bad result more than my friends so I don't prefer to turn my score or how did I feel on the exam.

✓ I dislike sharing my exam results because I usually get worse results than my friends, so I prefer not to show my score or talk about how I felt during the exam.

Use 'dislike sharing' rather than 'dislike to share about'. 'Exam result' -> plural 'results'. 'Basically get a bad result more than my friends' -> 'usually get worse results than my friends'. 'Don't prefer to turn my score' is incorrect; use 'prefer not to show my score'. 'How did I feel' should be 'how I felt' (reported speech/past tense). Suggestion: use correct prepositions and verb forms: 'sharing', 'show', 'talk about'.

× Yesterday from last week I'm on holidays so I shared with my friend my plan during a holiday and we made some plan to meet in the city.

✓ I was on holiday last week, so I shared my holiday plans with my friend and we made plans to meet in the city.

Tense and phrasing are mixed: 'Yesterday from last week I'm on holidays' is incorrect. Use past tense 'I was on holiday last week'. 'Shared with my friend my plan during a holiday' -> 'shared my holiday plans with my friend'. 'We made some plan' -> 'we made plans'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when referring to past events and use natural collocations: 'on holiday', 'plans'.

× So sharing our planning helped me to hang out together.

✓ Sharing our plans helped us hang out together.

'Sharing our planning' is awkward; use 'sharing our plans'. 'Helped me to hang out together' conflicts subject: use 'helped us hang out together'. Suggestion: ensure subject agreement and choose natural noun forms.

× It is absolutely my mother because my mother always support me to do everything and she never say no or she never fear I'm balanced about my little or my lives.

✓ It would definitely be my mother because she always supports me in everything; she never says no and she never worries about my little issues or my life.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'my mother always support' -> 'she always supports'. 'Never say' -> 'never says'. 'She never fear I'm balanced about my little or my lives' is unclear; interpret as 'she never worries about my little issues or my life'. Use 'she' for pronoun consistency. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use clear nouns ('issues', 'life').

× I always share with my friend about my lifestyles such as my little teen during a week.

✓ I always share my lifestyle with my friends, for example small things I do during the week.

Use 'share my lifestyle' (not 'share with my friend about my lifestyles'). 'My little teen' is meaningless; likely intended 'little things' or 'small routines'. Use plural 'friends' to match habit. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and precise vocabulary.

× What did I do on weekend? It helps me to make a topic about our conversation and also help us to feel relaxed and exciting.

✓ What I did at the weekend helps me create topics for our conversations and also helps us feel relaxed and excited.

Question form 'What did I do on weekend?' is wrong in context; use statement 'What I did at the weekend'. Use 'at the weekend' or 'on the weekend' depending on dialect. 'Help us to feel relaxed and exciting' -> 'helps us feel relaxed and excited' (use 'excited' not 'exciting'). Suggestion: ensure correct prepositions for time and parallel verb forms.