Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Well, yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small ride bike my parents born from me and unknown to ride it in the park near my home. I rode it almost every day after school because it was fun and I could go out with my friends
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because Malian people use them for short distance communicating and to avoid traffic. For example, in big cities you can see also sets during rush hour and a recent bike sharing
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答结构基本清晰:先直接回答,再补充自行车的特点、使用地点、频率和原因。不过有几处词语和语法错误影响自然度,例如“small ride bike”应改为“small bike”,“born”应为“bought”,“unknown to ride it”应改为“taught me how to ride it”。此外,“go out with my friends”可以具体说明一起骑车做什么,使内容更生动。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me and taught me how to ride it in the park near my home. I rode it almost every day after school because it was fun, and I could explore the neighborhood with my friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答直接并提供了原因和例子,但有明显的搭配、词性和句子完整性问题。“Malian people”如果不是特指马里人,应改为“many people”;“short distance communicating”应改为“short-distance commuting”;“you can see also sets”表达不清,可以改为“you can see many cyclists”;“a recent bike sharing”应改为“recent bike-sharing schemes”。建议补充一个具体结果,例如骑自行车可以节省时间、减少交通拥堵或降低污染。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short-distance commuting. Many people ride them to avoid traffic, which is a serious problem in large cities. For example, during rush hour, you can see many cyclists on the roads, and bike-sharing schemes have also become more common recently.
× It was a small ride bike my parents born from me and unknown to ride it in the park near my home.
✓ It was a small bike that my parents bought for me, and I learned to ride it in the park near my home.
“ride”不能直接作为形容词修饰“bike”。这里直接说“a small bike”更准确。“unknown to ride it”表达不完整,应改为“I learned to ride it”,表示“我学会了骑车”。
× It was a small ride bike my parents born from me and unknown to ride it in the park near my home.
✓ It was a small bike that my parents bought for me, and I learned to ride it in the park near my home.
“born”表示“出生的”,不能表达“购买”。根据上下文,应使用“buy”的过去式“bought”,因为这件事发生在过去。
× It was a small ride bike my parents born from me and unknown to ride it in the park near my home.
✓ It was a small bike that my parents bought for me, and I learned to ride it in the park near my home.
“buy something for someone”表示“为某人买某物”,所以应使用介词“for”,而不是“from”。
× It was a small ride bike my parents born from me and unknown to ride it in the park near my home.
✓ It was a small bike that my parents bought for me, and I learned to ride it in the park near my home.
原句缺少清晰的主语、谓语和连接结构,导致“my parents born from me”和“unknown to ride it”无法正确表达意思。可以使用定语从句“that my parents bought for me”,并用“I learned to ride it”构成完整句子。
× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because Malian people use them for short distance communicating and to avoid traffic.
✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because people use them for communicating over short distances and for avoiding traffic.
“short distance”表示多个短距离时,应使用复数“short distances”。同时,“over short distances”是更自然的表达,表示“在短距离范围内”。
× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because Malian people use them for short distance communicating and to avoid traffic.
✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because people use them for communicating over short distances and for avoiding traffic.
表达“在短距离内交流或出行”时,通常使用“over short distances”,而不是直接把“short distance”放在“communicating”前面。另外,两个并列的用途应保持一致,可以使用“for communicating”和“for avoiding”。
× For example, in big cities you can see also sets during rush hour and a recent bike sharing.
✓ For example, in big cities, you can also see bike-sharing stations during rush hour, and bike sharing has recently become popular.
副词“also”通常放在情态动词“can”之后、实义动词“see”之前,因此应说“can also see”,而不是“can see also”。“recently”表示“最近”,应放在谓语动词附近。
× For example, in big cities you can see also sets during rush hour and a recent bike sharing.
✓ For example, in big cities, you can also see bike-sharing stations during rush hour, and bike sharing has recently become popular.
“bike sharing”在这里表示一种共享单车服务或现象,通常作为不可数概念使用,不需要冠词“a”。如果要表达具体的一个系统,应说“a bike-sharing system”。
× For example, in big cities you can see also sets during rush hour and a recent bike sharing.
✓ For example, in big cities, you can also see bike-sharing stations during rush hour, and bike sharing has recently become popular.
原句中“and a recent bike sharing”只是一个名词短语,缺少谓语动词,不能与前面的完整句子正确连接。应改为“bike sharing has recently become popular”,使后半部分也成为完整句子。