Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. When I was nine years old my father bring me a bike as my birthday gift is uh, fluffle bike. It's very purple to put in my house and I can bring it when we go trip.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Actually, yes, we can see lots of public share bike industries and I live in Beijing. There was lots of bike like this. Actually, I'm not right bike of myself. I usually uh, ride the bike is.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 38.0Gợi ý: 回答内容相关,也提供了年龄、生日礼物和自行车颜色等细节,但时态错误较多,例如谈过去应说“Yes, I did”和“my father bought me”。“fluffle bike”表达不清晰,可以确认是否想说“foldable bike”(折叠自行车);“very purple to put in my house”也不自然,可改为“It was purple and easy to store”。建议用清楚的主题句开头,再补充一两个具体细节,并控制在三句话左右。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was nine, my father bought me a purple folding bike for my birthday. It was easy to store, and I could take it with me on family trips.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 30.0Gợi ý: 你表达了肯定观点,也提到了北京的共享单车,但“public share bike industries”搭配不自然,可说“shared-bike services”或“shared bikes”。注意主谓一致,例如“there are lots of bikes”。最后几句意思不完整;如果想表达自己没有自行车、平时会骑共享单车,可以直接说明。建议按“观点—具体例子—个人经历”的顺序组织答案。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially in Beijing. There are lots of shared bikes around the city, so people can easily rent one for a short trip. I don't own a bike myself, but I sometimes use a shared bike to get around.
× Yes I do.
✓ Yes, I did.
问题问的是过去(“Did you have...?”),回答也应使用过去时。将 “do” 改为 “did”,使回答与问题的时态一致。
× When I was nine years old my father bring me a bike as my birthday gift is uh, fluffle bike.
✓ When I was nine years old, my father brought me a bike as a birthday gift. It was a “fluffle” bike.
句子描述的是过去发生的事情,因此应将 “bring” 改为过去式 “brought”,并将 “is” 改为 “was”。“fluffle” 的具体含义不明确,建议确认这个词后再替换。
× I can bring it when we go trip.
✓ I can bring it when we go on a trip.
表示“去旅行”时,通常说 “go on a trip”。这里缺少介词 “on”。此外,“trip” 是可数名词单数,前面需要冠词 “a”。
× I can bring it when we go trip.
✓ I can bring it when we go on a trip.
“trip” 是可数名词单数,不能单独使用,需要在前面加不定冠词 “a”。
× There was lots of bike like this.
✓ There are lots of bikes like this.
句子描述现在有很多这样的自行车,应使用现在时 “are”。“There be” 结构中的 be 动词也要与后面的复数名词 “bikes” 保持一致。
× There was lots of bike like this.
✓ There are lots of bikes like this.
“lots of” 后面表示很多辆自行车,应使用复数名词 “bikes”,不能用单数 “bike”。
× Actually, I'm not right bike of myself.
✓ Actually, I don't ride a bike myself.
原句的主谓结构和表达方式不完整,无法正确组成英语句子。若想表达“实际上,我自己不骑自行车”,可以用 “I don't ride a bike myself”。
× I usually uh, ride the bike is.
✓ I usually, uh, ride a bike.
“ride the bike is” 中多出了没有必要的 “is”,导致句子结构不完整。删除 “is” 后,句子便有完整的主语和谓语。