Sharing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve fluency by removing hesitations (e.g., "uh") and make the response more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share toys and books during family gatherings. As a result, I learned to cooperate with other children; for example, I often took turns with a neighbor when we played board games.

Gợi ý: Good content and clarity. To raise the score, add a linking phrase and a specific example (what snack, what kind of books) and keep sentences concise. Avoid starting with vague phrase "It depends" unless you follow with specifics.

Ví dụ: I usually share snacks like fruit or cookies with my colleagues at work. I also share non-fiction and novels so we can discuss themes later, for example, I lent a memoir to a coworker and we talked about it over lunch.

Gợi ý: Very clear and relevant. Improve by adding a linking word and a brief specific consequence or reason to strengthen the answer. Keep sentences compact and natural.

Ví dụ: Personal items such as a toothbrush or underwear should not be shared because of hygiene risks. On the other hand, items like books or tools are fine to lend to friends.

Gợi ý: Strong answer with a clear example. Make it slightly more concise and correct a small grammar issue ("the city that I live" → "the city I live in"). Add a linking phrase to show purpose.

Ví dụ: Yes. I recently lent my spare car to a friend who moved to the city I live in so she could have a few months to save up and buy her own car.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and correct phrasing ("It is your usually" is incorrect). Start with a clear topic sentence naming the people, then give one brief reason and an example. Use linking words and remove filler words like "uh."

Ví dụ: I usually share good news first with my partner and my parents because they are closest to me and always supportive. For instance, when I got promoted last year, I told my partner first and we celebrated together.

Gợi ý: Clear content but streamline phrasing and avoid repetition. Use linking words and give a specific brief example of a milestone you shared with friends versus family.

Ví dụ: I share major milestones with friends, such as graduating, starting a new job, or buying a house. For example, when I bought my apartment, I invited friends to a small celebration, while everyday updates I keep for close family.

× I recently lent my spare car to a friend who just moved to the city that I live so she would have a few months to save up and buy a new car for herself.

✓ I recently lent my spare car to a friend who had just moved to the city where I live, so she would have a few months to save up and buy a new car for herself.

The original sentence mixes past and present time references and has an incorrect relative clause. Use past perfect 'had just moved' to show the friend's move occurred before the lending. Replace 'that I live' with the relative clause 'where I live' for natural English. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× It is your usually my partner and my parents because they become genuinely happy with, uh, the good news and, uh, they are the closest people in my life, so I like to share my good news with them in the first place.

✓ It is usually my partner and my parents because they become genuinely happy for the good news, and they are the closest people in my life, so I like to share my good news with them first.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'your' is incorrect and unnecessary; use 'usually' before the subject. Use the preposition 'for' with 'happy' (happy for someone) rather than 'with'. Remove filler 'in the first place' and replace with 'first' for natural phrasing. Also remove extra commas and filler 'uh'.

× Some items are personal, for example toothbrush or clothes, and I'm not comfortable with sharing them because of hygiene concerns.

✓ Some items are personal, for example a toothbrush or clothing, and I'm not comfortable sharing them because of hygiene concerns.

Mixed singular/plural: pair 'a toothbrush' (singular) with 'clothing' (uncountable) or 'toothbrushes' with 'clothes'. Using 'a toothbrush or clothing' is more natural. Also 'comfortable with sharing' is acceptable but 'comfortable sharing' is more concise. Removed extra comma.

× I also like to share my books with others because we can discuss the book later.

✓ I also like to share my books with others because we can discuss them later.

Pronoun reference: 'the book' does not agree with plural 'books'. Replace with plural pronoun 'them' to match 'books'. This is a present-tense, general statement — keeping present simple is correct.

× I learned to play with others and enjoy sharing my toys with them.

✓ I learned to play with others and to enjoy sharing my toys with them.

Parallel structure: after 'learned to' use parallel infinitives. Original mixes past 'learned' with base verb 'enjoy' without 'to'. Adding 'to enjoy' keeps verbs parallel and clear. Tense (past for learned) is appropriate.

× It depends on the situation, but I always share my snack with my colleagues at work.

✓ It depends on the situation, but I always share my snack with my colleagues at work.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No preposition change needed. Included here to indicate it meets list conditions and requires no correction.

× I usually share the news pertaining to milestones in my life, for example graduation or getting a new job or buying a house with my friends.

✓ I usually share news about milestones in my life, for example graduation, getting a new job, or buying a house, with my friends.

Quantifier and article use: 'the news pertaining to' is wordy; 'news about' is more natural. Also add commas to separate items in the list and move 'with my friends' to the end for clarity. The sentence keeps present simple appropriately.

× I usually share a small news with my close family.

✓ I usually share small news with my close family.

'News' is uncountable, so it should not take the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'small news' or better 'a little news' if a count-like sense is needed. Here 'small news' or 'a little news' are both acceptable; corrected to 'small news'.