Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did have it, uh, it was in red and pink color and it was named as a ladybird cycle and it has a basket in front of it. I used to ride it after coming from the school every evening. I enjoyed it a lot.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, bikes are popular in our country. First of all, our country is Indian country where uh, we don't have uh, any clean roads. They are very bumpy. So it's better to have a bike and there are varieties of bikes available in India like Activa, Axis, Scooty, etcetera.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: Answer the question directly with “Yes, I did” and then describe the bike using natural phrases such as “red and pink” instead of “in red and pink color.” Use the past tense consistently: “It had a basket” and “It was called a Ladybird bicycle,” rather than “it has” and “it was named as.” Avoid unnecessary fillers such as “uh” and the repeated conjunction “and.” You could also add one specific detail about where you rode it or how you felt.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. It was a red-and-pink Ladybird bicycle with a small basket at the front. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every evening after school, and I really enjoyed the feeling of being independent.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Give a clear reason for bikes’ popularity, but avoid the unnatural phrase “our country is Indian country”; say “India” or “my country.” Also, “clean roads” does not express your intended meaning, so use “smooth roads” or “well-maintained roads.” Use accurate vocabulary: Activa and Axis are scooter models, so you could say “There are many types and models of two-wheelers.” Connect your ideas more smoothly with words such as “because,” “also,” and “for example,” and avoid fillers and the vague ending “etcetera.”
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes and scooters are extremely popular in India. One reason is that they are convenient on busy, congested roads, and they are also more affordable than cars. In addition, many people use them for short daily commutes because they are easy to park. Popular models include the Honda Activa and TVS Jupiter.
× Yes, I did have it, uh, it was in red and pink color and it was named as a ladybird cycle and it has a basket in front of it.
✓ Yes, I did have it. It was red and pink, and it had a basket in front of it.
The question refers to the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Has is the present-tense form, while had is the correct past-tense form. Also, red and pink is sufficient; color is unnecessary here.
× It was named as a ladybird cycle.
✓ It was called a ladybird cycle.
The verb call is normally followed directly by the name or description. We do not usually use as after called in this structure. Use called a ladybird cycle instead of named as a ladybird cycle.
× First of all, our country is Indian country where uh, we don't have uh, any clean roads.
✓ First of all, India is a country where we do not have any clean roads.
Country is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a when used in the phrase a country. India is also the correct noun for the name of the country; Indian is an adjective.