Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly, then give a brief and specific explanation. Correct the grammar in “when I was on my ten years old birthday” by saying “on my tenth birthday.” Avoid using both “but” and “however,” as they express the same contrast. Keep your verb tenses consistent: use “felt” and “wasn’t” when describing your childhood. Also, “quit it” is unnatural here; say “stopped riding it” instead. Try to explain what you used the bike for or why your interests changed.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I got my first bike on my tenth birthday and often rode it around my neighborhood. However, I stopped riding it when I was thirteen because I became less interested in outdoor activities and preferred spending time indoors.

Gợi ý: State your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons related to Hong Kong. Replace “As a part of Hong Kong citizen” with “As a Hong Kong resident” and “value about efficiency” with “value efficiency.” The phrase “whether it is time costly” is unnatural; say “whether it saves time” or “how much time it takes.” Avoid repeating “I don’t think so” and do not use both “even though” and “but” in the same sentence. You could mention crowded roads, limited cycling infrastructure, or the efficiency of public transport.

Ví dụ: I don’t think bikes are particularly popular in Hong Kong. As a Hong Kong resident, I think people place a high value on convenience and saving time. Although cycling is environmentally friendly, it can be inconvenient because the roads are crowded and public transport is usually faster and more reliable.

× I first received it when I was on my ten years old birthday.

✓ I first received it on my tenth birthday.

In an age-related compound expression, year must be singular, as in a ten-year-old child. However, when referring to a birthday, the natural form is the ordinal adjective tenth birthday, not ten years old birthday.

× But however, I just abandoned it after I turned thirteen because I feel like I'm not that enthusiastic about outdoor activities so I kind of just quit it.

✓ However, I abandoned it after I turned thirteen because I was not very enthusiastic about outdoor activities, so I stopped using it.

But and however should not normally be used together because they serve the same contrasting function. Use either but or however. The correction also uses stopped using it, which is more natural for a bike than quit it.

× I just abandoned it after I turned thirteen because I feel like I'm not that enthusiastic about outdoor activities.

✓ I abandoned it after I turned thirteen because I felt that I was not very enthusiastic about outdoor activities.

The sentence describes past events, including receiving the bike, turning thirteen, and abandoning it. Therefore, feel should change to felt, and am should change to was to maintain consistent past-tense narration.

× As a part of Hong Kong citizen, we really value about efficiency and whether it is time costly.

✓ As a Hong Kong citizen, I really value efficiency and consider whether something is time-consuming.

As a part of Hong Kong citizen is not a correctly structured expression for describing personal identity. Use as a Hong Kong citizen for one person. Also, the sentence should use a clear subject and verb structure: I value efficiency and consider whether something is time-consuming.

× We really value about efficiency.

✓ We really value efficiency.

The verb value is transitive and does not take the preposition about before its object. Say value efficiency, not value about efficiency.

× Whether it is time costly.

✓ Whether it is time-consuming.

Time-consuming is the standard adjective meaning requiring a lot of time. Time costly is not the natural adjective choice in this context.

× Even though bike is is an eco friendly choice but somehow it is not convenient at all.

✓ Even though a bike is an eco-friendly choice, it is not convenient at all.

A singular countable noun such as bike needs an article, so use a bike. Eco-friendly is normally written with a hyphen when it functions as a compound adjective before a noun. Also, the repeated is has been removed.

× Even though bike is is an eco friendly choice but somehow it is not convenient at all.

✓ Even though a bike is an eco-friendly choice, it is not convenient at all.

Even though already introduces a contrast, so it should not be followed by but in the same clause. Remove but and use a comma before the main clause.

× Even though bike is is an eco friendly choice but somehow it is not convenient at all.

✓ Even though bikes are an eco-friendly choice, they are not convenient at all.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes and the plural pronoun they. The singular form a bike is also possible when referring to one representative bike, but it must be used consistently with it.