Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did. And my mom tried to encourage me to learn how to ride a bike. But I just failed. Actually I still can't ride a bike now.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yeah, bikes are quite popular in my country. It's a great way to escape the daily hustle and bustle live city life to young people and as to adults uh but to elders they it's a great way to exercise and keep them healthy.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答切题,也补充了母亲鼓励你学骑车以及现在仍不会骑车的细节。可以把“But I just failed”改成更自然的“but I never learned to ride one”,并减少句子间不必要的“And”和“But”,让表达更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had one as a child. My mom encouraged me to learn to ride it, but I never quite got the hang of it. In fact, I still can’t ride a bike today.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: 开头直接回答了问题,也尝试按不同年龄群体解释原因,这是不错的思路。不过后半部分语法和搭配不清楚,例如“escape the daily hustle and bustle live city life”和“as to adults”;建议先说明年轻人骑车的原因,再用“while”引出老年人的原因,并使用“a great way for someone to...”结构。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For young people, cycling is a convenient way to get around and escape the hustle and bustle of city life. Older people also enjoy riding bikes because it helps them stay active and healthy.
× It's a great way to escape the daily hustle and bustle live city life to young people.
✓ It's a great way for young people to escape the daily hustle and bustle of city life.
这里表达“城市生活的喧嚣”时,应该在“hustle and bustle”和“city life”之间加介词“of”;表达“对年轻人来说”时,应使用“for young people”,并将其放在句中合适的位置。
× And my mom tried to encourage me to learn how to ride a bike. But I just failed. Actually I still can't ride a bike now. Yeah, bikes are quite popular in my country. It's a great way to escape the daily hustle and bustle live city life to young people and as to adults uh but to elders they it's a great way to exercise and keep them healthy.
✓ Yes, I did. My mom tried to encourage me to learn how to ride a bike, but I couldn't. I still can't ride a bike. Bikes are quite popular in my country. For young people, riding a bike is a great way to escape the daily hustle and bustle of city life. Adults and older people can use bikes to exercise and stay healthy.
原句把“年轻人”“成年人”和“老年人”的不同情况连在一起,但连接词和句子结构混乱;“to elders they it's”还出现了重复、冲突的主语。建议按不同人群拆分成完整句子,并用清楚的主语和谓语表达各自的情况。