Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My bike is blue and small. I liked I liked riding my bike around the neighborhood and the bike helps me to make a lot of friends.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think so because my home town is very small, so bikes are very convenient and economic for both children and adults to go to work or shopping. And it's much cheaper than drive a car or take a bus.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答切题,也补充了自行车的外观和骑车带来的社交体验。注意避免重复“I liked”,并保持过去时一致:描述童年时应将“is”改为“was”,将“helps”改为“helped”。“make a lot of friends”可以更自然地表达为“meet other children and make friends”。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a small blue bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighbourhood, where I would meet other children and make friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了明确观点,并用家乡规模小和出行成本低作为理由,内容较充分。可将“economic”改为更适合此处的“economical”,并把“go to work or shopping”改为“commute to work or go shopping”。比较结构中应使用“than driving a car or taking a bus”;还可以补充一个具体场景,让理由更有说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are popular, especially in my small hometown. They are convenient and economical for short trips, so people can cycle to work or go shopping without worrying about traffic or bus fares.
× My bike is blue and small.
✓ My bike was blue and small.
这句话描述的是你小时候的自行车,时间背景是过去,因此应使用过去式 was,而不是现在式 is。
× I liked I liked riding my bike around the neighborhood and the bike helps me to make a lot of friends.
✓ I liked riding my bike around the neighborhood, and the bike helped me make a lot of friends.
这句话描述的是童年时的经历,因此一般过去时 liked 应与 helped 保持时态一致。原句中重复的“I liked”属于口语中的重复表达,修改时已删除。
× Bikes are very convenient and economic for both children and adults to go to work or shopping.
✓ Bikes are very convenient and economical for both children and adults to get to work or go shopping.
economic 通常表示“与经济有关的”,表达“省钱、经济实惠”时应使用 economical。此外,go to work 和 go shopping 的结构应保持平行。
× Bikes are very convenient and economic for both children and adults to go to work or shopping.
✓ Bikes are very convenient and economical for both children and adults to get to work or go shopping.
原句中的“to go to work or shopping”结构不平行:to go to work 与 shopping 形式不同。可以改为“to get to work or go shopping”,使两个并列动作结构一致。
× And it's much cheaper than drive a car or take a bus.
✓ And it's much cheaper than driving a car or taking a bus.
than 后面用动词短语进行比较时,这里应使用动名词形式。drive 和 take 分别改为 driving 和 taking,并保持并列结构一致。