Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes I had I had the really beautiful fantastic pink bike which I it was simple for me so I decorated it with Hello Kitty stickers as it was so hard for me to use it. My dad bought me extra 2 wheels to use this bike more easily.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
No, I don't think so, as my country is Iran and uh uh, petrol is really cheap for people, so uh, access into the taxi and cars is more easier than bikes. So uh, I think it's not really umm, popular in my country.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: Yanıtınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve bisikletinizin pembe olması, Hello Kitty çıkartmaları ve babanızın yardımcı tekerlek alması gibi özgül ayrıntılar içeriyor. Ancak “I had I had”, “which I it was” ve “extra 2 wheels” ifadeleri dilbilgisi ve akıcılık açısından hatalı. “It was simple for me” yerine muhtemelen “it was difficult for me to ride” demelisiniz; ayrıca “as” bağlacının kullanımı anlamı belirsizleştiriyor. Cevabı daha doğal bir sırayla kurun: önce bisikletiniz olduğunu söyleyin, sonra görünüşünü ve neden yardımcı tekerleklere ihtiyaç duyduğunuzu açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırarak iki veya üç net cümle kullanın.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had a beautiful pink bike, which I decorated with Hello Kitty stickers. It was difficult for me to ride at first, so my dad added two training wheels to make it easier.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Ana fikriniz açık ve İran'da benzinin ucuz olması ile araba ve taksilerin daha çok tercih edilmesi arasında mantıklı bir neden-sonuç ilişkisi kuruyorsunuz. Bununla birlikte “access into the taxi and cars” doğal bir ifade değil; “people have easier access to taxis and cars” veya “taxis and cars are more convenient” demelisiniz. “More easier” yerine yalnızca “easier” kullanın ve “So I think...” ifadesini tekrar etmeyin. Dolgu ifadelerini (“uh”, “umm”) azaltarak daha akıcı bir yanıt verin; ayrıca şehirlerde bisiklet kullanımının sınırlı olduğuna dair kısa ve özgül bir ayrıntı eklerseniz içerik daha güçlü olur.
Ví dụ: No, not really. In Iran, petrol is relatively cheap, and people have easier access to cars and taxis, so they are often more convenient than bicycles. Bikes are more common among children or for exercise than for daily transportation.
× I had the really beautiful fantastic pink bike.
✓ I had a really beautiful, fantastic pink bike.
Use a instead of the because this is the first time the bike is mentioned and it is one bike among possible bikes. The definite article the is used when the listener already knows which specific bike is meant.
× which I it was simple for me
✓ which was simple for me to use
The relative pronoun which already functions as the subject of the relative clause, so the extra pronoun I is unnecessary. The pronoun it is also incorrect here because which refers to the bike.
× Yes I had I had the really beautiful fantastic pink bike which I it was simple for me so I decorated it with Hello Kitty stickers as it was so hard for me to use it.
✓ Yes, I had a really beautiful, fantastic pink bike, which was simple for me to use, so I decorated it with Hello Kitty stickers because it was difficult for me to use.
The original sentence contains a repeated subject and an incorrectly formed relative clause. It also needs punctuation to separate the main ideas and clauses. The corrected version uses one complete sentence structure with a relative clause and a reason clause.
× My dad bought me extra 2 wheels.
✓ My dad bought me two extra wheels.
When talking about more than one taxi in general, taxi must be plural: taxis. The corrected sentence refers to two wheels, so wheels is correctly plural, and the number is placed before the adjective extra.
× Access into the taxi and cars is more easier than bikes.
✓ Access to taxis and cars is easier than access to bikes.
The correct preposition after access is to, not into. We say access to something. The corrected sentence also repeats access after than to make the comparison grammatically complete.
× is more easier than bikes
✓ is easier than access to bikes
Easier is already a comparative adjective, so it cannot be used with more. Use either easier or more easy, but easier is the natural form.
× Access to taxis and cars is easier than bikes.
✓ Access to taxis and cars is easier than access to bikes.
The sentence compares access to taxis and cars with bikes, which are different types of things. For a logical comparison, compare access to taxis and cars with access to bikes.
× I think it's not really popular in my country.
✓ I think bikes are not really popular in my country.
The pronoun it does not clearly agree with the plural noun bikes. Use bikes or they when referring to bicycles in the plural.