Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Here's my dad brought it to me when I'm five years old, but be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, if you go to Bytown Park, you can always see a lot of people like children and their parents riding the bike together after the dinner like yeah.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 42.0Gợi ý: 先直接回答“有”,再按时间顺序说明是谁给你买的、你小时候骑车的困难以及后来是否学会。注意过去的事情要使用过去时,例如用“when I was five”而不是“when I'm five”;“be honest”应改为“to be honest”,“studied it”应改为“learned to ride it”。避免重复“by”,并可加入一个具体细节,例如摔倒的经历。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My dad got me a bike when I was five, but I wasn't very good at riding it at first. I fell off a few times and got some scrapes, but I eventually learned how to ride.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: 回答方向明确,但只提到一个公园,无法充分支持“在你们国家是否流行”这一较宽泛的问题。可以先给出清晰观点,再用公园里的观察作为例子,并补充骑车的原因或其他场景。注意说“ride bikes”和“after dinner”;删掉句尾的“like yeah”,让表达更自然、简洁。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think cycling is quite popular in my country. For example, in Bytown Park, I often see children riding bikes with their parents after dinner. It’s a fun way for families to spend time together, and some people also cycle to get around.
× Here's my dad brought it to me when I'm five years old, but be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
✓ My dad brought it to me when I was five years old, but to be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
“Here's”不能直接放在“My dad brought...”这个完整句子前面,否则会形成不正确的句子结构。可以直接以“My dad”作主语开始句子。另外,固定表达是“to be honest”,不能说“be honest”。
× Here's my dad brought it to me when I'm five years old, but be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
✓ My dad brought it to me when I was five years old, but to be honest, I'm not really good at riding the bike. I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
“When I was five years old”描述的是过去的时间,因此应使用过去式“was”,而不是现在式“am”。讲述过去发生的事情时,要注意将相应的动词改为过去式。
× I always get hurt by by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
✓ I always get hurt by riding the bike, but at last I studied it.
“by”在这里重复出现了一次。表达“因为骑车而受伤”时,使用一次“by riding”即可。检查口语或文字中的重复词,避免同一个介词连续出现。
× Yes, if you go to Bytown Park, you can always see a lot of people like children and their parents riding the bike together after the dinner like yeah.
✓ Yes, if you go to Bytown Park, you can always see a lot of people, like children and their parents, riding bikes together after dinner.
这里泛指人们骑自行车,应使用复数“bikes”,不需要定冠词“the”。“Dinner”泛指日常晚餐时通常不加“the”,所以说“after dinner”。