Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Absolutely. I had a bag when I were a child because I always rode my bike in the community with my friends after I finish my homework. And I think it's very, very, uh, fun. And I can stress my school. I, I can release my stress, school stress.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yeah, yes, I think it's very popular because in big city the traffic is very busy. Always have traffic jam. If you have a bike, you can, you can through this place very quickly and don't worry about, uh, in workplace.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: 回答有直接回应,也提供了骑车的时间、地点、同伴和原因,内容基本相关。但“bag”应改为“bike”;“I were”应改为“I was”,“I finish”应改为过去时“I finished”。“I can stress my school”表达不自然,应说“relieve my academic stress”或“reduce the stress from school”。建议减少重复词(“very, very”“And”)和语气停顿,并使用“because/so”连接句子,使答案更流畅。
Ví dụ: Absolutely. I had a bike when I was a child, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after finishing my homework. It was a lot of fun and helped me relieve the stress from school.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答观点明确,也给出了交通拥堵这一合理原因,但语法和表达问题较多。“bikes”是复数,后面应使用“they are popular”;“in big city”应改为“in big cities”;“Always have traffic jam”应改为“There are often traffic jams”;“you can through this place”应改为“you can get through the traffic quickly”或“you can travel around quickly”。最后的“don’t worry about...in workplace”意思不清,建议具体说明骑车可以帮助人们准时上班。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in big cities where traffic congestion is a serious problem. They are convenient because people can get through busy streets more quickly and avoid being late for work. They are also cheaper and more environmentally friendly than cars.
× I had a bag when I were a child because I always rode my bike in the community with my friends after I finish my homework.
✓ I had a bag when I was a child because I always rode my bike in the community with my friends after I finished my homework.
这里描述的是童年时期的经历,应该使用一般过去时。主语是“I”时,be动词的过去式应为“was”,不能用“were”。另外,“after I finish”也应改为“after I finished”,与前面的过去时保持一致。
× I had a bag when I were a child because I always rode my bike in the community with my friends after I finish my homework.
✓ I had a bag when I was a child because I always rode my bike in the community with my friends after I finished my homework.
“finish”是一般现在时,而整个句子是在谈论过去的童年经历,所以应改为过去式“finished”。讲述过去发生的事情时,要注意主句和时间从句的时态保持一致。
× Yeah, yes, I think it's very popular because in big city the traffic is very busy.
✓ Yeah, yes, I think it's very popular because in big cities the traffic is very busy.
“big city”表示泛指多个大城市时,应使用复数形式“big cities”。如果只指一个城市,也可以说“in a big city”。
× Always have traffic jam.
✓ There are always traffic jams.
英语中表示“某处有某物”或“存在某种情况”时,需要使用“There be”句型。这里“traffic jams”是复数,所以应使用“There are”。
× Always have traffic jam.
✓ There are always traffic jams.
“traffic jam”是可数名词,表示经常出现的多个交通堵塞时,应使用复数形式“traffic jams”。同时,前面需要使用“There are”来构成完整句子。
× If you have a bike, you can, you can through this place very quickly and don't worry about, uh, in workplace.
✓ If you have a bike, you can go through this place very quickly and don't have to worry about traffic at work.
情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形,不能直接接“through”。因此应说“can go through”。另外,“don't have to worry”更适合表达“不必担心”,句子结构也更完整。