Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer, then explain when you got the bike and how you felt about it. Avoid repetition such as “my family,” “my sister,” and “both me and my sister.” Use linking words such as “when” and “as a result” to connect your ideas. Complete your final sentence and describe the bike or a specific memory instead of stopping at “I was so.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was about eight, my father bought my sister and me bicycles during a family trip. Mine was pink, and I was extremely excited because it was my first bike. I used to ride it around our neighborhood with my friends.

Gợi ý: Give a complete and grammatically accurate opening sentence, such as “No, bikes are not very popular in my country.” Avoid repeated words and unfinished phrases. Explain the main reason clearly and add a specific comparison or example. Use a linking word such as “because” or “although” to make the answer more coherent.

Ví dụ: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer to drive because cars are more comfortable and convenient for travelling long distances. In addition, the weather is extremely hot for much of the year, so people usually avoid cycling during the day.

× my dad uh bought me and my sister, both me and my sister like bikes

✓ My dad bought both my sister and me bikes.

When a pronoun follows a verb as its object, use the object form. Therefore, me is correct, not I. The phrase both me and my sister is also unnecessarily repeated. Use both my sister and me once.

× Yeah, I Remember Me and my my family went on a family like trip and my dad uh bought me and my sister, both me and my sister like bikes and we were so happy.

✓ Yeah, I remember that my family and I went on a family trip, and my dad bought both my sister and me bikes. We were so happy.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without a clear structure. Use that after remember to introduce the clause, use my family and I as the subject, and divide the long sentence into shorter, clearer sentences.

× It was like a pink colored bike and I was so.

✓ It was a pink-colored bike, and I was so happy.

The second clause is incomplete because the adjective so needs a word that completes its meaning, such as happy. The two complete ideas can be joined with and.

× No, not very popular people in my country.

✓ No, bikes are not very popular among people in my country.

The original sentence does not contain a main verb. Add are to form the verb phrase are not very popular. The preposition among is more natural when referring to popularity within a group of people.

× Usually they, they mostly use their cars to get to whatever place they want. They want to be, uh, or they headed to, uh, they don't, they don't usually use bikes cause of the high temperatures and.

✓ They mostly use their cars to get wherever they want to go. They do not usually use bikes because of the high temperatures.

The original passage contains repeated subjects, an incomplete phrase, and a sentence fragment. Combine the first idea into a complete sentence with wherever they want to go, and remove the unfinished phrase they want to be or they headed to.

× they don't usually use bikes cause of the high temperatures and.

✓ They do not usually use bikes because of the high temperatures.

The conjunction and cannot be left at the end of a sentence because it should connect the sentence to another idea. Remove the unnecessary and. In formal speaking, use because of instead of the informal shortened form cause of.