Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did when I was a child. I have a pink bag which was bought by my father as a present to me. I like this very much and I go to school. Bye bye.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think blacks are probably in my country because it is very convenient for people to go to work by bike and. It's very good.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: 回答开头直接回答了问题,但后面的内容不够连贯。“pink bag”与自行车没有明显联系,可能是想说“pink bike”。此外,“I like this very much and I go to school”表达不自然,应该说明你如何使用自行车,例如骑车上学。建议使用过去时描述童年经历,并用“because”“so”等连接词补充具体细节。不要说“Bye bye”,这在雅思口语回答中不必要。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My father gave me a pink bike when I was about eight years old, and I was really excited about it. I often rode it to school and around my neighborhood because it was fun and convenient.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 30.0Gợi ý: 你的回答包含了观点和原因,但“blacks”应为“bikes”,而且“are probably in my country”表达不自然,可以改为“are popular in my country”。句子中出现了“And”后断句的问题,整体不够流畅。“It’s very good”过于笼统,建议具体说明骑自行车的优点,例如便宜、环保、避免交通拥堵。可以使用“especially”“because”“for example”等连接和拓展答案。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people ride them to work because they are inexpensive and environmentally friendly. They can also help people avoid traffic jams during rush hour.
× I have a pink bag which was bought by my father as a present to me.
✓ I had a pink bike that my father bought for me as a present.
题目询问的是童年时期的经历,因此应使用一般过去时。将 have 改为 had,表示过去拥有。这里使用 bought 比 was bought 更自然。
× I like this very much and I go to school.
✓ I liked it very much, and I went to school on it.
这句话继续描述童年时期的经历,所以 like 和 go 都应改为过去式 liked 和 went。
× I like this very much and I go to school.
✓ I liked it very much, and I went to school on it.
this 通常用于指代眼前或刚刚提到的事物。这里指的是前面提到的自行车,使用 it 更自然,也能避免指代不清。
× Yes, I think blacks are probably in my country because it is very convenient for people to go to work by bike and. It's very good.
✓ Yes, I think bikes are probably popular in my country because they are very convenient for people to use to go to work. They are very good.
原句中“blacks are probably in my country”缺少合适的表语,表达不完整;“and.”也构成了不完整的句子。应使用“bikes are probably popular”表达“自行车很受欢迎”,并将句子完整连接。
× because it is very convenient for people to go to work by bike
✓ because they are very convenient for people to use to go to work
it 指代单数事物,但前面的主语是复数 bikes,因此应使用复数代词 they。代词必须与所指代的名词在单复数上保持一致。