Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yeah, when I was a child, I had a back since like when I was a grade 4 because I got a desirable grade around my school and my mom bought a gift uh bought a bike as a gift give it to me.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I can't deny that is outfashion for Chinese because of the development is so rapid. So we always take the motorbike or take a taxi so I think it's more convenient than bike.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 42.0Gợi ý: 先直接回答小时候是否有自行车,再说明大约几年级开始拥有。原回答中“back”应为“bike”;“got a desirable grade around my school”表达不清,建议说明具体原因,例如考试成绩好。避免重复说“gift”,并用过去时准确描述妈妈送车这件事。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike from around the time I was in fourth grade. I got good marks at school, so my mum bought me one as a gift. I was really excited because I could ride it around my neighbourhood.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 开头要清楚回答自行车在中国是否受欢迎,并避免“outfashion”等不自然表达;可以说“less popular than they used to be”。用一两个具体原因解释变化,并注意语法:例如“because the country has developed rapidly”。“motorbike”和“bike”含义不同,若想比较交通方式,可说明人们更常选择电动车或出租车,因为更方便。
Ví dụ: Bikes are less popular than they used to be in many cities. As public transport and ride-hailing services have improved, people often choose buses or taxis because they are more convenient for longer journeys. However, many people still cycle for exercise or short trips.
× Yeah, when I was a child, I had a back since like when I was a grade 4 because I got a desirable grade around my school and my mom bought a gift uh bought a bike as a gift give it to me.
✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I had a bike when I was in fourth grade because I got a desirable grade around my school, and my mom bought a bike as a gift and gave it to me.
表示“上四年级时”应说“in fourth grade”,不能说“was a grade 4”。这里介词应使用 in。
× Yeah, when I was a child, I had a back since like when I was a grade 4 because I got a desirable grade around my school and my mom bought a gift uh bought a bike as a gift give it to me.
✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I had a bike when I was in fourth grade because I got a desirable grade around my school, and my mom bought a bike as a gift and gave it to me.
原句中“bought a bike as a gift”后直接接“give it to me”,两个动作之间缺少合适的连接结构。可以用 and 连接两个过去发生的动作:“bought ... and gave ...”。
× Yeah, I can't deny that is outfashion for Chinese because of the development is so rapid.
✓ Yeah, I can't deny that bikes are out of fashion in China because development is so rapid.
that 引导的宾语从句缺少明确主语;此处补上 bikes,并使用 are 与复数主语搭配。另外,“because of”后应接名词短语,不能直接接完整句子;后接“development is so rapid”这样的从句时,应使用 because。
× Yeah, I can't deny that is outfashion for Chinese because of the development is so rapid.
✓ Yeah, I can't deny that bikes are out of fashion in China because development is so rapid.
“outfashion”不是这里合适的形容词表达。表示“不流行、过时”可以说“out of fashion”。请记住这个固定表达,并注意它通常用于描述某种事物是否流行。
× So we always take the motorbike or take a taxi so I think it's more convenient than bike.
✓ So we always take a motorbike or a taxi, so I think it's more convenient than riding a bike.
这里泛指任意一辆摩托车或自行车时,单数可数名词前需要冠词,因此用“a motorbike”和“a bike”。
× So we always take the motorbike or take a taxi so I think it's more convenient than bike.
✓ So we always take a motorbike or a taxi, so I think it's more convenient than riding a bike.
比较时应让比较对象在结构上对应。这里用“it's more convenient”描述交通方式,后面用“riding a bike”表示骑车这一方式,比较关系更清楚、结构也更自然。