Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child and I I would ride it every day and I really enjoyed it. But I had it only in my countryside, so in my city I didn't have it. And it was a big problem for me because I was, I was so upset and I wanted to ride it.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Of course, I think bikes are popular in my country because it is free and you don't have to pay for it and it's easy. You can get to your destination quickly and it's really easy.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Сразу ответьте на вопрос, затем кратко объясните, где вы катались и почему велосипед был для вас важен. Уберите повторы «I I» и «I was, I was». Вместо неестественного выражения «in my countryside» скажите «in the countryside» или уточните место, например «at my grandparents’ house in the countryside». Фразу «it was a big problem» лучше заменить более точным описанием того, что вы не могли кататься в городе.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and I rode it almost every day when I was in the countryside. I really enjoyed cycling, especially during the summer holidays. I didn’t have a bike in the city, though, so I sometimes missed being able to ride.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: Дайте прямой ответ и добавьте конкретную причину или пример. Сейчас мысль о том, что велосипед «free», звучит неточно: сам велосипед нужно купить, но поездки не требуют оплаты за топливо или проезд. Не повторяйте «it’s easy»; замените повтор более конкретным преимуществом, например тем, что на велосипеде удобно преодолевать короткие расстояния или избегать пробок.
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips around town. Although buying a bike costs money, cycling itself is free and doesn’t require fuel. It can also be quicker than driving during rush hour.
× But I had it only in my countryside, so in my city I didn't have it.
✓ But I only had it in the countryside, so I didn't have it in the city.
Use the fixed expression 'the countryside' rather than 'my countryside.' Also, 'the city' is more natural here when contrasting it with the countryside. Place 'only' before 'had' to make clear that the bike was available to you only in the countryside.