Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do. My father brought me a bike when I was a child. He taught me how to use it so I can use it. Until now and in the future, I think bike is a very useful tool. My father gave it to me and I very appreciate that.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bike is a very useful tool. Uh, if you want to go somewhere near but you don't have a car, walk is too hot, you can use a bike. In our country we have sharing bikes. You can just scan the QR code so you can use it.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 主要问题是时态、搭配和表达重复。因为问题问的是童年经历,应将“Yes, I do”改为“Yes, I did”;“brought me a bike”应改为“bought me a bike”;“so I can use it”可改为“so I could ride it”。“Until now and in the future”不适合这里,也没有必要,可以直接说明这辆自行车对你的意义。注意说“a bike”或“bikes”,以及“really appreciate it”而不是“very appreciate that”。建议使用“直接回答 + 具体细节 + 个人感受”的三句结构。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was about eight, and he taught me how to ride it in a nearby park. I really appreciated the gift because it gave me more freedom to play with my friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答内容切题,并且提供了共享单车这个具体例子,结构基本清楚。需要改进语法和自然度:“because bike is”应改为“because bikes are”或“because they are”;“walk is too hot”不自然,可改为“walking is uncomfortable in hot weather”;“go somewhere near”应改为“go somewhere nearby”;“sharing bikes”更自然的说法是“shared bikes”或“bike-sharing services”。可以使用“Also”或“As a result”等连接词,让例子和观点衔接更顺畅,并减少“you can use it”的重复。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and affordable. For short trips, people often choose a bike instead of walking, especially in hot weather. In addition, bike-sharing services are common in cities, and users can simply scan a QR code to rent one.
× Yes, I do.
✓ Yes, I did.
问题是时态不一致。考官使用了过去时“Did you have...?”,所以回答应该使用过去时“did”,而不是现在时“do”。
× He taught me how to use it so I can use it.
✓ He taught me how to use it so I could use it.
“taught”是过去时,因此表示当时学习目的或结果时,后面的情态动词也应使用过去形式“could”。同时,使用“could”可以保持整句话的时态一致。
× Until now and in the future, I think bike is a very useful tool.
✓ Until now and in the future, I think a bike is a very useful tool.
“bike”是可数名词单数,前面不能直接使用,必须加冠词。这里可以使用不定冠词“a”,表示自行车这一类交通工具。
× My father gave it to me and I very appreciate that.
✓ My father gave it to me and I really appreciate that.
“very”通常不能直接修饰动词“appreciate”。修饰动词时应使用“really”,并放在主语之后、主要动词之前,所以应说“I really appreciate that”。
× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bike is a very useful tool.
✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because a bike is a very useful tool.
“bike”是可数名词单数,前面需要冠词。这里使用“a bike”表示“一辆自行车”或自行车这一类工具。
× Uh, if you want to go somewhere near but you don't have a car, walk is too hot, you can use a bike.
✓ Uh, if you want to go somewhere nearby but you don't have a car, and walking is too hot, you can use a bike.
原句把条件从句和主句直接连接在一起,句子结构不完整且连接混乱。应使用“if”引导条件,并用“and”连接两个条件,最后再接主句“you can use a bike”。
× Uh, if you want to go somewhere near but you don't have a car, walk is too hot, you can use a bike.
✓ Uh, if you want to go somewhere near but you don't have a car, and walking is too hot, you can use a bike.
“walk”在这里表示“走路”这一活动,需要使用动名词“walking”作主语。表示一种活动时,通常使用“动词-ing形式”,例如“Walking is good exercise”。
× In our country we have sharing bikes.
✓ In our country, we have shared bikes.
“shared”是过去分词,可以作形容词,表示“共享的”。“sharing bikes”通常表示“正在分享自行车”,不符合这里想表达的“共享单车”的意思。